Dec. 21, 2023
A Memorable Dining Experience
Last weekend, I went to Rose House, a restaurant nestled inside a mansion on the corner of Zombie Street, located in the Grandma District of Dinosaur City. Overall, the soothing ambiance, the rose-scented air, and the delectable dishes combined to create a memorable dining experience.
Upon reaching the restaurant, I found that the streets were still damp from a recent rain and covered with wet leaves. An earthy smell hung in the air, slowly drifting into the store as diners came in and out. The restaurant was spacious, warm and clean, filled with the fragrances of roses, freshly baked wheat-flour bread, and roasting meat.
While waiting for my order of chicken gratin in a white wine sauce with rice, and fruit tea, I took a deep breath to catch the sweet scents in the air. After a brief wait, the main course emerged from the kitchen—it was a dish of baked rice and succulent chicken, topped with a golden cheese crust, saffron, and a sprinkle of grated cheese. With each spoonful of rice, the long, gooey strands of Mozzarella melted instantly, its salty tang harmonizing seamlessly with the herb-infused white wine cream. Following the main dish, a luscious fruit tea arrived. The aroma of honey, peaches, apples, oranges, and jasmine flowers wafted up, leaving a lingering fragrance as intoxicating as first love.
After savoring the food, I reluctantly left the restaurant. That night, as I drifted into sleep, traces of the restaurant's rose perfume gently filled my dreams.
This is definitely one of the most awkwardly phrased and over-the-top essays I have ever written in English. I intended to practice describing food in English by using descriptive adjectives related to the senses. However, the result is that the entire essay feels contrived due to superfluous descriptions.
上週末，我去了一家座落於恐龍市奶奶區殭屍街轉角處一棟大廈裡的餐廳——古典玫瑰園。 總體而言，舒緩的氛圍、玫瑰香的空氣和美味的菜餚營造了難忘的用餐體驗。
因為剛下雨，我剛抵達餐廳時發現街道依舊還很潮濕，覆蓋著濕漉漉的落葉。 一股泥土味充盈空中，隨著客人的進進出出悠然飄入店內。 餐廳內寬敞、乾淨又暖意襲人，瀰漫著玫瑰的幽香、新鮮出爐麵包的小麥芳香，以及烤肉的氣味。
在我等待我的餐點「雞肉白酒焗烤飯」和「水果茶」送來時，我深吸了一口店內香甜的氣味。 片刻後，我的主菜便從廚房裡送來了——一盤焗烤飯配上鮮美多汁的雞肉，上面鋪著金黃色的奶酪外殼，點綴著藏紅花和磨碎的起司粉。 我每舀一匙飯送進嘴裡，莫札瑞拉起司一條條長條狀的黏稠牽絲便入口即化，其濃鬱的鹹味與香草基底的白葡萄酒奶油醬搭配得天衣無縫。 主菜之後送來的是甘美鮮甜的水果茶。 我低頭啜飲，蜂蜜、桃子、蘋果、橘子和茉莉花的馥郁芳香頓時撲鼻而來，餘香繚繞，宛如初戀的滋味，令人陶醉。
在細細品味每道菜後，我戀戀不捨地離開了餐廳。 當晚，當我墜入夢鄉時，我彷彿依稀能聞見餐廳縷縷的玫瑰香水味輕柔地縈繞在我的美夢中。
A Memorable Dining Experience
Last weekend, I went to Rose House, a restaurant nestled inside a mansion on the corner of Zombie Street, located in the Grandma District of Dinosaur City.
In American English, "mansion" refers to a large building that people live in, so mansions would not have restaurants in them. I'm not sure of a good translation for 大厦, maybe "skyscraper" if it's a really tall building.
Overall, the soothing ambiance, the rose-scented air, and the delectable dishes combined to create a memorable dining experience.
Upon reaching the restaurant, I found that the streets were still damp from a recent rain and covered with wet leaves.
An earthy smell hung in the air, slowly drifting into the store as diners came in and out.
The restaurant was spacious, warm and clean, filled with the fragrances of roses, freshly baked wheat-flour bread, and roasting meat.
The restaurant was warm and clean, filled with the fragrances of roses, freshly baked wheat-flour bread, and roasting meat.
This sentence is repeating the last one?
While waiting for my order of chicken gratin in a white wine sauce with rice, and paired with fruit tea, I took a deep breath to catch the sweet scents in the air.
After a brief wait, the main course emerged from the kitchen—it was a dish of baked rice and succulent chicken, topped with a golden cheese crust, saffron, and a sprinkle of grated cheese.
With each spoonful of rice, the long, gooey strands of Mmozzarella melted instantly, its salty tang harmonizing seamlessly with the herb-infused white wine cream.
Following the main dish, a luscious fruit tea arrived.
The aroma of honey, peaches, apples, oranges, and jasmine flowers wafted up, leaving a lingering fragrance as intoxicating as first love.
AfterWhen I finished savoring the food, I reluctantly left the restaurant.
That night, as I drifted into sleep, traces of the restaurant's rose perfume gently filled my dreams.
This is definitely one of the most awkwardly phrased and over-the-top essays I have ever written in English.
IMy intendedtion was to practice describing food in English by using descriptive adjectives related to the senses.
However, the result is that the entire essay feels contrived due to superfluous descriptions.
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It felt like reading a magical story, good job!
Dec. 22, 2023
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Last weekend, I went to Rose House, a restaurant nestled inside a mansion on the corner of Zombie Street, located in the Grandma District of Dinosaur City. Last weekend, I went to Rose House, a restaurant nestled inside a mansion on the corner of Zombie Street In American English, "mansion" refers to a large building that people live in, so mansions would not have restaurants in them. I'm not sure of a good translation for 大厦, maybe "skyscraper" if it's a really tall building. |
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Overall, the soothing ambiance, the rose-scented air, and the delectable dishes combined to create a memorable dining experience. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Upon reaching the restaurant, I found that the streets were still damp from a recent rain and covered with wet leaves. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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An earthy smell hung in the air, slowly drifting into the store as diners came in and out. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The restaurant was warm and clean, filled with the fragrances of roses, freshly baked wheat-flour bread, and roasting meat. The restaurant was warm and clean, filled with the fragrances of roses, freshly baked wheat-flour bread, and roasting meat. This sentence is repeating the last one? |
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While waiting for my order of chicken gratin in a white wine sauce with rice, and fruit tea, I took a deep breath to catch the sweet scents in the air. While waiting for my order of chicken gratin in a white wine sauce with rice |
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After a brief wait, the main course emerged from the kitchen—it was a dish of baked rice and succulent chicken, topped with a golden cheese crust, saffron, and a sprinkle of grated cheese. After a brief wait, the main course emerged from the kitchen— |
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With each spoonful of rice, the long, gooey strands of Mozzarella melted instantly, its salty tang harmonizing seamlessly with the herb-infused white wine cream. With each spoonful of rice, the long, gooey strands of |
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Following the main dish, a luscious fruit tea arrived. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The aroma of honey, peaches, apples, oranges, and jasmine flowers wafted up, leaving a lingering fragrance as intoxicating as first love. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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After savoring the food, I reluctantly left the restaurant.
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That night, as I drifted into sleep, traces of the restaurant's rose perfume gently filled my dreams. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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This is definitely one of the most awkwardly phrased and over-the-top essays I have ever written in English. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I intended to practice describing food in English by using descriptive adjectives related to the senses.
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However, the result is that the entire essay feels contrived due to superfluous descriptions. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The restaurant was spacious, warm and clean, filled with the fragrances of roses, freshly baked wheat-flour bread, and roasting meat. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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