Oct. 15, 2024
A Noisy Shrine
I went to Mount Kinpo two days ago, starting in the morning. It took me 7 hours to complete the 30-kilometer round trip, walking and jogging. At the top of the mountain, there was a Shinto shrine that had been rebuilt after being destroyed in the big Kumamoto Earthquake 8 years ago.
As I was about to throw a 100-yen coin and pray, I suddenly heard a loud noise: "Guuuueeeeeeeeeennnnnn!" In front of me was a sacred area, but a janitor had just started cleaning the floor of the holy place with a large vacuum cleaner. Gueeeeeeeeeeen! The sound was so loud that I wondered whether I should stop praying and wait until the cleaning was finished. However, I decided not to stop and continued praying.
Then I took a rest besides the shrine.
Even after five minutes, I could still hear the sound of cleaning!
私は二日前、朝から金峰山に行き、30キロの往復を歩いたりジョギングしたりして、7時間かかりました。
山頂には、8年前の大きな熊本地震で破壊された後、再建された神社がありました。
100円玉を投げて祈ろうとした時、突然大きな音が聞こえました。「グェーーーーーーン！」 目の前には神聖な場所がありましたが、掃除夫がその神聖な場所の床を大きな掃除機で掃除し始めていました。 グェーーーーーーン！ その音があまりにも大きかったので、祈るのを止めて掃除が終わるまで待とうかと迷いました。しかし、祈るのを止めずに続けることにしました。
その後、神社の横で休憩しました。
それから5分が経っても、まだ掃除の音が聞こえていました！
I went to Mount Kinpo two days ago, and startinged my hike in the morning.
At the top of the mountain, there was a Shinto shrine that had been rebuilt after being destroyed in the big Kumamoto Eearthquake 8 years ago.
You wouldn't capitalize the word earthquake.
"Gueeeeeeeeeeen!"
The sound was so loud that I wondered whether I should stop praying and wait until the cleaningjanitor was finished.
Then I took a rest besides the shrine.
Even after five minutes, I could still hear the sound of cleaningthe vacuum!
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I think what you wrote is perfectly fine. I just think these changes could make it feel a little more natural.
A Noisy Shrine
I went to Mount Kinpo two days ago, and startinged my trip in the morning.
It took me 7 hours to complete thwalk and jog the entire 30-kilometer round trip, walking and jogging.
At the top of the mountain, there was a Shinto shrine that had been rebuilt after being destroyed in the big Kumamoto Eearthquake 8 years ago.
As I was about to throw in a 100-yen coin and pray, I suddenly heard a loud noise: "Guuuueeeeeeeeeennnnnn!"
In front of me was a sacred area, but a janitor had just started cleaning the floor of the holy place with a large vacuum cleaner.
The sound was so loud that I wondered whether I should stop praying and wait until the cleaning was finished.
However, I decided not to stop and continued praying.
Then I took a rest besides the shrine.
Even after five minutes, I could still hear the sound of cleaning!
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Congrats on finishing the 30-km trip! I'm sorry your praying was interrupted by cleaning 😂
Oct. 16, 2024
Thank you, Kasumii, for your corrections and comment!
I completely confused "beside" with "besides." Hahaha
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It took me 7 hours to complete the 30-kilometer round trip, walking and jogging. It took me 7 hours to |
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At the top of the mountain, there was a Shinto shrine that had been rebuilt after being destroyed in the big Kumamoto Earthquake 8 years ago. At the top of the mountain, there was a Shinto shrine that had been rebuilt after being destroyed in the big Kumamoto At the top of the mountain, there was a Shinto shrine that had been rebuilt after being destroyed in the big Kumamoto You wouldn't capitalize the word earthquake. |
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As I was about to throw a 100-yen coin and pray, I suddenly heard a loud noise: "Guuuueeeeeeeeeennnnnn!" As I was about to throw in a 100-yen coin and pray, I suddenly heard a loud noise: "Guuuueeeeeeeeeennnnnn!" |
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