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Once

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A boring day

I have played my phone for a long time since I opened my eyes today.I did nothing but wasted a day.
I planed to study but the perfectionism kept me procrastinating.
I want to change things but no actions.
Hope I won’t do it again tomorrow.


无聊的一天
今天睡醒了就玩手机,什么也没干,荒废了一天。
本来想学习,但是完美主义让我一直拖延。
我想改变这一切,但是没有行动。
希望明天不会如此。

Corrections

I have playused my phone for a long time since I opened’ve woken up my eyes today. I did nothing but wasted a day.

1. “Played phone” works but saying you used it sounds better
2. “Since I opened my eyes today” sounds odd in English, a more natural to say it would be “since I woke up” or “since I got up”
3. “Wasted” doesn’t work here and is grammatically incorrect

I planned to study but themy perfectionism keptmade me procrastinatinge.

This sounds like more natural phrasing. “Planned” is also spelled with two d’s :)

I want to change things but no actions.feel like

Not sure what you meant here

HI hope I wdon’t do it again tomorrow.

1. “Don’t” should be used instead of “won’t” here
2. Removing the “I” technically works in English, but this works best in speaking rather than writing

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Good, just some grammatical and sentence structure errors :)

I have played on my phone for such a long time since I opened my eyes today.woke up this morning. I did nothing but wasted a day.

"opened my eyes today" can work but not in a natural way - it'd mainly be used as a poetic way of saying "waking up"

I planned to study but the perfectionism kept me procrastinating.

I want to change things but I make no actions.

Hope I won’t do it again tomorrow.

This is fine in informal speech/text but in a formal or written context (apart from texts), you'll need to have "I hope"

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Awesome job! Completely know what you mean :)

I have played on my phone for a long time sinceafter I opened my eyes today. I did nothing but wasted a my day.

No need for 'have' before 'played' in this sentence. Just 'played' sounds more natural!

The present perfect tense 'I have played' means the action happened in the past and is continuing in the present. The simple past tense means the action ended in the past.

For example:
"I worked as a teacher" --> you don't work as a teacher anymore
"I have worked as a teacher since 2000" --> you still work as a teacher

If you meant that you were still playing, you would say, "I have played on my phone since I opened my eyes today."

Use since if you use the present perfect and use after if it's the past simple in this example!

I planned to study, but the perfectionism kept me procrastinating.

Verbs with short vowel sounds and one consonant after the vowel, like 'plan', always have a double consonant whenever you add -ing or -ed! For example: planning, planned, running, pinning, but NOT baking (long vowel sound), poking (long vowel sound) or clicking (two consonants after 'i' in click). Useful rule to know!

No need to say 'the' before 'perfectionism', you're not wrong, it just sounds more native like this.

Place a comma before 'but' since they're both independent clauses.

I want to change things, but I have taken no actions.

Just saying 'no actions' isn't enough because you need to make it clear who is not taking action.

Note: We can use the present perfect tense here because you took no action in the past and still aren't in the present.

Again, using a comma before 'but' because both clauses are independent!

HI hope I won’t do it again tomorrow.

Saying "Hope I won't do it again tomorrow" is perfectly normal when speaking because it's very casual. It's normal in spoken English in casual situations to start a sentence with your verb straight away. For example: 'Gonna go to the library tomorrow', 'Have to do the shopping tonight' or 'Meeting up with my friends tomorrow'.

However, in writing and more formal settings, make sure you state who is doing the verb. You're hoping, so write 'I hope'.

Feedback

Overall, super well done! I am a B1 in German, so I know how much of a headache writing can be. You did super well, though! Let me know if anything didn't make sense. I am also a perfectionist, it happens! Head up. It's better to start and not do it perfectly than not start at all. :)

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You are so nice and patient !I’m the first time to know the way learning English and spend a lot of sleepy time to play the website.it’s fantastic and I don’t think much about it that there will be someone reply on me so in detail.it’s incredible because I just amend others’ without any explanation.After all,I don’t know the reason why should be modified like these.I afraid that I will mislead sb if just through my experience and chinese sense.In the end,I thank you very much. You are so excellent.Good people always have good time !

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Thank you so much for your kind words! It's completely understandable to simply correct people and not go in-depth. I totally get you! And anytime at all, it's no problem! I'm more than happy to explain whenever I can. Best of luck on your journey. :D

A boring day


I have played my phone for a long time since I opened my eyes today.I did nothing but wasted a day.


I have played on my phone for a long time sinceafter I opened my eyes today. I did nothing but wasted a my day.

No need for 'have' before 'played' in this sentence. Just 'played' sounds more natural! The present perfect tense 'I have played' means the action happened in the past and is continuing in the present. The simple past tense means the action ended in the past. For example: "I worked as a teacher" --> you don't work as a teacher anymore "I have worked as a teacher since 2000" --> you still work as a teacher If you meant that you were still playing, you would say, "I have played on my phone since I opened my eyes today." Use since if you use the present perfect and use after if it's the past simple in this example!

I have played on my phone for such a long time since I opened my eyes today.woke up this morning. I did nothing but wasted a day.

"opened my eyes today" can work but not in a natural way - it'd mainly be used as a poetic way of saying "waking up"

I have playused my phone for a long time since I opened’ve woken up my eyes today. I did nothing but wasted a day.

1. “Played phone” works but saying you used it sounds better 2. “Since I opened my eyes today” sounds odd in English, a more natural to say it would be “since I woke up” or “since I got up” 3. “Wasted” doesn’t work here and is grammatically incorrect

I planed to study but the perfectionism kept me procrastinating.


I planned to study, but the perfectionism kept me procrastinating.

Verbs with short vowel sounds and one consonant after the vowel, like 'plan', always have a double consonant whenever you add -ing or -ed! For example: planning, planned, running, pinning, but NOT baking (long vowel sound), poking (long vowel sound) or clicking (two consonants after 'i' in click). Useful rule to know! No need to say 'the' before 'perfectionism', you're not wrong, it just sounds more native like this. Place a comma before 'but' since they're both independent clauses.

I planned to study but the perfectionism kept me procrastinating.

I planned to study but themy perfectionism keptmade me procrastinatinge.

This sounds like more natural phrasing. “Planned” is also spelled with two d’s :)

I want to change things but no actions.


I want to change things, but I have taken no actions.

Just saying 'no actions' isn't enough because you need to make it clear who is not taking action. Note: We can use the present perfect tense here because you took no action in the past and still aren't in the present. Again, using a comma before 'but' because both clauses are independent!

I want to change things but I make no actions.

I want to change things but no actions.feel like

Not sure what you meant here

Hope I won’t do it again tomorrow.


HI hope I won’t do it again tomorrow.

Saying "Hope I won't do it again tomorrow" is perfectly normal when speaking because it's very casual. It's normal in spoken English in casual situations to start a sentence with your verb straight away. For example: 'Gonna go to the library tomorrow', 'Have to do the shopping tonight' or 'Meeting up with my friends tomorrow'. However, in writing and more formal settings, make sure you state who is doing the verb. You're hoping, so write 'I hope'.

Hope I won’t do it again tomorrow.

This is fine in informal speech/text but in a formal or written context (apart from texts), you'll need to have "I hope"

HI hope I wdon’t do it again tomorrow.

1. “Don’t” should be used instead of “won’t” here 2. Removing the “I” technically works in English, but this works best in speaking rather than writing

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