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kiwy

Sept. 23, 2021

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A Big Surprise

OK, my students keep surprising me forever. In the morning, I was told by a teacher in charge of class 2, whose classroom was next to mine, some of my students drank with hers in the classroom last night. A teacher of grade 7 passed by and saw the incident, she said that she smelled the smoke smell as well.
I started to ask my students one by one. The first one was the deputy monitor. He said that he wasn't dare to tell the truth, because he was afraid of being revenged. He asked me to talk with the monitor, she would know. Then I asked the girl, she consisted that she knew nothing. The third one I talked with was a boy in Class 2, who was accusing of drinking. He also was the guy, whose father accused one of my students of threatening his son, but finally was proved that it was his fault. I asked him to tell me the details for about 5 minutes, but he said nothing. Then I asked a girl Xue, who joined the strip poker, she said she didn't take part in.
A few minutes later, a boy told me that he would tell some details. The monitor and another girl Ling, who also joined the strip poker, were drunk. Both of them had a red face and crying. He didn't sure that whether Xue drank or not, but she was very mad. There were girls smoking as well, but he couldn't sure who they were. Very soon, the boy told me that he regreted to tell me the whole thing, because he was threatened. I told him to ask help from me if anyone hit him or did something else to revenge.
The monitor's father used to be a student of my father. He always sends gifts to my father in many important festival for a long time. If he isn't at home, his parents will do the thing for him. In some case, my family and his family are quite close. He is about 40 years old, but had a heart operation two years ago. His son quitted from middle school two years ago at the age of about 15. It is illegal to quit the 9-year compulsory education, but the enforcement of law isn't strict.
In the first day of this term, I asked the monitor about her brother's situation. He had changed a lot of jobs and never could keep a job for a long time. I told her that she should study hard because of her family condition. Well, it seemed that she never heard a word.
I talked to her again. I told her that beconcerned about her father's health, I hadn't told him anything. If she violates the ruled the third time, I would invite her father to talk with the chief.
I knew the two girls smoked by accident tonight. So I went to the security room with the teacher of Class two to check the monitoring. The two girls smoked eventually. But the camera near my class was out of work, so I couldn't get the evidence of their drinking.
I would not say anything about the monitoring to my students. I didn't want to waste much time on them, they didn't deserve it. If one of them violates any rules, I will show the evidence and ask the parents to take them home for a big break.

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A Big Surprise

OK, my students keep surprising me foreverall the time.

In the morning, I was told by a teacher in charge of class 2, whose classroom was next to mine, that some of my students drank with hers in the classroom last night.

A teacher of grade 7grade 7 teacher passed by and saw the incident, and she said that she smelled the smoke smell as well.

I started to ask my students one by one if they were responsible.

The first oneperson I asked was the deputy monitor.

He said that he wasdidn't dare to tell the truth, because he was afraid of being revengthat they would find out that he snitched.

He asketold me to talk with the monitor, she would know.

Then I asked the girl, she coinsisted that she knew nothing.

The third persone I talked with was a boy in Class 2, who was accusinged of drinking.

By whom was he accused? You might mean suspected, not sure.

He also was the guy,student whose father accused one of my students of threatening his son, but finallyalthough in the end it was proved that it was his own fault.

I asked him to tell me the details for about 5 minutes, but he said nothing.

Then I asked a girl Xue, who joined thehad played strip poker, but she said she didn't take part in.

A few minutes later, a boy told me that he would tell me some details.

The monitor and another girl Ling, who had also joined theplayed strip poker, were before, had gotten drunk.

Both of them had a red face and had been crying.

He didwasn't sure that whether Xue drank or not, but she was very mad.

There were girls smoking as well, but he couldn't be sure who they were.

Very soon after, the boy told me that he regretted to telling me the whole thing, because he was threatened.

I told him to ask help from melet me know if anyone hit him or did something else to him in revenge.

The monitor's father used to be a student of my father.

He has always sendst gifts to my father in many important festival for a long timeduring holidays.

If he isn't at home, his parents will do the thing for himsend gifts in his stead.

In someany case, my family and his family are quite close.

He is about 40 years old, but had a heart operationsurgery two years ago.

His son quitted from middle schooldropped out of junior high two years ago at the age of about 15.

Surprised that 15 still isn't 高一。I changed 'middle school' to 'junior high' because it just sounds a little older and, in America they'd be in high school already.

