Dec. 6, 2019
This week was a disaster. Firstly, the last two days I am sick and sleeping at home.
Secondly, I made wrong model layout for Lase and cut it. I still can't believe it how I can do such a kind of mistake.
Thirdly, I had a second presentation this wednesday and I couldn't make it. I really want to show to my project before the final presentation. Now, I am doing thing that I hate, saying to myself "A lot of people didn't show up, just not me."
I plan to graudate end of this semester, so this is the last project but it had been really hard to get into this project.
My concept and the form of my building had done but I had felt lost. There is a lot of things need to be wrapped out and time is running out.
A Disasterous Week
The adjective form of "disaster" is "disastrous," and you need it here because it looks like you are using it to modify "week." You could also write "A Disaster of a Week" though.
Firstly, for the last two days, I amhave been sick and sleeping at home.
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You need to use the present perfect (have + the verb participle) since this is an action that is continuing from the past until now.
Secondly, I made the wrong model layout for Lase and cut it.
I still can't believe it how I can do such a kind of. How did I make such a mistake.?
One "makes," not "does," mistakes. The sentence also sounds like it contains two different clauses, which haven't been separate correctly.
Thirdly, I had a second presentation this wWednesday and I couldn't make it.
I really want toed show to my project before the final presentation.
It sounds like you are describing how you felt back then, so we need the past tense.
Now, I am doing something that I hate, saying to myself, "A lot of people didn't show up, not just not me."
Be careful with the placemust of "just," because it can change the meaning of the clause.
I plan to graudatduate at the end of this semester, so t. This is the last project, but it had been really hard to get into this projecit.
To me, it doesn't make sense to use "so" because it doesn't obviously follow from what you wrote that this is the last project. You also should take out the second instance of "project" in the second sentence, as it feels redundant when it is repeated again so soon and when we already know what you are referring to.
My concept and the form of my building hadve been done, but I had feelt lost.
You should use "have been done," because you are describing the project as it is now. For the same reason, you shouldn't use the past perfect ("had felt") to describe how you feel; instead, you could use "feel," "am feeling," or "have felt."
There is a lot of things that need to be wrapped out and time is running out.
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The "that" isn't optional if you aren't introducing a different agent in the subordinate clause. Another example of what I mean would be: "This is the cat that has to be fed" (correct) and "This is the cat has to be fed" (incorrect).
A Disaster of a Week
or you could have "a disastrous week", as some others have commented. "A disaster week" is something that a native speaker might say sometimes, but usually as a shortening of "a disaster of a week".
This week whas been a disaster.
This might be a dialectical thing in English, but to me, if the week's not over yet, you have to say "has been", rather than "was".
Firstly, for the last two days I am've been sick and sleeping at home.
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Again, "have been" sounds more natural to me here. If it was "on the last two days of the week", you could say "was", but because "the last two days" leads right up to now, "has been" sounds better.
Secondly, I made a wrong model layout for Lase and cut it.
You just need the indefinite article "a" here.
I still can't believe it how I can do such a kind ofould have made such a mistake.
Because the mistake is in the past, "could have made" sounds better than "can make" (which would be the correct way of saying it in the present tense). If you made such mistakes *regularly*, you could say, "I still can't believe how I can make such mistakes," but it sounds like that's not the situation!
Thirdly, I had a second presentation this wWednesday and I couldn't make it.
Days of the week start with capital letters :)
I really want to show topresent my project before the final presentation.
You can use "show", but you'd need to say who you'd be showing it to (e.g. "I want to show my project to my team") – without saying that it sounds incorrect. If you don't have a specific audience, then another verb like "present" should be used (even though here it sounds a bit repetitive because of "presentation" being in the same sentence).
Now, I am doing something that I hate, saying to myself, "A lot of people didn't show up, just nonot just me.
"Just not me" sounds like you were the only one who didn't turn up, which sounds wrong given the first half of the sentence. "Not just me" is more like "I wasn't the only one [who didn't turn up]", which seems more correct here.
I plan to graudatduate at the end of this semester, so this is the last project, but it had beenwas really hard to get into this projecit.
"Had been" is used as "the past of the past", so you use it more in a past-tense sentence to talk about things even further in the past. This sentence is in the present tense, so it sounds better to use "was".
My concept and the form of my building had donebeen finished but I had felt lost.
There isare a lot of things that need to be wrapped outup and time is running out.
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This is pretty well-written overall! I've been a bit nitpicky with things that sound fine, but just not native-like. I hope you're feeling a bit better now, and that all your causes of stress work out before too long.
A Disasterous Week
Like others pointed out, "A Disaster of a Week" also works too
This week was a disaster.
