July 29, 2022
A Curious Country, to Say the Least
A few months before the war broke out in Ukraine, my younger son told me he wanted to become a soldier. So he enrolled in an academy and has been studying since then to take the exam and achieve his goal. Soldiers have a stable job until they turn 30. However, if they want to end their professional career in the army, what they have to do is to study to get promoted before they are 30 years old.
Spain is a very curios country: Most people would like to become civil servants but just a few would like to become soldiers. Being a civil servant means having a stable job for life. Keeping in mind the high rate of unemployment that there has always been in Spain, it’s no wonder that so many people want to become civil servants. Civil servants’ benefits don’t end here. Civil servants have more days off than people who work in most private companies. They also have unparalleled job stability. A civil servant will never be fired, unless he or she has done something really serious. I know all of that from my experience working for a subcontracted company which in turn worked for a state-owned company. Right now, in Spain, there are about 2.700.000 civil servants, give or take, among those working for the different autonomous communities, the local administrations, and the central administration. State Hospitals, primary and secondary public schools, public universities, ministries, and the army are just a few examples of the places in which civil servants work. Every time there is a public examination to become a civil servant, tens of thousands of people take the exam to work for the state administration. Most civil servant candidates spend years trying to achieve it. Not only because of the difficulty of the exam itself but also for the scandalously high number of candidates who take the exam.
The reason why Spain is such a curious country is because even though there are so many people wanting to work for the state administration, just a few want to join the army. This is something that migrants who come to Spain can’t understand. Why are Spaniards so unwilling to join the army which would mean having a job for life while defending their own country? Don’t Spaniards feel proud of their own country? Now that there is an ongoing war, I see people from many European countries willing to give their lives for their countries. If the time came, I’m not completely sure we would do so.
Spain is a very curious country: Most people would like to become civil servants but just a few would like to become soldiers.
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Aug. 1, 2022
Thanks Coolsindy for taking the time to read and correct my post.
A Curious Country, (to Ssay the Lleast!)
as “to say the least” is a saying, I would put this in parenthesis. Additionally, use of exclamation creates a better voice/tone for the reader!!!
A few months before the war broke out in Ukraine, my younger son told me he wanted to become a soldier.
So heince then, he has enrolled into an academy and has been studying since then to take the exam andfor the exam, which will allow him to achieve his goal.
Cohesiveness !
SA soldier’s have ajob is stable job until they turn 30.
Cohesiveness / grammar. Just creating that personal voice, again! The possession of the “job” in this way creates generalisation/cohesiveness, this is an advanced, sophisticated way of communicating the same thing :)
However, if they want to end their professional career in the army, what they have to do is to study to get promoted before they are 30 years old.
I don’t understand this phrase; using “however” means you want to introduce a contrary statement to what you presented in the sentence before.
The sentence before: soldiers’ jobs are unstable at 30
This sentence: if they desire to end it.
Basically, the sentence before depicts the job NEGATIVELY, and eternal. If you were going to introduce a contrary statement, in English, it would be expected to be “however, if you want to keep your job.” This is why I am confused !
Spain is a very curious country: M; most people would like to becomepursue a career in civil servants buice, whilst just a few would like to become soldiers.
More sophisticated/natural
Being a civil servant means having a stable job for a stable life.
This sentence is perfect, however, I’m just challenging you to use more techniques. This sentence is very literal, however, repetition of “stable” emphasises the idea + your tone and opinion !!!
Keeping in mindGiven the high rate of unemployment that there has always been in Spain, it’s no wonder that so many people want to becomthere pursue civil servantsice.
Formula: Given + condition, it’s no wonder + outcome.
Civil servants’ benefits don’t end hereBesides unparalleled job security, civil servants receive even more benefits.
I’ve merged your reason here, from below
Civil servants haveSuch as getting more days off than people whothe workers in most private companies.
“Get” is kind of colloquial, you can say “receive” or “are privy to” if you want a formal tone!
They also have unparalleled job stability.
A cCivil servant wills are never be fired, unless he or she has done something really seriouscommitted a serious offence.
Very formal and sophisticated
I know all of thatis from my experience working for a subcontracted company which in turn worked for a state-owntate-owned, subcontracted company.
Right now, in Spain, there are about 2. 700. 000 civil servants, give or take, amoincluding those working for the different autonomous communities, the local administrations, and the central administration.
State Hospitals, primary and secondary public schools, public universities, ministries, and the army are just a few examples of the places in which civil servants work.
Every time there is a public examination to become a civil servant, tens of thousands of people take the exam to work for the state administration.
Most civil servant candidates spend years trying to achieve it.
Not only because of the difficulty of the exam itself, but also for the scandaloushockingly high number of candidates who take the exam.
Scandalous isn’t quite correct here, shockingly is better.
The reason why Spain is such a curious country is because even though there are so many people wantingho desire to work for the state administration, just a few want to join the army.
This is something that migrants who come to Spain can’tfail to understand.
Can’t is limiting: fail to is also stylistically more appropriate
Why are Spaniards so unwilling to join the army, which would mean having a job for life whiletranslate to a country that defendinged their own country?
Don’t Spaniards feel proud enough of their own country to risk their lives?
