Feb. 14, 2025
A Memory from Seven and a Half Years ago
I had a terrible experience last Sunday when my iPhone's battery malfunctioned while I was hiking. So, I decided to carry a spare phone with me. It must be as small and light as possible. Thus I picked my iPhone 6s among my old phones.
When I prepared this spare phone, I found some pictures and videos about a hike I had gone on almost eight years ago.
It was on one of the eastmost islands in mainland China, about 338 kilometers away from Shanghai. I remember that I got really seasick on the boat and the weather was not very good.
But the view and the color of the sea were so beautiful. I think it could be the top 2 of my favorite sea views in China. The other one is in Lingshui, Hainan by the way.
I edited a short video with these pictures and videos last night. You can watch it here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/pxVDhm1Zx6s
Maybe you like the views too.
上周日徒步时，我的iPhone电池出了故障，这让我有了一次可怕的经历。所以，我决定随身携带一个备用电话。它得尽可能地小而轻。因此，我在旧手机中选择了iPhone 6s。
当我准备这个备用手机时，我发现了一些大约八年前徒步的照片和视频。
那是在中国大陆最东端的一个岛屿上，距离上海约338公里。我记得我在船上晕船，天气也不太好。
但那片大海的景色和颜色是如此美丽。它可能是我在中国最喜欢的海景前两名。顺便说下，另外一个在海南的陵水。
昨晚我用这些图片和视频剪辑了一个短视频。你可以在这里观看：https://www.youtube.com/shorts/pxVDhm1Zx6s
也许你也喜欢这一块的景色。
A Memory from Seven and a Half Years ago
I had a terrible experience last Sunday when my iPhone's battery malfunctioned while I was hiking.
So, I decided to carry a spare phone with me.
It must be as small and light as possible.
Thus I picked my iPhone 6s among my old phones.
When I prepared this spare phone, I found some pictures and videos aboutfrom a hike I had gone on almost eight years ago.
It was on one of the eastmost islands in mainland China, about 338 kilometers away from Shanghai.
I remember that I got really seasick on the boat and the weather was not very good.
But the view and the color of the sea were so beautiful.
I think it could be the top 2 of my favorite sea views in China.
The other one is in Lingshui, Hainan by the way.
I edited a short video with these pictures and videos last night.
You can watch it here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/pxVDhm1Zx6s Maybe you like the views too.
Feb. 24, 2025
Thanks a lot!
Have a nice day!
A Memory from Seven and a Half Years ago
I had a terrible experience last Sunday when my iPhone's battery malfunctioned while I was hiking.
So, I decided to carry a spare phone with me.
Thus I picked my iPhone 6s among my old phones.
It was on one of the eastmost islands in mainland China, about 338 kilometers away from Shanghai.
I remember that I got really seasick on the boat and the weather was not very good.
But the view and the color of the sea were so beautiful.
I think it could be the top 2 of my favorite sea views in China.
The other one is in Lingshui, Hainan by the way.
I edited a short video with these pictures and videos last night.
You can watch it here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/pxVDhm1Zx6s
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Maybe you will like the views too.
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I will drop a comment there when I watch the video.
Have a nice day 🤠.
A Memory from Seven and a Half Years aAgo
Thus I picked my iPhone 6s from among my old phones.
I think it could be (in the top 2 of my favorite sea views / my second favourite sea view) in China.
You can watch it here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/pxVDhm1Zx6s
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Maybe you will like the views too.
Feb. 15, 2025
Thank you!
Have a nice weekend!
So, I decided to carry a spare phone with me on future hikes.
Helps the reader to follow the story
ThusSo I picked my iPhone 6s from among my old phones.
“So” is more natural-sounding here
WhenAs I prepared this spare phone, I found some pictures and videos aboutfrom a hike I had gone on almost eight years ago.
As = you were in the process of preparing the phone when something else happened
It was on one of the eastmost islands inof mainland China, about 338 kilometers away from Shanghai.
I think it could be thein my top 2 of my favorite sea views in China.
The other one is in Lingshui, Hainan, by the way.
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Great work!
Feb. 15, 2025
Thank you so much!
Have a nice day!
I had a terrible experience last Sunday when my iPhone's battery malfunctioned while I was hiking.
We tend not to put the apostrophe s here as it sounds more natural
It musthad to be as small and light as possible.
Past tense required!
Whilen I prepared/ while preparing this spare phone, I found some pictures and videos aboutof a hike I had gone on almost eight years ago.
It was on one of the eastmost islands in mainland China, about 338 kilometers away from Shanghai.
British English would be kilometres but it depends which you prefer :)
But the view and the color of the sea wereas so beautiful.
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I love it! What a beautiful memory to share and, in general, it is easy to understand what you are writing. Well done
Feb. 14, 2025
Thank you so much!
Have a nice weekend!
A Memory from Seven and a Half Years ago
I had a terrible experience last Sunday when my iPhone's battery malfunctioned while I was hiking.
So, I decided to carry a spare phone with me.
It must be ashad to be small and light as possible.
Thus, I picked my iPhone 6s among my old phones.
When I prepared this spare phone, I found some pictures and videos about a hike I had gone on almost eight years ago.
It was on one of the easternmost islands in mainland China, about 338 kilometers away from Shanghai.
I remember that I got really seasick on the boat and the weather was not very good.
But the view and the color of the sea were so beautiful.
I think it could be in the top 2 of my favorite sea views in China.
The other one is in Lingshui, Hainan by the way.
I edited a short video with these pictures and videos last night.
You can watch it here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/pxVDhm1Zx6s
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Maybe you likewill enjoy the views too.
"Like" isn't wrong, but I feel like "enjoy" is better when it comes to experiencing something.
Feedback
Excellent!
Even though the weather looked a bit dark and cloudy, somehow the sea still looks serene and beautiful.
Feb. 14, 2025
Thank you so much!
Have a nice weekend!
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