July 24, 2022
A Dream of Splendor
A Dream of Splendor is a relief for those who have long been waiting for costume idol drama. It epitomizes the cultural beauty deeply rooted in our imagination of the Song Dynasty. The beauty of the drama settings and the up-and-down fates of the main characters are intertwined in this drama, making the artistry more engaging and fascinating. A Dream of Splendor tells the love and business story of three sisters, Zhao Pan'er, Sun Sanniang, and Song Yinzhang, who braves the winds and waves all the way from Qiantang in Zhejiang to the Eastern Capital of the Northern Song Dynasty. The lives of the three sisters are all "windy and stormy". Zhao Pan'er spent years in slavery as her father got impeached before regaining her freedom with the help of one of her father’s subordinates. She helped scholar Ouyang Xu during critical times and then fell in love with him. They had engaged before Ouyang Xu abandoned Zhao Pan'er for the daughter of Commissioner Gao as he nabbed third in the national civil examination. Sun Sanniang, a pig slaughterer and the breadwinner for her family, was determined to give her son the best education but was repudiated by her husband, with her young son also turning away from her. Song Yinzhang, a Pipa Geisha, was a master musician who wanted to change her destiny and get rid of her lowly identity but got toyed with by Zhou She.
A Dream oOf Splendor
A Dream oOf Splendor is a relief for those who have long been waiting long for costume idol drama.
Zhao Pan'er spent years in slavery as her father got impeached, before regaining her freedom with the help of one of her father’s sub-ordinates.
She helped scholar, Ouyang Xu, during critical times and then fell in love with him.
Sun Sanniang, a pig slaughterer and the breadwinner for her family, was determined to give her son the best education, but was repudiated by her husband, with her young son also turning away from her.
The beauty of the drama settings and the up-and-down fates of the main charactermain characters journey full of ups-and-downs are intertwined in this drama, making the artistry more engaging and fascinating.
A Dream of Splendor tells the love and business story of three sisters, Zhao Pan'er, Sun Sanniang, and Song Yinzhang, who braves the winds and waves all the way from Qiantang in Zhejiang to the Eastern Capital of the Northern Song Dynasty.
Zhao Pan'er spent years in slavery as her father got impeached before regaining her freedom with the help of one of her father’s subordinates.
The meaning of this sentence is a big vague to me, I can't tell if its
Zhao Pan'er spent years in slavery after/because her father got impeached, before regaining her freedom with the help of one of her father’s subordinates.
or
Zhao Pan'er spent years in slavery while her father got impeached, before regaining her freedom with the help of one of her father’s subordinates.
They had engaged, beforeut then Ouyang Xu abandoned Zhao Pan'er for the daughter of Commissioner Gao as he nabbed third in the national civil examination.
Sun Sanniang, a pig slaughterer and the breadwinner for her family, was determined to give her son the best education but was repudiated by her husband, with her young son also turning away from her.
Instead of "repudiated" (which is correct and fine, but I don't think is very common) you could also use "rejected" or "spurned"
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Your writing makes me want to watch this drama!
A Dream of Splendor
A Dream of Splendor is a relief for those who have long been waiting for costume idol drama.
It epitomizes the cultural beauty that is deeply rooted in our imagination of the Song Dynasty.
Personal preference / sounds better
The beauty of the drama settings and the up-and-downcertain fates of the main characters are intertwined in this drama, making the artistry more engaging and fascinating.
A Dream of Splendor tells the love and business story of three sisters, Zhao Pan'er, Sun Sanniang, and Song Yinzhang, who braves the winds and waves all the way from Qiantang in Zhejiang to the Eastern Capital of the Northern Song Dynasty.
If all three perform the action it must be "brave", but if only one does it then "braves" is correct, e.g:
Ten people brave the storm
One man braves the storm
Zhao Pan'er spent years in slavery as her father got impeached before regaining her freedom with the help of one of her father’s subordinates.
She helped scholar Ouyang Xu during critical times and then fell in love with him.
They had engaged before Ouyang Xu abandoned Zhao Pan'er for the daughter of Commissioner Gao as he nabbed third in the national civil examination.
Sun Sanniang, a pig slaughterer and the breadwinner for her family, was determined to give her son the best education but was repudiated by her husband, with her young son also turning away from her.
Song Yinzhang, a Pipa Geisha, was a master musician who wanted to change her destiny and get rid of her lowly identity but got toyed withwas snubbed by Zhou She.
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Wow! You write better than many native English speakers. Nice work.
July 25, 2022
Thanks!
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A Dream of Splendor This sentence has been marked as perfect! A Dream |
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A Dream of Splendor is a relief for those who have long been waiting for costume idol drama. This sentence has been marked as perfect! A Dream |
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It epitomizes the cultural beauty deeply rooted in our imagination of the Song Dynasty. It epitomizes the cultural beauty that is deeply rooted in our imagination of the Song Dynasty. Personal preference / sounds better |
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The beauty of the drama settings and the up-and-down fates of the main characters are intertwined in this drama, making the artistry more engaging and fascinating. The beauty of the The beauty of the |
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A Dream of Splendor tells the love and business story of three sisters, Zhao Pan'er, Sun Sanniang, and Song Yinzhang, who braves the winds and waves all the way from Qiantang in Zhejiang to the Eastern Capital of the Northern Song Dynasty. A Dream of Splendor tells the love and business story of three sisters, Zhao Pan'er, Sun Sanniang, and Song Yinzhang, who brave If all three perform the action it must be "brave", but if only one does it then "braves" is correct, e.g: Ten people brave the storm One man braves the storm A Dream of Splendor tells the love and business story of three sisters, Zhao Pan'er, Sun Sanniang, and Song Yinzhang, who brave |
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The lives of the three sisters are all "windy and stormy". |
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Zhao Pan'er spent years in slavery as her father got impeached before regaining her freedom with the help of one of her father’s subordinates. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Zhao Pan'er spent years in slavery as her father got impeached before regaining her freedom with the help of one of her father’s subordinates. The meaning of this sentence is a big vague to me, I can't tell if its Zhao Pan'er spent years in slavery after/because her father got impeached, before regaining her freedom with the help of one of her father’s subordinates. or Zhao Pan'er spent years in slavery while her father got impeached, before regaining her freedom with the help of one of her father’s subordinates. Zhao Pan'er spent years in slavery as her father got impeached, before regaining her freedom with the help of one of her father’s sub-ordinates. |
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She helped scholar Ouyang Xu during critical times and then fell in love with him. This sentence has been marked as perfect! She helped scholar, Ouyang Xu, during critical times and then fell in love with him. |
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They had engaged before Ouyang Xu abandoned Zhao Pan'er for the daughter of Commissioner Gao as he nabbed third in the national civil examination. This sentence has been marked as perfect! They had engaged, b |
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Sun Sanniang, a pig slaughterer and the breadwinner for her family, was determined to give her son the best education but was repudiated by her husband, with her young son also turning away from her. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Sun Sanniang, a pig slaughterer and the breadwinner for her family, was determined to give her son the best education but was repudiated by her husband, with her young son also turning away from her. Instead of "repudiated" (which is correct and fine, but I don't think is very common) you could also use "rejected" or "spurned" Sun Sanniang, a pig slaughterer and the breadwinner for her family, was determined to give her son the best education, but was repudiated by her husband, with her young son also turning away from her. |
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Song Yinzhang, a Pipa Geisha, was a master musician who wanted to change her destiny and get rid of her lowly identity but got toyed with by Zhou She. Song Yinzhang, a Pipa Geisha, was a master musician who wanted to change her destiny and get rid of her lowly identity but |
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