Sept. 9, 2023
A Moment I Appreciate
Today, I watched a five-minute video. A huge whale swam approaching a boat with a strange sound; the owner of the boat soon realized that it was a signal asking for help. Then the two men dived into the sea and found a long thick had circled the poor big marine animal, after a while, they liberated the animal. When the whale swam flipped around the boat showing its gratitude, another whale came close to them. Surprisingly, this was another whale that was bound by some torn fishing net.
The later whale found humans saving its friend, so the new ones didn't want to lose the chance. Therefore, the two men continued working and finally succeeded.
How clever a whale it is! The whale is really a sentient animal, no different from us. We are living on the same planet, I'd suggest let's care for each other, not kill.
A huge whale swam approachingto a boat with a strange sound; the owner of the boat soon realized that it was a signal asking for help.
Either "swam to a boat" or "approached a boat" sound smoother. Both "swam" and "approached" are used to convey the same thing, so you only need to use one.
Then the two men dived into the sea and found a long thick (?) had circled the poor big marine animal, a. After a while, they liberated the animal.
(?) A long thick what? There should be a noun there, like "rope".
Splitting this into two sentences because the second sentences is expressing a new thought.
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Well done!
Sept. 10, 2023
Yes, missed "rope" in the sentence. Thank you for your corrections!
A huge whale swam was approaching a boat with a strange sound; the owner of the boat soon realized that it was a signal asking for help.
Then the two men dived into the sea and found a long thick (did you miss a word here?) had circled the poor big marine animal, a. After a while, they liberated the animal.
WhenAs the whale swam and flipped around the boat showing its gratitude, another whale came close to them.
We are living on the same planet, so I'd suggest let's care for each other, not kill.
Sept. 10, 2023
Then the two men dived into the sea and found a long thick (did you miss a word here?) had circled the poor big marine animal, a. After a while, they liberated the animal.
Yes, I missed the word "rope".
Sept. 10, 2023
Thank you for your corrections! :-)
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A Moment I Appreciate |
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Today, I watched a five-minute video. |
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A huge whale swam approaching a boat with a strange sound; the owner of the boat soon realized that it was a signal asking for help. A huge whale swam was approaching a boat with a strange sound; the owner of the boat soon realized that it was a signal asking for help. A huge whale swam Either "swam to a boat" or "approached a boat" sound smoother. Both "swam" and "approached" are used to convey the same thing, so you only need to use one. |
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Then the two men dived into the sea and found a long thick had circled the poor big marine animal, after a while, they liberated the animal. Then the two men dived into the sea and found a long thick (did you miss a word here?) had circled the poor big marine animal Then the two men dived into the sea and found a long thick (?) had circled the poor big marine animal (?) A long thick what? There should be a noun there, like "rope". Splitting this into two sentences because the second sentences is expressing a new thought. |
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When the whale swam flipped around the boat showing its gratitude, another whale came close to them.
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Surprisingly, this was another whale that was bound by some torn fishing net. |
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The later whale found humans saving its friend, so the new ones didn't want to lose the chance. |
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Therefore, the two men continued working and finally succeeded. |
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How clever a whale it is! |
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The whale is really a sentient animal, no different from us. |
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We are living on the same planet, I'd suggest let's care for each other, not kill. We are living on the same planet, so I'd suggest let's care for each other, not kill. |
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