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shiera

Jan. 15, 2020

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A Nice Cafe

(I'm learning a contracted form. If there's any word that can be contracted, please correct it.)

There're some cafes I use to study English after work. Yesterday I found the cafe I like the most was closed. To me, this cafe's a place with something like spiritual energy,
so my TOIEC score got higher and higher as I studied at this cafe. I went to another cafe I like the second but it was also closed. That cafe's bread was cheap but tasty. I went to a cafe chain reluctantly.
Coffee and sandwiches're not good but not cheap; the couple on the right of me started to have a quarrel; the two young girls behind me were speaking ill of someone; a man and a woman on the front-left were also bad-mouthing someone, so I felt helpless. The limit of my patience to stay there was 15 minutes. I'm now wandering around in search of a quiet cafe.

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(I'm learning a contracted formions. If there's are any words that can be contracted, please correct it.)that I have missed, please do so.)¶

There're some cafes I use to study English after work.

Yesterday, I found out that the cafe I like the most was closed.

To me, this cafe' is a place with something like a spiritual energy,so: my TOIEC score got higher and higher as I studied at this cafthere.

In this case, not using a contraction would sound better.

I went to another second cafe that I like the second, but it was also closed.

That cafe's bread wae bread from that cafe is cheap but tasty.

In this case, not using a contraction would sound better.

So I went to a cafe chainhain-cafe reluctantly.

Minor style point.

CThe coffee and sandwiches' are not good but notor cheap; t. The couple on the right of me started to have a quarrel; t. The two young girls behind me were speaking ill of someone; a. A man and a woman on the front-left were also bad-mouthing someone, s. So I felt helpless.

The limit of my patience toI could only stay there was 15 minutes.

This version is more to the point.

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shiera

Jan. 16, 2020

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Thank you

A Nice Cafe

(I'm learning a contracted formions. If there's are any words that can be contracted, please correct ithem.) There' are some cafes I usego to to study English after work.

Typically, you only contract "are" with pronouns, such as "you're" or "we're." I would never contract "there" and "are" when writing.

Yesterday, I found the cafe I like the mostat my favorite cafe was closed.

This sounds more natural.

To me, this cafe's a place with something like spiritual energy, so I felt like my TOIEC score got higher and higher as I studied at this cafe.

I went to another cafe, which I like the second best, but it was also closed.

That cafe's bread was cheap, but tasty.

Reluctantly, I went to a cafe chain reluctantly.

Your sentence is not wrong, but this sounds more natural.

CThe coffee and sandwiches' there are not good, but also not cheap; t. The couple ton the right of me started to have a quarrel; tfight. The two young girls behind me were speaking ill ofbadly about someone; a. A man and a woman on the front-left were also bad-mouthing someone, so I felt helpless.

My changes sound a bit more natural. Things like "quarrel" or "speaking ill" might be considered old-fashioned.

The limiI ran out of my patience to stayafter being there wasfor 15 minutes.

I'm now wandering around in search of a quiet cafe.

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I'm sorry to hear about your difficulty finding a cafe. I hope you have better luck next time!

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shiera

Jan. 15, 2020

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Thank you for the correction and the kind message(^^)

A Nice Cafe


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(I'm learning a contracted form. If there's any word that can be contracted, please correct it.)There're some cafes I use to study English after work.


(I'm learning a contracted formions. If there's are any words that can be contracted, please correct ithem.) There' are some cafes I usego to to study English after work.

Typically, you only contract "are" with pronouns, such as "you're" or "we're." I would never contract "there" and "are" when writing.

(I'm learning a contracted formions. If there's are any words that can be contracted, please correct it.)that I have missed, please do so.)¶

There're some cafes I use to study English after work.

Yesterday I found the cafe I like the most was closed.


Yesterday, I found the cafe I like the mostat my favorite cafe was closed.

This sounds more natural.

Yesterday, I found out that the cafe I like the most was closed.

To me, this cafe's a place with something like spiritual energy,so my TOIEC score got higher and higher as I studied at this cafe.


To me, this cafe's a place with something like spiritual energy, so I felt like my TOIEC score got higher and higher as I studied at this cafe.

To me, this cafe' is a place with something like a spiritual energy,so: my TOIEC score got higher and higher as I studied at this cafthere.

In this case, not using a contraction would sound better.

I went to another cafe I like the second but it was also closed.


I went to another cafe, which I like the second best, but it was also closed.

I went to another second cafe that I like the second, but it was also closed.

That cafe's bread was cheap but tasty.


That cafe's bread was cheap, but tasty.

That cafe's bread wae bread from that cafe is cheap but tasty.

In this case, not using a contraction would sound better.

I went to a cafe chain reluctantly.


Reluctantly, I went to a cafe chain reluctantly.

Your sentence is not wrong, but this sounds more natural.

So I went to a cafe chainhain-cafe reluctantly.

Minor style point.

Coffee and sandwiches're not good but not cheap; the couple on the right of me started to have a quarrel; the two young girls behind me were speaking ill of someone; a man and a woman on the front-left were also bad-mouthing someone, so I felt helpless.


CThe coffee and sandwiches' there are not good, but also not cheap; t. The couple ton the right of me started to have a quarrel; tfight. The two young girls behind me were speaking ill ofbadly about someone; a. A man and a woman on the front-left were also bad-mouthing someone, so I felt helpless.

My changes sound a bit more natural. Things like "quarrel" or "speaking ill" might be considered old-fashioned.

CThe coffee and sandwiches' are not good but notor cheap; t. The couple on the right of me started to have a quarrel; t. The two young girls behind me were speaking ill of someone; a. A man and a woman on the front-left were also bad-mouthing someone, s. So I felt helpless.

The limit of my patience to stay there was 15 minutes.


The limiI ran out of my patience to stayafter being there wasfor 15 minutes.

The limit of my patience toI could only stay there was 15 minutes.

This version is more to the point.

I'm now wandering around in search of a quiet cafe.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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