July 31, 2021
A short dialogue
(In a badly-lit classroom there are Bill and Cassidy. The former, a funny, talkative guy. The latter, a rude, quiet guy. After half an hour of class, the teacher, an indifferent philosophy professor, went out to receive a call. Bad news, surely.)
(Bill, without hesitation, address Cassidy.)
B: Are you the one who works on metaphysics?
C: I'm not. Who are you?
B: Bill, nice to meet you. I do metaphysics... too.
C: What are you? A Platonist or an Aristotelian?
B: I would call myself an Aristotelian biased towards the analytical philosophy.
C: So, you intend to teach modern logic to Aristotle... You better teach yourself Greek. Otherwise you'll be dealing with the phantom of a phantom.
B: Phantom of what? I see you're versed in speaking gibberish.
C: That's one of my honed-skills.
A short dialogue
(IBill and Cassidy are in a badly- lit classroom there are Bill and Cassidy. The former, a funny, talkative guy. The latter, a rude, quiet guy. After half an hour of class, the teacher, an indifferent philosophy professor, wentgoes out to receive a call. Bad news, surely. )
No need for a hyphen in "badly lit."
https://prowritingaid.com/grammar/1000138/How-to-use-hyphen-after-adverbs#:~:text=When%20a%20hyphen%20connects%20an,hyphen%20(e.g.%20highly%20regarded).
(Bill, without hesitation, addresses Cassidy. )
B: Are you the one who works on metaphysics?
C: No, I'm not.
Sounds more natural this way.
Who are you?
B: I'm Bill, n. Nice to meet you.
I do metaphysics..., too.
Might sound better to say "I study metaphysics, too."
C: What are you?
A Platonist or an Aristotelian?
B: I would call myself an Aristotelian biased towards the analytical philosophy.
C: So, you intend to teach modern logic to Aristotle... You better teach yourself Greek.
Not sure if "to Aristotle" is what you mean? Like...teaching Aristotle, the philosopher, modern logic?
Otherwise, you'll be dealing with the phantom of a phantom.
B: Phantom of what?
I see you're versed in speaking gibberish.
C: That's one of my honed- skills.
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Aug. 2, 2021
Thank you!
A short dialogue
(In a badly-lit classroom there are Bill and Cassidy. The former, a funny, talkative guy. The latter, a rude, quiet guy. After half an hour of class, the teacher, an indifferent philosophy professor, went out to receive a call. Bad news, surely. )
(Bill, without hesitation, addresses Cassidy. )
B: Are you the one who works on metaphysics?
C: I'm not.
Perfectly grammatical, but it strikes me as a slightly weird answer to the question, for some reason. I think it's much more natural to say "No" or "No, I'm not". Maybe "Not me".
Of course maybe you want him to say slightly weird things :)
Who are you?
B: Bill, nice to meet you.
I do metaphysics... too.
"too"? Is he just ignoring Cassidy's denial?
C: What are you?
A Platonist or an Aristotelian?
B: I would call myself an Aristotelian biased towards the analytical philosophy.
"philosophy" is often uncountable, but I can definitely imagine that these two might think of philosophies as countable. In most contexts, though, "biased towards analytical philosophy".
C: So, you intend to teach modern logic to Aristotle... You better teach yourself Greek.
Technically, "You'd better" or "You had better" - but dropping the "had" here is, I think, a perfectly valid colloquialism, especially an American one.
Otherwise you'll be dealing with the phantom of a phantom.
B: Phantom of what?
I see you're versed in speaking gibberish.
C: That's one of my well-honed- skills.
"well-honed" is a very common expression, "honed" alone sounds quite strange to me.
July 31, 2021
I agreed with all of secretpostman's corrections/suggestions so I just upvoted them rather than add another layer of comments.
A rather strange read! I'm curious about these characters - do you intend to write more?
Aug. 1, 2021
Thank you all! I'll try to write more about them.
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(In a badly-lit classroom there are Bill and Cassidy. The former, a funny, talkative guy. The latter, a rude, quiet guy. After half an hour of class, the teacher, an indifferent philosophy professor, went out to receive a call. Bad news, surely. ) (In a badly-lit classroom there are Bill and Cassidy. The former, a funny, talkative guy. The latter, a rude, quiet guy. After half an hour of class, the teacher, an indifferent philosophy professor, went out to receive a call. Bad news, surely. ( No need for a hyphen in "badly lit." https://prowritingaid.com/grammar/1000138/How-to-use-hyphen-after-adverbs#:~:text=When%20a%20hyphen%20connects%20an,hyphen%20(e.g.%20highly%20regarded). |
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C: I'm not. C: I'm not. Perfectly grammatical, but it strikes me as a slightly weird answer to the question, for some reason. I think it's much more natural to say "No" or "No, I'm not". Maybe "Not me". Of course maybe you want him to say slightly weird things :) C: No, I'm not. Sounds more natural this way. |
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C: So, you intend to teach modern logic to Aristotle... You better teach yourself Greek. C: So, you intend to teach modern logic to Aristotle... You better teach yourself Greek. Technically, "You'd better" or "You had better" - but dropping the "had" here is, I think, a perfectly valid colloquialism, especially an American one. C: So, you intend to teach modern logic to Aristotle... You better teach yourself Greek. Not sure if "to Aristotle" is what you mean? Like...teaching Aristotle, the philosopher, modern logic? |
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C: That's one of my honed-skills. C: That's one of my well-honed "well-honed" is a very common expression, "honed" alone sounds quite strange to me. C: That's one of my honed |
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