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kiwy

Sept. 21, 2021

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A Quiet Day

My nephew is so naughty that I don't want to stay with him. I stayed in bed for a long time. When I got up, he was going to visit his granparents with my parents. I preferred to stay at home, because I didn't want to waste fo time in transport and I want to stay alone.
I read some novels and wrote my English resume for APS interview. There was only a disadvantage: no one cooked lunch for me. I ate something which was left in the refrigerator.
The smoking boy asked by Wechat that whether he needed to admit a form to me if he had a fever. I asked the person in charge of public hygiene. She told me that the school never asked for a form. Ok, I knew that the boy just wanted to talk with me. But I told him that he had better stay at home until he was good enough. Although he was quiet in class, I still didn't want him in class because he lied a lot. I don't like the liers and will never believe their words again.
He is quite different online from real life. He talked so much online, even asked some questions which I thought he knew the answers while I didn't. What strange was that whenever I appeared in his eyesight, his eyes were always on me, but he never talked to me.

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A Quiet Day

My nephew is so naughty that I don't want to stay with him.

I stayed in bed for a long time this morning.

When I got up, he was going to visit his grandparents together with my parents.

I preferropted to stay at home, because I didn't want to waste fo time in transportgetting over there and I wanted to staybe alone.

I read some novels and wrote my English resume for APS interview.

I noticed this in your last journal too: 'read some novels' implies that you are reading multiple books at once, and maybe that you've actually read them start-to-finish in that one day. If it's multiple, maybe "read some from my novels," if singular then "read a bit/some of my novel/book" or "read my book".

There was only a disadvantagone downside: no one cooked lunch for me.

Only a disadvantage: There was 1 disadvantage and no advantages
Only one disadvantage: There was 1 disadvantage, unknown no. of advantages

I ate something which was left leftovers that were in the refridgerator.

The student who I had caught smoking boy asked byme over Wechat that whether he needed to adsubmit a form to me if he had a fever or not.

Alternatively, "whether or not..."

I asked the person in charge of public hygienestudent health.

"Public" is more like 公共

She told me that the school never asked fordoesn't require such a form.

Ok, I knew now that the boy just wanted to talk with me.

But I told him that he had better stay at home until he was good enoughwell.

Although he was quiet in class, I still didn't want him in class, because he lied a lot.

I don't like the liears and will never believe their words ever again.

He is quite different online fromcompared to real life.

He talked sto much online,e a lot on WeChat, and even asked some questions which I thought he knew the answers whileto, though I didn't.

What strange was that whenever I appeared in his eyesightwas in front of him, his eyes were always on me, but he never talked to me.

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Nice writing! Interested in how this develops. Hope you had a restful break.

A Quiet Day


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My nephew is so naughty that I don't want to stay with him.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I stayed in bed for a long time.


I stayed in bed for a long time this morning.

When I got up, he was going to visit his granparents with my parents.


When I got up, he was going to visit his grandparents together with my parents.

I preferred to stay at home, because I didn't want to waste fo time in transport and I want to stay alone.


I preferropted to stay at home, because I didn't want to waste fo time in transportgetting over there and I wanted to staybe alone.

I read some novels and wrote my English resume for APS interview.


I read some novels and wrote my English resume for APS interview.

I noticed this in your last journal too: 'read some novels' implies that you are reading multiple books at once, and maybe that you've actually read them start-to-finish in that one day. If it's multiple, maybe "read some from my novels," if singular then "read a bit/some of my novel/book" or "read my book".

There was only a disadvantage: no one cooked lunch for me.


There was only a disadvantagone downside: no one cooked lunch for me.

Only a disadvantage: There was 1 disadvantage and no advantages Only one disadvantage: There was 1 disadvantage, unknown no. of advantages

I ate something which was left in the refrigerator.


I ate something which was left leftovers that were in the refridgerator.

The smoking boy asked by Wechat that whether he needed to admit a form to me if he had a fever.


The student who I had caught smoking boy asked byme over Wechat that whether he needed to adsubmit a form to me if he had a fever or not.

Alternatively, "whether or not..."

I asked the person in charge of public hygiene.


I asked the person in charge of public hygienestudent health.

"Public" is more like 公共

She told me that the school never asked for a form.


She told me that the school never asked fordoesn't require such a form.

Ok, I knew that the boy just wanted to talk with me.


Ok, I knew now that the boy just wanted to talk with me.

But I told him that he had better stay at home until he was good enough.


But I told him that he had better stay at home until he was good enoughwell.

Although he was quiet in class, I still didn't want him in class because he lied a lot.


Although he was quiet in class, I still didn't want him in class, because he lied a lot.

I don't like the liers and will never believe their words again.


I don't like the liears and will never believe their words ever again.

He is quite different online from real life.


He is quite different online fromcompared to real life.

He talked so much online, even asked some questions which I thought he knew the answers while I didn't.


He talked sto much online,e a lot on WeChat, and even asked some questions which I thought he knew the answers whileto, though I didn't.

What strange was that whenever I appeared in his eyesight, his eyes were always on me, but he never talked to me.


What strange was that whenever I appeared in his eyesightwas in front of him, his eyes were always on me, but he never talked to me.

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