It is illegal to quit the 9-year compulsory education program, but the enforcement of the law isn't strict.

IOn the first day of thise term, I asked the monitor about her brother's situation.

He had changed jobs a lot of jobs anand could never could keep a job for a long time.

I told her that she should study hard because of her family condisituation.

Well, it seemeds that she never heard a word of what I said.

I talked to her again.

I told her that be, as I was concerned about her father's health, I hadn't told him anything.

If she violatesd the ruleds the third time, I would invite her father to talk with the chiefprincipal.

I knew the two girls smoked by accident todidn't plan on smoking that night.

So I went to the security room with the teacher of Class two to check the monitoringsecurity footage.

The two girls smoked, eventually.

ButHowever, the camera near my class was out of workder, so I couldn't get theany evidence of their drinking.

I would non't say anything about the monitoringfootage to my students.

I didon't want to waste much time on them, they didon't deserve it.

If oneany of them violates any the rules, I will show the evidence and askto their parents and ask them to take them home for a bilong break.

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Wow! You're like a detective! Nice writing.

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kiwy

Sept. 23, 2021

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His son quitted from middle schooldropped out of junior high two years ago at the age of about 15.

I am not quite sure his age. But he quited school in grade 9 which really surprised me.

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kiwy

Sept. 23, 2021

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I knew the two girls smoked by accident todidn't plan on smoking that night.

I want to said that I knew the news of they had smoked by accident.

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kiwy

Sept. 23, 2021

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In the morning, I was told by a teacher in charge of class 2, whose classroom was next to mine, that some of my students drank with hers in the classroom last night.

Can I use the word "that" after a comma? My text book says that I can't use "that" in Nonrestrictive attributive clause.

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sivanc

Sept. 24, 2021

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Can I use the word "that" after a comma? My text book says that I can't use "that" in Nonrestrictive attributive clause.

Forgive me as I'm not very knowledgeable about the technical terms (being a native speaker and all that), but "whose classroom was next to mine" is an interjection, and thus you should be able to remove it without making the sentence grammatically incorrect, so maybe it's a special case here that you can use "that". Of course, there would be other exceptions too, such as when you might say 'that that' (e.g., "I told her, secretly, that that car I loaned him didn't have working AC." => "I told her, secretly, that car I loaned him...". Here both sentences still use that after a comma.

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sivanc

Sept. 24, 2021

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I am not quite sure his age. But he quited school in grade 9 which really surprised me.

Yeah, that is surprising. If it's grade 9 then yeah still would be high school here, so the correction is still fine I think.

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sivanc

Sept. 24, 2021

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I want to said that I knew the news of they had smoked by accident.

Oh, understood! You might say, "I learned accidentally that the girls had smoked that night," "I accidentally learned...", something like that.

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kiwy

Sept. 24, 2021

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Forgive me as I'm not very knowledgeable about the technical terms (being a native speaker and all that), but "whose classroom was next to mine" is an interjection, and thus you should be able to remove it without making the sentence grammatically incorrect, so maybe it's a special case here that you can use "that". Of course, there would be other exceptions too, such as when you might say 'that that' (e.g., "I told her, secretly, that that car I loaned him didn't have working AC." => "I told her, secretly, that car I loaned him...". Here both sentences still use that after a comma.

The more comments I get in Langcorrect, the confuseder I am about what I learned from the text book. I think I should read more English books.

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sivanc

Sept. 24, 2021

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The more comments I get in Langcorrect, the confuseder I am about what I learned from the text book. I think I should read more English books.

So, I looked up non restrictive clauses...are you sure your book didn't say that you can put that *before* a nonrestrictive clause? Because that's all I could find that relates to that kind of thing.

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kiwy

Sept. 25, 2021

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So, I looked up non restrictive clauses...are you sure your book didn't say that you can put that *before* a nonrestrictive clause? Because that's all I could find that relates to that kind of thing.

https://m.hujiang.com/en_juxing/fxzxdycj/#:~:text=%E9%9D%9E%E9%99%90%E5%88%B6%E6%80%A7%E5%AE%9A%E8%AF%AD%E4%BB%8E%E5%8F%A5,ich%E4%BB%A3%E8%A1%A8%E4%BA%8B%E7%89%A9%E3%80%82

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sivanc

Sept. 25, 2021

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https://m.hujiang.com/en_juxing/fxzxdycj/#:~:text=%E9%9D%9E%E9%99%90%E5%88%B6%E6%80%A7%E5%AE%9A%E8%AF%AD%E4%BB%8E%E5%8F%A5,ich%E4%BB%A3%E8%A1%A8%E4%BA%8B%E7%89%A9%E3%80%82

Oh, they want you to use 'which' instead. I think that casually it's ok to use 'that' instead of 'which', but technically 'which' would be correct.