Firstly, the lpast two days I am've been sick and sleeping at home.
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"last two" and "past two" both work, but depending on context one might sound better
You can also say "First of all" instead of "Firstly", but I think both work
When it comes to "I've been sick" vs "I was sick", they have different implications - "I was sick" implies that you're no longer sick currently, but "I've been sick" implies that you still may be sick, or only very recently got better
Secondly, I made the wrong model layout for Lase and cut it.
I haven't heard of "Lase" and looking it up just redirects me to laser, so I'm honestly not sure if it's a program I can't find or a typo; if it's the name of some kind of program then that's all, but if it's meant to be "laser" then it should be "for the laser".
I still can't believe it how I can domade such a kind of mistake.
There's a lot of options depending on if it was meant to be one simpler sentence or two sentences combined into one.
Generally speaking all the corrections from others are correct, and there isn't a lot of difference in meaning between them. However, if it's broken up into two sentences (for example: "I still can't believe it. How did I make such a mistake?") it comes off as more emphatic to me.
Thirdly, I had a second presentation this wWednesday and I couldn't make it.
I really want to show to my project before the final presentation.
Whether or not it'd be past tense depends on if there's more presentations between the one on Wednesday and the final one.
If there are, it'd be present tense since you're still hoping to present it. If there aren't, it'd be past tense since you can't hope for it anymore but you hoped for it in the past.
Now, I am doing [a/the/that] thing that I hate, saying to myself "A lot of people didn't show up, not just not me."
Any one of those three would work, but they have different implications.
"a thing that I hate" implies it's one of many things
"the thing that I hate" and "that thing that I hate" both imply something more specific and reoccurring, but "that" can be more emphatic and impersonal than "the".
I plan to graudatduate at the end of this semester, so this is the last project, but it had's been really hard to get into this projecit.
You could still write out "this project" at the end, but it feels a bit redundant - "it" sounds better.
My concept and the form of my building hadare done but I had feelt lost.
There isare a lot of things that need to be wrapped outup and time is running out.
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Sorry if I rambled a bit too much! But more importantly I hope things get better for you!
I know it can be rough to not only be seek but also worry about finals at the same time - hang in there!
This week was a disaster.
Firstly, the last two days I amwas sick and sleeping at home.
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Secondly, I made a wrong model layout for Lase and cut it.
I still can't believe it how I can domade such a kind of mistake.
Thirdly, I had a second presentation this wWednesday andbut I couldn't make it.
I plan to graudatduate at the end of this semester, so this is the last project but it had been really hard to get into this project.
My concept and the form of my building hadwas done but I had felt lost.
There isare a lot of things that need to be wrapped outup and time is running out.
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It must be tough~ good luck with your project and great writing :)
A Disasterous Week
This week was a disaster.
Firstly, the last two days I amwas sick and sleeping at home.
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"Firstly" isn't incorrect, but I personally would use "first, second..." etc.
Secondly, I made the wrong model layout for Lthe laser and cut it.
Is "Lase" a particular machine or something?
I still can't believe it how I can do such a kind ofthat I made such a mistake.
Another option: "I still can't believe I made such a mistake."
Thirdly, I had a second presentation this wWednesday and I couldn't make it.
The "I" before "couldn't" isn't necessary since you already have it earlier in the sentence.
I really wanted to show to my project before the final presentation.
Now, I am doing this thing that I hate, saying to myself, "A lot of people didn't show up, just not me."
I plan to graudatduate at the end of this semester, so this is the last project, but it hads been really hard to get into this project.
My concept and the form of my building hadare done, but I had feltfeel lost.
Since you're talking about the present state of your building and feelings, use present tense.
There isare a lot of things that need to be wrapped outup and time is running out.
A Disasterous Week
First of ally, the last two days I amwas sick and sleeping at home.
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Secondly, I made wrong the laser model layout for Lase andand also cut it.
You mean a laser layout?
I still can't believe it h. How I can do such a kind ofI make such mistake?.
Or, "How could I make such a mistake?"
Thirdly, I had a second presentation this wednesday and I couldn't make it.
I really want to show to my project before the final presentation.
Now, I am doing a thing that I hate, saying to myself: "A lot of people didn't show up, just nonot just me.
I plan to graudatduate at the end of this semester, so this is the last project but. However, it hads been really hard to get into this projecit.
It's better to split the sentence and reference the semester in the second part.
My concept and the form of my building had been done, but I had felt lost.
There is a lot ofare many things that need to be wrapped out and time is running out.