Cohesiveness
Now that there is an ongoing war, I see people from many European countries willing to give their lives for their countries.
If the time came, I’m not completely sure we would do so.
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Brilliant piece well done 😎👌
Aug. 1, 2022
So heince then, he has enrolled into an academy and has been studying since then to take the exam andfor the exam, which will allow him to achieve his goal.
You're the expert but I think this sentence should be like this: "To this end, he enrolled into an academy and has been studying since then for the exam/to the take the exam ... "
Aug. 1, 2022
I know all of thatis from my experience working for a subcontracted company which in turn worked for a state-owntate-owned, subcontracted company.
My company wasn't owned by the state. It was a private company working for the state.
Aug. 1, 2022
Many thanks Frannie for taking the time to read and correct my long post. I really appreciate it.
Aug. 1, 2022
You're the expert but I think this sentence should be like this: "To this end, he enrolled into an academy and has been studying since then for the exam/to the take the exam ... "
Your sentence you just sent me works as well, however it should be: “To this end, he enrolled into an academy and has since been studying to take the exam.”
Aug. 1, 2022
My company wasn't owned by the state. It was a private company working for the state.
Ok then the correct way to say would be: “I know this from my experience working for a subcontracted company, (unowned by the state.)”
Aug. 1, 2022
Thanks again Frannie
Aug. 1, 2022
Thanks again Frannie
That is ok
Always a pleasure reading your works
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A Curious Country, to Say the Least A Curious Country as “to say the least” is a saying, I would put this in parenthesis. Additionally, use of exclamation creates a better voice/tone for the reader!!! |
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A few months before the war broke out in Ukraine, my younger son told me he wanted to become a soldier. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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So he enrolled in an academy and has been studying since then to take the exam and achieve his goal. S Cohesiveness ! |
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Soldiers have a stable job until they turn 30.
Cohesiveness / grammar. Just creating that personal voice, again! The possession of the “job” in this way creates generalisation/cohesiveness, this is an advanced, sophisticated way of communicating the same thing :) |
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However, if they want to end their professional career in the army, what they have to do is to study to get promoted before they are 30 years old. However, if they want to end their professional career in the army, what they have to do is to study to get promoted before they are 30 years old. I don’t understand this phrase; using “however” means you want to introduce a contrary statement to what you presented in the sentence before. The sentence before: soldiers’ jobs are unstable at 30 This sentence: if they desire to end it. Basically, the sentence before depicts the job NEGATIVELY, and eternal. If you were going to introduce a contrary statement, in English, it would be expected to be “however, if you want to keep your job.” This is why I am confused ! |
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Spain is a very curios country: Most people would like to become civil servants but just a few would like to become soldiers. Spain is a very curious country More sophisticated/natural Spain is a very curious country: Most people would like to become civil servants but just a few would like to become soldiers. |
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Being a civil servant means having a stable job for life. Being a civil servant means having a stable job for a stable life. This sentence is perfect, however, I’m just challenging you to use more techniques. This sentence is very literal, however, repetition of “stable” emphasises the idea + your tone and opinion !!! |
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Keeping in mind the high rate of unemployment that there has always been in Spain, it’s no wonder that so many people want to become civil servants.
Formula: Given + condition, it’s no wonder + outcome. |
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Civil servants’ benefits don’t end here.
I’ve merged your reason here, from below |
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Civil servants have more days off than people who work in most private companies.
“Get” is kind of colloquial, you can say “receive” or “are privy to” if you want a formal tone! |
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They also have unparalleled job stability.
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A civil servant will never be fired, unless he or she has done something really serious.
Very formal and sophisticated |
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I know all of that from my experience working for a subcontracted company which in turn worked for a state-owned company. I know all of th |
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Right now, in Spain, there are about 2.700.000 civil servants, give or take, among those working for the different autonomous communities, the local administrations, and the central administration. Right now, in Spain, there are about 2 |
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State Hospitals, primary and secondary public schools, public universities, ministries, and the army are just a few examples of the places in which civil servants work. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Every time there is a public examination to become a civil servant, tens of thousands of people take the exam to work for the state administration. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Most civil servant candidates spend years trying to achieve it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Most civil servant candidates spend years trying to achieve |
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Not only because of the difficulty of the exam itself but also for the scandalously high number of candidates who take the exam. Not only because of the difficulty of the exam itself, but also for the s Scandalous isn’t quite correct here, shockingly is better. |
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The reason why Spain is such a curious country is because even though there are so many people wanting to work for the state administration, just a few want to join the army. The reason why Spain is such a curious country is because |
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This is something that migrants who come to Spain can’t understand. This is something that migrants who come to Spain Can’t is limiting: fail to is also stylistically more appropriate |
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Why are Spaniards so unwilling to join the army which would mean having a job for life while defending their own country? Why are Spaniards so unwilling to join the army, which would |
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Don’t Spaniards feel proud of their own country? Don’t Spaniards feel proud enough of their own country to risk their lives? Cohesiveness |
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Now that there is an ongoing war, I see people from many European countries willing to give their lives for their countries. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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If the time came, I’m not completely sure we would do so. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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