July 5, 2022
A New Challenge
A few weeks ago, I decided to resume my morning walks again. Lately, I wasn’t feeling too well and thought that it might be caused by me not doing exercise at all. It is not that I do not like doing exercise, quite the opposite; I love it. However, I had to stop doing exercise as a result of me having side effects for a surgery a decade ago.
Two days after my surgery, I realised that I was not able to raise my arms. I told my doctor so and began my rehabilitation immediately. Not only was it for me very hard physically to face such a terrible situation but also mentally and physiologically. After a year and a half, I was able to raise my arms again. However, my shoulders were very weak and would be like that forever due to nerve damaged. And there is no solution for that. I had to admit my new situation and learn to live in a different way. I’m not a person who admits defeat so easily. On the contrary, I tried to do what I could. I enrolled in a sports centre near my home and started swimming. What can I say about me swimming in such a poor physical condition? In my twenties and early thirties, I used to lift weights. I knew what it meant to suffer doing exercise and also knew that whatever I did, I wasn’t going to further damage my shoulders. However, after my sports sessions I felt utterly shattered. I couldn’t keep doing what I was doing. I remember me telling myself: “Keep up, it doesn’t matter what you do, there will always be pain”. But after some moths, I had to give up. There was no point in me doing exercise.
After several years, last week, I enrolled again in another sports centre near my house with a swimming pool. The first day I went, I didn’t even remember how to swim. Not that I was a professional swimmer in the past but it was shameful. I don’t know whether or not I will be able to swim again. Although my goal isn’t to win an Olympic medal, at least, I’d like to be able to swim the swimming pool several times each day. Please, wish me luck; I’m going to need it.
A New Challenge
A few weeks ago, I decided to resume my morning walks again.
Resume already implies you’ve done it before, therefore, you do not need to say again.
Lately, I wasn’t feeling too well and thought that it might be caused by me not doingdue to my lack of exercise at all.
More sophisticated
It is not that I do not like doing exercise, quite the opposite; I love it.
Beautiful grammar !
However, IOnce before, a decade ago, I also had to stop doing exercise as a result of me havinging because of the side effects forom a surgery a decade agoI had.
Word order, better connectives.
Connective 1: establishes past
Connective 2: specifically details time.
Two days after my surgery, I realised that I was not able to raise my arms.
This is very formal; if this was your intent it is great. Otherwise, you could instead say “Two days after my surgery, I realised that I couldn’t raise my arms.”
I told my doctor so and began. As a result, my rehabilitation immediately.
Continuing the formal voice; and sophistication.
Not only was it for me very hard physicallydid I find it very physically taxing/difficult to face such a terrible situation, but also mentally and physisychologically.
After a year and a half, I was able to raise my arms again.
However, my shoulders were very weak and would be like thatcontinue as so, forever, due to irreparable nerve damaged.
More sophistication
And tThere is no solution for thatneed to put this in as we already know it is unfixable.
I had to admiccept my new situation and learn to live in a different way.
Admit = to reveal fault/responsibility, OR to enter/be permitted into a certain place
I’m not a person who admits defeat so easily.
On the contrary, I tried to do what I could.
I enrolled into a sports centre near my home and started swimming.
What can I say about me swimming in such a poor physical condition?
In my twenties and early thirties, I used to lift weights.
I knew what it meant to suffer doing exercise and also knew that whatever I did, I wasn’t going to risk further damageing my shoulders.
However, after my sports sessions I felt utterly shattered.
I couldn’t keep doing what I was doing.
I remember me telling myself: “Keep up, it doesn’t matter what you do, there will always be pain”.
But after someeveral moths, I had to give up.
There was no point in me doing exerciseing.
Much more natural; always phrase it like this.
After several years, lLast week, I reenrolled again into another sports centre near my house with a swimming pool.
The first day I went, I didn’t even remember how to swim.
Very natural sentence good stuff
Not that I was a professional swimmer in the past but it was shameful.
I don’t know whether or not I will be able to swim again.
Although my goal isn’t to win an Olympic medal, at least, I’d like to be able to swim the swimming pool several times each day.
Please, wish me luck; I’m going to need it.