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Very well written, Silas. I am sorry to hear about you feeling stressed. There's really not much you can do about getting sick, so please don't feel down about it, you can't control when you get sick. Keep thinking positive, I'm sure you will do great this semester!
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Firstly, the last two days I am sick and sleeping at home. First of all Firstly, the last two days I "Firstly" isn't incorrect, but I personally would use "first, second..." etc. Firstly, the last two days I Firstly, the "last two" and "past two" both work, but depending on context one might sound better You can also say "First of all" instead of "Firstly", but I think both work When it comes to "I've been sick" vs "I was sick", they have different implications - "I was sick" implies that you're no longer sick currently, but "I've been sick" implies that you still may be sick, or only very recently got better Firstly, for the last two days I Again, "have been" sounds more natural to me here. If it was "on the last two days of the week", you could say "was", but because "the last two days" leads right up to now, "has been" sounds better. Firstly, for the last two days, I You need to use the present perfect (have + the verb participle) since this is an action that is continuing from the past until now. |
Secondly, I made wrong model layout for Lase and cut it. Secondly, I made wrong the laser model layout for You mean a laser layout? Secondly, I made the wrong model layout for Is "Lase" a particular machine or something? Secondly, I made a wrong model layout for Lase and cut it. Secondly, I made the wrong model layout for Lase and cut it. I haven't heard of "Lase" and looking it up just redirects me to laser, so I'm honestly not sure if it's a program I can't find or a typo; if it's the name of some kind of program then that's all, but if it's meant to be "laser" then it should be "for the laser". Secondly, I made a wrong model layout for Lase and cut it. You just need the indefinite article "a" here. Secondly, I made the wrong model layout for Lase and cut it. |
I still can't believe it how I can do such a kind of mistake. I still can't believe it Or, "How could I make such a mistake?" I still can't believe Another option: "I still can't believe I made such a mistake." I still can't believe I still can't believe There's a lot of options depending on if it was meant to be one simpler sentence or two sentences combined into one. Generally speaking all the corrections from others are correct, and there isn't a lot of difference in meaning between them. However, if it's broken up into two sentences (for example: "I still can't believe it. How did I make such a mistake?") it comes off as more emphatic to me. I still can't believe Because the mistake is in the past, "could have made" sounds better than "can make" (which would be the correct way of saying it in the present tense). If you made such mistakes *regularly*, you could say, "I still can't believe how I can make such mistakes," but it sounds like that's not the situation! I still can't believe it One "makes," not "does," mistakes. The sentence also sounds like it contains two different clauses, which haven't been separate correctly. |
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I really want to show to my project before the final presentation. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I really wanted to show I really want to show Whether or not it'd be past tense depends on if there's more presentations between the one on Wednesday and the final one. If there are, it'd be present tense since you're still hoping to present it. If there aren't, it'd be past tense since you can't hope for it anymore but you hoped for it in the past. I really want to You can use "show", but you'd need to say who you'd be showing it to (e.g. "I want to show my project to my team") – without saying that it sounds incorrect. If you don't have a specific audience, then another verb like "present" should be used (even though here it sounds a bit repetitive because of "presentation" being in the same sentence). I really want It sounds like you are describing how you felt back then, so we need the past tense. |
Now, I am doing thing that I hate, saying to myself "A lot of people didn't show up, just not me. Now, I am doing a thing that I hate, saying to myself: "A lot of people didn't show up, Now, I am doing this thing that I hate, saying to myself, "A lot of people didn't show up, just not me." Now, I am doing [a/the/that] thing that I hate, saying to myself "A lot of people didn't show up, not just Any one of those three would work, but they have different implications. "a thing that I hate" implies it's one of many things "the thing that I hate" and "that thing that I hate" both imply something more specific and reoccurring, but "that" can be more emphatic and impersonal than "the". Now, I am doing something that I hate, saying to myself, "A lot of people didn't show up, "Just not me" sounds like you were the only one who didn't turn up, which sounds wrong given the first half of the sentence. "Not just me" is more like "I wasn't the only one [who didn't turn up]", which seems more correct here. Now, I am doing something that I hate, saying to myself, "A lot of people didn't show up, not just Be careful with the placemust of "just," because it can change the meaning of the clause. |
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My concept and the form of my building had done but I had felt lost. My concept and the form of my building had been done, but I My concept and the form of my building Since you're talking about the present state of your building and feelings, use present tense. My concept and the form of my building My concept and the form of my building My concept and the form of my building had My concept and the form of my building ha You should use "have been done," because you are describing the project as it is now. For the same reason, you shouldn't use the past perfect ("had felt") to describe how you feel; instead, you could use "feel," "am feeling," or "have felt." |
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