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Aug. 19, 2021

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A Harmonious Dormitory Life

It's well observed that there are some inharmonious phenomenon in dormitory life,such as argument about duty arrangement or bedtime.And it's understandable considering different disposition and habits of everyone in a dormitory.
However,establishing a harmonious atmosphere in our dormitory is of great importance.
After all,we can’t have a good rest in a dormitory full of arguments and anger.Worse still,this will exert negative effect on our academic performance.
To infuse a harmonious atmosphere into our dormitory,the first thing we should do is to communicate with roommates,thus deepen our understanding of each other.In this way,we can work out a plan together to meet everyone’s need as much as possible.

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It's well observed that there are some inharmonious phenomenona in dormitory life, , such as arguments about duty arrangement of duties or bedtime.A, and it's understandable considering the different dispositions and habits of everyone in a dormitory.

Plural form of phenomenon is phenomena.

However,establishing a harmonious atmosphere in our dormitory is of great importance.

After all,we can’t have a good rest in a dormitory full of arguments and anger. Worse still, this will exert a negative effect on our academic performance.

To infuse a harmonious atmosphere into our dormitory,the first thing we should do is to communicate with roommates, thus deepening our understanding of each other.In this way,we can work out a plan together tohat will meet everyone’s needs as much as possible.

that will sounds slightly more natural to me, but 'to meet' is not grammatically incorrect.

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Very well written, only issues are that you are forgetting articles such as "a" and "the" (super common mistake for even extremely advanced English learners) and mixing up plurals with singulars.

A Harmonious Dormitory Life


It's well observed that there are some inharmonious phenomenon in dormitory life,such as argument about duty arrangement or bedtime.And it's understandable considering different disposition and habits of everyone in a dormitory.


It's well observed that there are some inharmonious phenomenona in dormitory life, , such as arguments about duty arrangement of duties or bedtime.A, and it's understandable considering the different dispositions and habits of everyone in a dormitory.

Plural form of phenomenon is phenomena.

However,establishing a harmonious atmosphere in our dormitory is of great importance.


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After all,we can’t have a good rest in a dormitory full of arguments and anger.Worse still,this will exert negative effect on our academic performance.


After all,we can’t have a good rest in a dormitory full of arguments and anger. Worse still, this will exert a negative effect on our academic performance.

To infuse a harmonious atmosphere into our dormitory,the first thing we should do is to communicate with roommates,thus deepen our understanding of each other.In this way,we can work out a plan together to meet everyone’s need as much as possible.


To infuse a harmonious atmosphere into our dormitory,the first thing we should do is to communicate with roommates, thus deepening our understanding of each other.In this way,we can work out a plan together tohat will meet everyone’s needs as much as possible.

that will sounds slightly more natural to me, but 'to meet' is not grammatically incorrect.

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