Jan. 24, 2021
A Bird
The other day, my father sent me photos of a bird. The bird was Japanese white-eye and caught by my cat. My father saved the bird immediately. Fortunately, the bird didn't hurt badly, so flew away with his fellow after a while. White-eyes have a white pattern around their eyes as its name suggests, and their body color is yellow-green. They are really cute birds.
A Bird
The other day, my father sent me photos of a bird.
The bird was a Japanese white-eye, and it was caught by my cat.
"Was" serves two different slightly different purposes here: in the first instance, it's simply describing an attribute, while in the second, it's part of a passive voice construction. Thus, it sounds better to not treat them as part of a parallel structure.
My father saved the bird immediately.
Fortunately, the bird didwasn't hurt badly, so he flew away with his fellowthe other birds after a while.
White-eyes have a white pattern around their eyes as its name suggestssuggested by their name, and their body color is a yellow-green color.
"Name" is attached to "white-eyes," so the possessive marker must be for a plural noun.
They are really cute birds.
Jan. 25, 2021
Thank you for your correction!
A Bird
The other day, my father sent me photos of a bird.
The bird was Japanese white-eye and was caught by my cat.
My father saved the bird immediately.
Fortunately, the bird didn'wasn’t hurt badly, so it flew away with his fellowcompanions after a while.
I felt like “fellow” sounded a bit odd here, so I replaced it with “companions”.
White-eyes have, as their name suggests, a white pattern around their eyes as its name suggests, and their body color is yellow-green.
They are really cute birds.
“They are” is often written/said as “they’re”.
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Great Job! Just a few corrections!
Jan. 25, 2021
Thank you so much!
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The other day, my father sent me photos of a bird. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The bird was Japanese white-eye and caught by my cat. The bird was Japanese white-eye and was caught by my cat. The bird was a Japanese white-eye, and it was caught by my cat. "Was" serves two different slightly different purposes here: in the first instance, it's simply describing an attribute, while in the second, it's part of a passive voice construction. Thus, it sounds better to not treat them as part of a parallel structure. |
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My father saved the bird immediately. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Fortunately, the bird didn't hurt badly, so flew away with his fellow after a while. Fortunately, the bird I felt like “fellow” sounded a bit odd here, so I replaced it with “companions”. Fortunately, the bird |
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White-eyes have a white pattern around their eyes as its name suggests, and their body color is yellow-green. White-eyes have, as their name suggests, a white pattern around their eyes White-eyes have a white pattern around their eyes as "Name" is attached to "white-eyes," so the possessive marker must be for a plural noun. |
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They are really cute birds. They are really cute birds. “They are” is often written/said as “they’re”. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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