Sept. 8, 2024
A period of time through my windowsill
I have to accept that only a few plants are alive on my windowsill.
The strongest one is a weed, which I don't know its name or how it comes.
I didn't cut it down as wild grass because it's nice to see a strong life when I open my window in the morning every day.
A few days ago, I found that some birds like this weed too. They like to fly to stop beside it and then chat with each other.
Yesterday I decided to take a video of the birds sitting on my windowsill, but the birds probably saw my camera and refused to come back.
I was disappointed to get my camera back but was surprised to find that the video without birds seemed to tell a story about time.
So came this video of how time flies through my windowsill: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RZ60CGIAYRs
Feel free to give me your feedback, if you have any advice or thoughts.
穿过我窗台的一小段时光
不得不接受只剩几株植物在我窗台上活着的事实了。
最强壮的是一棵杂草。不晓得它的名字，也不知道它从何而来。
我没有把它当作野草除掉，每天早上打开窗户能看到一个强健的生命总是好的。
几天前，我发现一些鸟也喜欢它。他们喜欢飞到它旁边停下来，然后互相聊天。
昨天我决定给窗台上的鸟儿拍一段视频，但鸟儿可能看到我的相机，就拒绝回来了。
失望地拿回相机。但令我惊讶的是，没有鸟的视频似乎在讲述一个关于时间的故事。
时光飞逝过我窗台的视频就这么来了：https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RZ60CGIAYRs
若有任何建议或想法，欢迎给我反馈。
The strongest one is a weed, which I don't know its name or how it comesgrew.
I didn't cut it down as wild grass because it's nice to see a strong life when I open my window in the morning every day.
So came this video of how time flies through my windowsill: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RZ60CGIAYRs
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Feel free to give me your feedback, if you have any advice or thoughts.
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Weeds can endure harsh conditions. Hopefully, next rainy season (or summer, I'm not sure) you'll be able to see your plants grow and take videos of them :)
A period of time throughviewed over across my windowsill / suggestion: Time passes by my windowsill
A windowsill isn’t transparent, so we can’t see or pass “through” a windowsill. “Over,” “across” or “by” would work, though.
I have to accept that only a few plants are alive on my windowsill.
The strongest one is a weed, whichand I don't know its name or how it comes{came to be here | got here}.
I didn't [cut it down as wild grass| pull it out] because it's nice to see a strong lifeving thing when I open my window in the morning every / each day.
“Cut it down” implies that it’s fairly large, like a bush or tree. We normally “pull” weeds (pull them up out of the soil, roots and all.
“As wild grass” doesn’t really make sense. You could say, “I didn’t pull it out as one normally would a weed, because….”
A few days ago, I found that some birds like this weed too.
They like to fly to stopland beside it and then chat with each other.
Yesterday I decided to take a video of the birds sitting on my windowsill, but the birds probably {saw my camera and refused to come back | were too scared of my camera to come back}.
I was disappointed to get my camera backretrieved my camera with disappointment but was surprised to find that the video without birdsbird-free video seemed to tell a story about time.
“Disappointed to do X” means that doing X caused you to feel disappointment, so “I was disappointed to get my camera back” means the fact that you got it back made you feel disappointed—you wished you hadn’t gotten it back.
Instead, you mean “disappointedly” or “with disappointment.”
So came | Hence this video of how time flies throughby my windowsill: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RZ60CGIAYRs
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Feel free to give me your feedback, if you have any advice or thoughts.
“So came” isn’t wrong, but it sounds very literary.
The phrase “time flies” usually describes a situation where time seems to pass very quickly—a lot of time passes but it feels very short. Like 嵗月如梭. To me, this video feels more like time is slowing down than flying. It’s very peaceful. :-)
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The cars moving in the background look like insects. :-)
Sept. 9, 2024
Thanks for your corrections and feedback! I learned a lot from them.
When I saw the cars moving in the background, I thought they could provide a good contrast with the weed.
A period of time through my windowsill
I have to accept that only a few plants are alive on my windowsill.
The strongest one is a weed, whichand I don' not know its name or how it comes.where it came from.
I didn't cut it down as wild grass because it's nice to see a strong lifeving thing when I open my window in the morning every day.
They like to fly to stop beside it and then chat with each other.
Yesterday I decided to take a video of the birds sitting on my windowsill, but the birds probably saw my camera and refused to come back.
I was disappointed to get my camera backat first, but was surprised to find that the video without the birds seemed to tell a story about time.
"I was disappointed to get my camera back" makes it seem as if you gave your camera to someone else and then got it back. It's THE birds because you mentioned the birds earlier in your essay, so you are referring to specific birds, rather than birds in general.
So came thishere is a video of how time flies through my windowsill: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RZ60CGIAYRs
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Feel free to give me your feedback, if you have any advice or thoughts.
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Very good, keep up the good work!
Sept. 8, 2024
Thank you so much!
Have a nice day!
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