A Big Surprise

OK, my students keep surprising me foreverconstantly surprise me.

In the morning, I was told by a teacher in charge of class 2, whose classroom was next to mine, some of my students drank with hers in the classroom last night.

A teacher of grade 7 passed by and saw the incident, she said that she smelled the smoke smell as well.

I started to ask my students one by one.

The first one was the deputy monitor.

He said that he wasdidn't dare to tell the truth, because he was afraid of being targeted in revenged.

He asked me to talk with the monitor, as she would know.

Then I asked the girl, she coinsisted that she knew nothing.

Not sure what you mean by consisted here.

The third one I talked with was a boy in Class 2, who was accusinged of drinking.

He also was the guy, whose father accused one of my students of threatening his son, but finally it was provedn that it was his fault.

I asked him to tell me the details for about 5 minutes, but he said nothing.

Then I asked a girl Xue, who joined the strip poker, she said she didn't take part in.

A few minutes later, a boy told me that he would tell some details.

The monitor and another girl Ling, who also joined the strip poker, were drunk.

Both of them had a red face and crying.

He didn't sure that whether Xue drank or not, but she was very mad.

There were girls smoking as well, but he couldn't sure who they were.

Very soon, the boy told me that he regretted to telling me the whole thing, because he was threatened.

I told him to ask help from me if anyone hit him or did someanything else toin revenge.

The monitor's father used to be a student of my father.

He always sends gifts to my father in many important festivals for a long time.

If he isn't at home, his parents will do the thing for him.

In some case, my family and his family are quite close.

He is about 40 years old, but had a heart operation two years ago.

His son quitted from middle school two years ago at the age of about 15.

It is illegal to quit the 9-year compulsory education, but the enforcement of the law isn't strict.

In the first day of this term, I asked the monitor about her brother's situation.

He had changed a lot of jobs and never could keep a job for a long time.

I told her that she should study hard because of her family condition.

Well, it seemed that she never heard a word.

I talked to her again.

I told her thato be concerned about her father's health, I hadn't told him anything.

If she violates the ruled the third time, I would invite her father to talk with the chief.

I knew the two girls smoked by accidentdidn't mean to smoke tonight.

Accident - not right for this context, because they did smoke (after maybe being pressured)

So I went to the security room with the teacher of Class two to check the monitoring.

But the camera near my class was out of workder, so I couldn't get the evidence of their drinking.

I would not say anything about the monitoring to my students.

I didn't want to waste much time on them, they didn't deserve it.

If one of them violates any rules, I will show the evidence and ask the parents to take them home for a big break.

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Wow, it sounds like it's a lot of effort dealing with these kids.

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kiwy

Sept. 23, 2021

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Then I asked the girl, she coinsisted that she knew nothing.

It should be insisted.

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kiwy

Sept. 23, 2021

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I knew the two girls smoked by accidentdidn't mean to smoke tonight.

I want to say that I knew the news of they had smoked by accident.

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kiwy

Sept. 23, 2021

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Yes, adolesents are quite a lot troublesome. I think the reason is their faimly education.

A Big Surprise


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OK, my students keep surprising me foreverconstantly surprise me.

OK, my students keep surprising me foreverall the time.

In the morning, I was told by a teacher in charge of class 2, whose classroom was next to mine, some of my students drank with hers in the classroom last night.


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In the morning, I was told by a teacher in charge of class 2, whose classroom was next to mine, that some of my students drank with hers in the classroom last night.

A teacher of grade 7 passed by and saw the incident, she said that she smelled the smoke smell as well.


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A teacher of grade 7grade 7 teacher passed by and saw the incident, and she said that she smelled the smoke smell as well.

I started to ask my students one by one.


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I started to ask my students one by one if they were responsible.

The first one was the deputy monitor.


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The first oneperson I asked was the deputy monitor.

He said that he wasn't dare to tell the truth, because he was afraid of being revenged.


