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Dani

March 25, 2022

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A restaurant review

Discovering the Beer World
There is a place in my town where you can taste different types of beers, but in a more interesting way.
This pub has a special menu which you can try a broad variety of beers while you eat various dishes according with the selected beer savour.
In addition, you can enjoy the experience in a able isolated from the pub tumult. The table is enough big to spend the time with some friends what enlighten the experience.
Furthermore, each beer is explained by the owner, this way all of you learn about the history of brewing industry, the class of beers, the reason of theirs flavours...
Although the whole menu isn't cheap, I think it's worthy and recommend anyone who likes beer to give it an opportunity. Even i you don't tolerate gluten they adapt the food and the beers to gluten free versions!


B2 Exam writing part 2 - A review

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A restaurant review

Discovering the Beer World of Beer

In English, when you're using "world" to mean all the things related to a topic/included in a topic, you put "world of" before the noun.

There is a place in my town where you can taste different types of beers, but in a more interesting way than usual.

When you say that something is more or less than something else, it's often good to say what it's more or less interesting than. Otherwise, and English speaker might think, "More interesting than WHAT?"

This pub has a special menu from which you can tryorder a broad variety of beers while you eat various dishes accordingthat go with the selected beer s's flavour.

Savour is usually used as a verb in English. Your use isn't necessarily wrong, but it sounds odd in normal speech.

In aAdditionally, you can enjoy the experience inat a table that's isolated from the pub's tumult.

The table is big enough big to spend the time with some friends what to ?enlighten? the experience.

I'm not sure what you are trying to say by using "enlighten" here, so that's why I added question marks. I think you are looking for a different verb.

Furthermore, each beer is explained by the owner, tthe owner teaches you about each beer. This way, all of you learn about the history of the brewing industry, the clasypes of beers, the reasonsource of theirs flavours...

In English, it usually sounds better to use the active voice. Instead of saying that the beer is explained by the owner, you'd want to say that the owner explains the beer. I replaced the word "explains" with "teaches" because people usually use "explain" to talk about helping somebody understand complex problems, motivations, or confusing issues.

Calling a type of thing a "class" is formal in English, so I replaced "class of beers" with "types of beers."

Although the whole menu isfood and drink aren't cheap, I think it'the restaurant is worthywhile and recommend that anyone who likes beer to give it an opportunit try.

Even iIf you don't tolerate gluten, they adapt the food and the beers to gluten free versionoffer gluten free versions of the food and beers!

"Even" isn't necessary. "Even if you don't tolerate gluten, they adapt the food..." makes it sound like some restaurants that offer gluten-free options might refuse to offer them to people who can't tolerate gluten.

In English, if you're listing things, you don't need to put "the" in front of each thing. You only need to put "the" in front of the first thing in the list, and it's implied for the rest of the things in the list.

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Good job! Your review makes me want to visit this restaurant. :)

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Dani

March 28, 2022

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Thanks for such a extensive explanations. I get very useful tips.

A restaurant review

Discovering the Beer World

There is a place in my hometown where you can taste different types of beers, but in a more interesting way.

Unless you literally own the town (or think you do ;)).

This pub has a special menu from which you can try a broad variety of beers while you eat various dishes according withmatching the selected beer sflavour.

In addition, you can enjoy the experience inat a table that is isolated from the pub tumultcommotion in the pub.

Your "tumult" isn't wrong, it's just not commonly used in such a context.

The table is big enough big to spend the time there with some friends whatto share the enlighten theing experience.

I wasn't sure what exactly you were trying to say here. Alternatively: "... with some friends to make the experience easier/more pleasant"

Furthermore, each beer is explained by the owner, this way all of you learn about the history of the brewing industry, the classes of beers, the reason ofs for theirs different flavours...

Although the whole menu isn't cheap, I think it's worthywhile and I recommend it to anyone who likes beer to give it an opportunit try.

Even i you don't tolerate gluten theyIf you are gluten-intolerant they even adapt the food and the beers to gluten free versions!

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Dani

March 28, 2022

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Thanks again diggn

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diggn

March 28, 2022

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Always a pleasure.

This pub has a special menu from which you can try a broad variety of beers while you eat various dishes according withto the selected beer savour.

Incorrect use of preposition.

In addition, you can enjoy the experience in an able and isolated from the pub tumult.

Wrong article. Use a conjunction too.

The table is big enough big to spend the time with some friends wthat enlightens the experience.

Furthermore, each beer is explained by the owner, this way all of youyou can learn about the history of brewing industry, the class of beers, the reason of theirs flavours...

Although the whole menu isn't cheap, I think it's worthy and I recommend it to anyone who likes beer to give it an opportunitys.

