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Tammy

Dec. 13, 2024

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A little Discovery on Hiking

Recently, China seems to be a model of infrastructure. Many foreign friends chatted with me about this topic. But most of them believe it's because of the highly developed technology.

I think it's more than that.

Many years ago, I visited the Dujiangyan, an irrigation system built during the Warring States Time about 2300 years ago. It has been maintained by generations of Chinese and still works today.

If you had seen it, you would have been as surprised as me.

I used to not understand why ancient Chinese people built their houses with wood, which was so easily destroyed compared to the stone buildings in other cultures.

After seeing the amount of big stones in Dujiangyan, I kind of got our ancestors' logic: flood control and irrigation are more important than building bigger houses.

I encountered a lot of this while hiking in the wild mountains of China. For example, a trail out of a mountain still can be used while the village that built it has disappeared because the trail was paved with stones while the houses in the village might be built with wood and mud.

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A lLittle Discovery on Hiking

Many foreign friends chatted with me about this topic.

But most of them believe it's because of the highly developed technology.

I think it's more than that.

Many years ago, I visited the Dujiangyan, an irrigation system built during the Warring States Time about 2300 years ago.

It has been maintained by generations of Chinesesince it's construction and it still works today.

If you had seen it, you would have been as surprised as me.

I used to noPreviously, I didn't understand why ancient Chinese people built their houses with wood, which was so easily destroyed compared to the stone buildings in other cultures.

I encountered a lot of this while hiking in the wild mountains of China.

For example, a trail out of a mountain still can be used while the village that built it has disappeared because the trail was paved with stones while the houses in the village might be built with wood and mud.

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As I was reading it I was surprised. There are so many amazing things in this world.

Also, I think China has a very good maintenance culture.

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Tammy

Dec. 17, 2024

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Thanks again.

Definitely. Especially for the older generations.

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Toluwani

Dec. 17, 2024

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You are welcome :)

A lLittle Discovery on Hiking

Many years ago, I visited the Dujiangyan, an irrigation system built during the Warring States Time about 2,300 years ago.

You can say "I visited Dunjiangyan" (omit the 'the') or "I visited the Dunjiangyan Irrigation System" to sound more natural.

If you had seen it, you would have been as surprised as meI was.

Your meaning is very clear! Use "I was" instead of "me" to improve your grammar. To sound even more natural, you can say: "If you had seen it, you would have been just as surprised as I was."

I used to not understand why ancient Chinese people built their houses with wood, which was so easily destroyed compared to the stone buildings in other cultures.

After seeing the large amount of big stones in Dujiangyan, I kind of got our ancestors' logic: flood control and irrigation are more important than building bigger houses.

This sentence is correct! To be more specific, say "large amount of big stones" so the reader clearly knows there are a lot of big stones in Dujiangyan (not a little).

For example, a trail leading out of a mountain still can be used whileeven if the village that built it has disappeared, because the trail was paved with stones, while the houses in the village might bewere likely built with wood and mud.

Use "leading out of the a mountain" to sound more natural and be more specific! Use "even if" instead of "while" to clearly express that, despite the village that built the trail is gone, the trial is still in operation because it was paved with stones. Use "were likely" instead of "might be" to sound more natural!

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This entry is very well-written! I looked up Dunjiangyan, and it's a very fascinating city. Also, your English is amazing! The prose in this story is very engaging and sounds very natural.

Thank you for writing! Good work :)

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Tammy

Dec. 14, 2024

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Thanks again for such detailed feedback and corrections!

I was in a little hurry yesterday and didn't have enough time to add the Chinese text. It's 都江堰[dū jiāng yàn]. The last character means dam and embankment. And of course, it's also the name of the city where the dam located now.

A little Discovery on Hiking


A lLittle Discovery on Hiking

A lLittle Discovery on Hiking

Recently, China seems to be a model of infrastructure.


Many foreign friends chatted with me about this topic.


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But most of them believe it's because of the highly developed technology.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I think it's more than that.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Many years ago, I visited the Dujiangyan, an irrigation system built during the Warring States Time about 2300 years ago.


Many years ago, I visited the Dujiangyan, an irrigation system built during the Warring States Time about 2,300 years ago.

You can say "I visited Dunjiangyan" (omit the 'the') or "I visited the Dunjiangyan Irrigation System" to sound more natural.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It has been maintained by generations of Chinese and still works today.


It has been maintained by generations of Chinesesince it's construction and it still works today.

If you had seen it, you would have been as surprised as me.


If you had seen it, you would have been as surprised as meI was.

Your meaning is very clear! Use "I was" instead of "me" to improve your grammar. To sound even more natural, you can say: "If you had seen it, you would have been just as surprised as I was."

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I encountered a lot of this while hiking in the wild mountains of China.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

For example, a trail out of a mountain still can be used while the village that built it has disappeared because the trail was paved with stones while the houses in the village might be built with wood and mud.


For example, a trail leading out of a mountain still can be used whileeven if the village that built it has disappeared, because the trail was paved with stones, while the houses in the village might bewere likely built with wood and mud.

Use "leading out of the a mountain" to sound more natural and be more specific! Use "even if" instead of "while" to clearly express that, despite the village that built the trail is gone, the trial is still in operation because it was paved with stones. Use "were likely" instead of "might be" to sound more natural!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I used to not understand why ancient Chinese people built their houses with wood, which was so easily destroyed compared to the stone buildings in other cultures.


I used to not understand why ancient Chinese people built their houses with wood, which was so easily destroyed compared to the stone buildings in other cultures.

I used to noPreviously, I didn't understand why ancient Chinese people built their houses with wood, which was so easily destroyed compared to the stone buildings in other cultures.

After seeing the amount of big stones in Dujiangyan, I kind of got our ancestors' logic: flood control and irrigation are more important than building bigger houses.


After seeing the large amount of big stones in Dujiangyan, I kind of got our ancestors' logic: flood control and irrigation are more important than building bigger houses.

This sentence is correct! To be more specific, say "large amount of big stones" so the reader clearly knows there are a lot of big stones in Dujiangyan (not a little).

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