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Several times a day!!! I wish you luck mate, you can do it. Sometimes we have to accept what we can’t change and look to alternatives to give us solace. You can do this!
July 17, 2022
Thanks Frannie for your kind words as well as for taking the time to read and correct my post. I really appreciate it.
Lately, I wasn’thaven't been feeling too well and thought that it might be caused by me not doing exerciseing at all.
'doing exercise' is passable, but sounds odd in this sentence to me so this correction is just for sounding more natural.
However, I had to stop doing exercise as a result of me having side effects forom a surgery a decade ago.
Not only was it for me very hard for me to physically to face such a terrible situation, but also mentally and physiologically.
This word ordering sounds more natural and puts clearer emphasis on there being both a physical and an emotional impact.
However, my shoulders were very weak and wouldill be like that forever due to nerve damaged.
I had to admiccept my new situation and learn to live in a different way.
But after somea few months, I had to give up.
Although my goal isn’t to win an Olympic medal, at least, I’d like to be able to swim the swimming pool several times each day at least.
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Good luck! I hope you are able to begin swimming again :)
July 5, 2022
Many thanks Blackcat for taking the time to read and correct my post. I really appreciate it.
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A few weeks ago, I decided to resume my morning walks again. A few weeks ago, I decided to resume my morning walks Resume already implies you’ve done it before, therefore, you do not need to say again. |
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Lately, I wasn’t feeling too well and thought that it might be caused by me not doing exercise at all. Lately, I 'doing exercise' is passable, but sounds odd in this sentence to me so this correction is just for sounding more natural. Lately, I wasn’t feeling too well and thought that it might be More sophisticated |
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It is not that I do not like doing exercise, quite the opposite; I love it. It is not that I do not like doing exercise, quite the opposite; I love it. Beautiful grammar ! |
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Two days after my surgery, I realised that I was not able to raise my arms. Two days after my surgery, I realised that I was not able to raise my arms. This is very formal; if this was your intent it is great. Otherwise, you could instead say “Two days after my surgery, I realised that I couldn’t raise my arms.” |
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I told my doctor so and began my rehabilitation immediately. I told my doctor Continuing the formal voice; and sophistication. |
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Not only was it for me very hard physically to face such a terrible situation but also mentally and physiologically. Not only was it This word ordering sounds more natural and puts clearer emphasis on there being both a physical and an emotional impact. Not only |
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After a year and a half, I was able to raise my arms again. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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However, my shoulders were very weak and would be like that forever due to nerve damaged. However, my shoulders were very weak and w However, my shoulders were very weak and would More sophistication |
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And there is no solution for that.
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I had to admit my new situation and learn to live in a different way. I had to a I had to a Admit = to reveal fault/responsibility, OR to enter/be permitted into a certain place |
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I’m not a person who admits defeat so easily. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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On the contrary, I tried to do what I could. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I enrolled in a sports centre near my home and started swimming. I enrolled into a sports centre near my home and started swimming. |
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What can I say about me swimming in such a poor physical condition? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In my twenties and early thirties, I used to lift weights. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I knew what it meant to suffer doing exercise and also knew that whatever I did, I wasn’t going to further damage my shoulders. I knew what it meant to suffer doing exercise and also knew that whatever I did, I wasn’t going to risk further damag |
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However, after my sports sessions I felt utterly shattered. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I couldn’t keep doing what I was doing. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I remember me telling myself: “Keep up, it doesn’t matter what you do, there will always be pain”. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But after some moths, I had to give up. But after But after s |
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There was no point in me doing exercise. There was no point in Much more natural; always phrase it like this. |
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After several years, last week, I enrolled again in another sports centre near my house with a swimming pool.
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The first day I went, I didn’t even remember how to swim. The first day I went, I didn’t even remember how to swim. Very natural sentence good stuff |
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Not that I was a professional swimmer in the past but it was shameful. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I don’t know whether or not I will be able to swim again. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Although my goal isn’t to win an Olympic medal, at least, I’d like to be able to swim the swimming pool several times each day. Although my goal isn’t to win an Olympic medal, This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Please, wish me luck; I’m going to need it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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