Even i youI don't tolerate gluten t. They adapt the food and the beers to gluten free versions!

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Hi! You need to work on the basics of grammar such as prepostions, conjunctions, formation of sentences, periods (.) .

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Dani

March 28, 2022

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Thanks I can see this wasn't my best writing. I have to keep up working on it.

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Discovering the Beer World


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Discovering the Beer World of Beer

In English, when you're using "world" to mean all the things related to a topic/included in a topic, you put "world of" before the noun.

There is a place in my town where you can taste different types of beers, but in a more interesting way.


There is a place in my hometown where you can taste different types of beers, but in a more interesting way.

Unless you literally own the town (or think you do ;)).

There is a place in my town where you can taste different types of beers, but in a more interesting way than usual.

When you say that something is more or less than something else, it's often good to say what it's more or less interesting than. Otherwise, and English speaker might think, "More interesting than WHAT?"

This pub has a special menu which you can try a broad variety of beers while you eat various dishes according with the selected beer savour.


This pub has a special menu from which you can try a broad variety of beers while you eat various dishes according withto the selected beer savour.

Incorrect use of preposition.

This pub has a special menu from which you can try a broad variety of beers while you eat various dishes according withmatching the selected beer sflavour.

This pub has a special menu from which you can tryorder a broad variety of beers while you eat various dishes accordingthat go with the selected beer s's flavour.

Savour is usually used as a verb in English. Your use isn't necessarily wrong, but it sounds odd in normal speech.

In addition, you can enjoy the experience in a able isolated from the pub tumult.


In addition, you can enjoy the experience in an able and isolated from the pub tumult.

Wrong article. Use a conjunction too.

In addition, you can enjoy the experience inat a table that is isolated from the pub tumultcommotion in the pub.

Your "tumult" isn't wrong, it's just not commonly used in such a context.

In aAdditionally, you can enjoy the experience inat a table that's isolated from the pub's tumult.

The table is enough big to spend the time with some friends what enlighten the experience.


The table is big enough big to spend the time with some friends wthat enlightens the experience.

The table is big enough big to spend the time there with some friends whatto share the enlighten theing experience.

I wasn't sure what exactly you were trying to say here. Alternatively: "... with some friends to make the experience easier/more pleasant"

The table is big enough big to spend the time with some friends what to ?enlighten? the experience.

I'm not sure what you are trying to say by using "enlighten" here, so that's why I added question marks. I think you are looking for a different verb.

Furthermore, each beer is explained by the owner, this way all of you learn about the history of brewing industry, the class of beers, the reason of theirs flavours...


Furthermore, each beer is explained by the owner, this way all of youyou can learn about the history of brewing industry, the class of beers, the reason of theirs flavours...

Furthermore, each beer is explained by the owner, this way all of you learn about the history of the brewing industry, the classes of beers, the reason ofs for theirs different flavours...

Furthermore, each beer is explained by the owner, tthe owner teaches you about each beer. This way, all of you learn about the history of the brewing industry, the clasypes of beers, the reasonsource of theirs flavours...

In English, it usually sounds better to use the active voice. Instead of saying that the beer is explained by the owner, you'd want to say that the owner explains the beer. I replaced the word "explains" with "teaches" because people usually use "explain" to talk about helping somebody understand complex problems, motivations, or confusing issues. Calling a type of thing a "class" is formal in English, so I replaced "class of beers" with "types of beers."

Although the whole menu isn't cheap, I think it's worthy and recommend anyone who likes beer to give it an opportunity.


Although the whole menu isn't cheap, I think it's worthy and I recommend it to anyone who likes beer to give it an opportunitys.

Although the whole menu isn't cheap, I think it's worthywhile and I recommend it to anyone who likes beer to give it an opportunit try.

Although the whole menu isfood and drink aren't cheap, I think it'the restaurant is worthywhile and recommend that anyone who likes beer to give it an opportunit try.

Even i you don't tolerate gluten they adapt the food and the beers to gluten free versions!


Even i youI don't tolerate gluten t. They adapt the food and the beers to gluten free versions!

Even i you don't tolerate gluten theyIf you are gluten-intolerant they even adapt the food and the beers to gluten free versions!

Even iIf you don't tolerate gluten, they adapt the food and the beers to gluten free versionoffer gluten free versions of the food and beers!

"Even" isn't necessary. "Even if you don't tolerate gluten, they adapt the food..." makes it sound like some restaurants that offer gluten-free options might refuse to offer them to people who can't tolerate gluten. In English, if you're listing things, you don't need to put "the" in front of each thing. You only need to put "the" in front of the first thing in the list, and it's implied for the rest of the things in the list.

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