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Ducky

July 12, 2022

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A Fountain Pen

I have a problem with my fountain pen. I usually use this for drawing, but last week I left it some days loaded with ink and now it does not work properly. I disassembled and cleaned it some days ago, but not work fine yet. I think I must disassemble it and clean again. Of course, this is not a big problem, but I will need my fountain pen in the next weeks and I would like that it was ok.

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I usually use ithis for drawing, but last week I left, it some days loaded with ink, and others not. and now it does not work properly.

This implies it is right in your hand and you’re showing me; that would be the only appropriate context to refer to it physically.

I added “and others not”; others refers to the other days you didn’t as you said “some days”; this is an incomplete clause and implies a comparison

I disassembled and cleaned it some days ago, but not work fine yetyet it fails me.

More nature and dramatic

Of course, this is not a big problem, but I will probably need my fountain pen in the next few weeks and I would like that it was ok.thus I need it to be functional.

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Overall good just some unnatural phrasing

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Ducky

July 13, 2022

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Thank you for the corrects.

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frannie_

July 13, 2022

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Thank you for the corrects.

Corrections* corrects is a verb.

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frannie_

July 13, 2022

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If u have the time plz look at mine ty !!!!

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Ducky

July 13, 2022

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Sometimes, I answer too fast. Thanks.

A Fountain Pen

I have a problem with my fountain pen.

I usually use ithis for drawing, but last week I left it some days loaded with ink for a few days and now it does not work properly.

I disassembled and cleaned it some days ago, but it still does not work fine yetwell.

I think I must disassemble it and clean again.

Of course, this is not a big problem, but I will need my fountain pen in the next few weeks and I would like that it was oko work right.

I usually use ithis for drawing, but last week, I left it some days loaded with ink for a few days, and now it does not work properly.

you need a comma before "and" if the two sentences that are being separated can be sentences by themselves

I disassembled and cleaned it some days ago, but noit doesn't work fine yet.

Of course, this is not a bighuge problem, but I will need my fountain pen in the nextcoming weeks, and I would like that it wasit to be ok.

"huge problem" is more natural

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Ducky

July 13, 2022

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Thanks.

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frannie_

July 13, 2022

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If u have the time plz look at mine ty !!!!

A Fountain Pen


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I have a problem with my fountain pen.


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I usually use this for drawing, but last week I left it some days loaded with ink and now it does not work properly.


I usually use ithis for drawing, but last week, I left it some days loaded with ink for a few days, and now it does not work properly.

you need a comma before "and" if the two sentences that are being separated can be sentences by themselves

I usually use ithis for drawing, but last week I left it some days loaded with ink for a few days and now it does not work properly.

I usually use ithis for drawing, but last week I left, it some days loaded with ink, and others not. and now it does not work properly.

This implies it is right in your hand and you’re showing me; that would be the only appropriate context to refer to it physically. I added “and others not”; others refers to the other days you didn’t as you said “some days”; this is an incomplete clause and implies a comparison

I disassembled and cleaned it some days ago, but not work fine yet.


I disassembled and cleaned it some days ago, but noit doesn't work fine yet.

I disassembled and cleaned it some days ago, but it still does not work fine yetwell.

I disassembled and cleaned it some days ago, but not work fine yetyet it fails me.

More nature and dramatic

I think I must disassemble it and clean again.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Of course, this is not a big problem, but I will need my fountain pen in the next weeks and I would like that it was ok.


Of course, this is not a bighuge problem, but I will need my fountain pen in the nextcoming weeks, and I would like that it wasit to be ok.

"huge problem" is more natural

Of course, this is not a big problem, but I will need my fountain pen in the next few weeks and I would like that it was oko work right.

Of course, this is not a big problem, but I will probably need my fountain pen in the next few weeks and I would like that it was ok.thus I need it to be functional.

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