March 29, 2022
A business report: A promotional video (C1 CAE WRITING)
A business report: A promotional video
Your company or organisation is planning to make a promotional video which will be shown to potential clients.
You have been asked to write a report recommending which aspects of the company or organisation should be included in the film.
Write the report, describing what the video should include, and explaining why you have chosen these aspects of the company.
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(Does everything sound natural? What could I do to improve it?)
(ANSWER)
Introduction
Nowadays there are a huge demand in software development, that is the reason why competence between technological companies has steadily increased since two decades ago. Therefore our company has to make a point to attract customers.
Aspects to highlighting in the promotion's film
In the first place our company "Soft-app s.a" should show how experienced our employees are, despite the fact that most of them are youth. Far from being a disadvantage, this allows us to be updated.
Other important aspect is specialization. Although we are specialized in app design, "Soft-app" have demonstrated along years to be able to adjust to either client's need, from language learning to game apps.
Finally, it is really necessary to make client understand that we also provide solutions to small companies at automatization of processes, reducing personnel costs.
Promotional video scheme
The video should start with two or three little interviews to some of our young staff, in order to encouraging clients to trust them. We will ask about basic topic, such as why did they choose this company to work? What has it been your greatest achievemente in the company since then?, etc.
The advertising will continue showing our personnel at work, for example in a brainstroming meeting, so people can admire our creativity and originality against other companies in this field.
To end the promotion would be interesting displaying our most outstanding projects and mentioning our most famous client (whenever we get permission required to do it).
Conclusion
All in all, this video will enable us to keep our client portfolio and expand it in other fields, like administration related business, where task automatization is an emerging opportunity for us.
Does everything sound natural? What could I do to improve it?
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The advertising will continue showing our personnel at work, for example in a brainstrorming meeting, so people can admire our creativity and originality againstcompared to other companies in this field.
To end the promotion would be interesting to displaying our most outstanding projects and mentioning our most famous clients (whenever we get permission required to do it).
Feedback
Great job, I'd say watch out for prepositions and the gerund form to improve!
April 1, 2022
Thank you so much Glumgirl, I much appreciate your advices.
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A business report: A promotional video (C1 CAE WRITING) |
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A business report: A promotional video |
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Your company or organisation is planning to make a promotional video which will be shown to potential clients. |
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You have been asked to write a report recommending which aspects of the company or organisation should be included in the film. |
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Write the report, describing what the video should include, and explaining why you have chosen these aspects of the company. |
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(Does everything sound natural? What could I do to improve it? ) |
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(ANSWER) |
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Introduction |
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Nowadays there are a huge demand in software development, that is the reason why competence between technological companies has steadily increased since two decades ago. Nowadays there |
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Therefore our company has to make a point to attract customers. Therefore, our company |
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Aspects to highlighting in the promotion's film |
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In the first place our company "Soft-app s.a" should show how experienced our employees are, despite the fact that most of them are youth. In the first place, our company "Soft-app s.a" should show how experienced our employees are, despite the fact that most of them are you |
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Far from being a disadvantage, this allows us to be updated. Far from being a disadvantage, this allows us to |
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Other important aspect is specialization. |
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Although we are specialized in app design, "Soft-app" have demonstrated along years to be able to adjust to either client's need, from language learning to game apps. Although we |
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Finally, it is really necessary to make client understand that we also provide solutions to small companies at automatization of processes, reducing personnel costs. Finally, it is really necessary to make clients understand that we also provide solutions to small companies |
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Promotional video scheme |
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The video should start with two or three little interviews to some of our young staff, in order to encouraging clients to trust them. The video should start with two or three little interviews |
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We will ask about basic topic, such as why did they choose this company to work? |
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What has it been your greatest achievemente in the company since then?, etc. |
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The advertising will continue showing our personnel at work, for example in a brainstroming meeting, so people can admire our creativity and originality against other companies in this field. The advertising will continue showing our personnel at work, for example in a brainst |
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To end the promotion would be interesting displaying our most outstanding projects and mentioning our most famous client (whenever we get permission required to do it). To end the promotion would be interesting to display |
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Conclusion |
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All in all, this video will enable us to keep our client portfolio and expand it in other fields, like administration related business, where task automatization is an emerging opportunity for us. |
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