He said that he wasdidn't dare to tell the truth, because he was afraid of being targeted in revenged.

He said that he wasdidn't dare to tell the truth, because he was afraid of being revengthat they would find out that he snitched.

He asked me to talk with the monitor, she would know.


He asked me to talk with the monitor, as she would know.

He asketold me to talk with the monitor, she would know.

Then I asked the girl, she consisted that she knew nothing.


Then I asked the girl, she coinsisted that she knew nothing.

Not sure what you mean by consisted here.

Then I asked the girl, she coinsisted that she knew nothing.

The third one I talked with was a boy in Class 2, who was accusing of drinking.


The third one I talked with was a boy in Class 2, who was accusinged of drinking.

The third persone I talked with was a boy in Class 2, who was accusinged of drinking.

By whom was he accused? You might mean suspected, not sure.

He also was the guy, whose father accused one of my students of threatening his son, but finally was proved that it was his fault.


He also was the guy, whose father accused one of my students of threatening his son, but finally it was provedn that it was his fault.

He also was the guy,student whose father accused one of my students of threatening his son, but finallyalthough in the end it was proved that it was his own fault.

I asked him to tell me the details for about 5 minutes, but he said nothing.


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Then I asked a girl Xue, who joined the strip poker, she said she didn't take part in.


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Then I asked a girl Xue, who joined thehad played strip poker, but she said she didn't take part in.

A few minutes later, a boy told me that he would tell some details.


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A few minutes later, a boy told me that he would tell me some details.

The monitor and another girl Ling, who also joined the strip poker, were drunk.


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The monitor and another girl Ling, who had also joined theplayed strip poker, were before, had gotten drunk.

Both of them had a red face and crying.


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Both of them had a red face and had been crying.

He didn't sure that whether Xue drank or not, but she was very mad.


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He didwasn't sure that whether Xue drank or not, but she was very mad.

There were girls smoking as well, but he couldn't sure who they were.


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There were girls smoking as well, but he couldn't be sure who they were.

Very soon, the boy told me that he regreted to tell me the whole thing, because he was threatened.


Very soon, the boy told me that he regretted to telling me the whole thing, because he was threatened.

Very soon after, the boy told me that he regretted to telling me the whole thing, because he was threatened.

I told him to ask help from me if anyone hit him or did something else to revenge.


I told him to ask help from me if anyone hit him or did someanything else toin revenge.

I told him to ask help from melet me know if anyone hit him or did something else to him in revenge.

The monitor's father used to be a student of my father.


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He always sends gifts to my father in many important festival for a long time.


He always sends gifts to my father in many important festivals for a long time.

He has always sendst gifts to my father in many important festival for a long timeduring holidays.

If he isn't at home, his parents will do the thing for him.


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If he isn't at home, his parents will do the thing for himsend gifts in his stead.

In some case, my family and his family are quite close.


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In someany case, my family and his family are quite close.

He is about 40 years old, but had a heart operation two years ago.


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He is about 40 years old, but had a heart operationsurgery two years ago.

His son quitted from middle school two years ago at the age of about 15.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

His son quitted from middle schooldropped out of junior high two years ago at the age of about 15.

Surprised that 15 still isn't 高一。I changed 'middle school' to 'junior high' because it just sounds a little older and, in America they'd be in high school already.

It is illegal to quit the 9-year compulsory education, but the enforcement of law isn't strict.


It is illegal to quit the 9-year compulsory education, but the enforcement of the law isn't strict.

It is illegal to quit the 9-year compulsory education program, but the enforcement of the law isn't strict.

In the first day of this term, I asked the monitor about her brother's situation.


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IOn the first day of thise term, I asked the monitor about her brother's situation.

He had changed a lot of jobs and never could keep a job for a long time.


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He had changed jobs a lot of jobs anand could never could keep a job for a long time.

I told her that she should study hard because of her family condition.


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I told her that she should study hard because of her family condisituation.

Well, it seemed that she never heard a word.


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Well, it seemeds that she never heard a word of what I said.

I talked to her again.


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I told her that beconcerned about her father's health, I hadn't told him anything.


I told her thato be concerned about her father's health, I hadn't told him anything.

I told her that be, as I was concerned about her father's health, I hadn't told him anything.

If she violates the ruled the third time, I would invite her father to talk with the chief.


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If she violatesd the ruleds the third time, I would invite her father to talk with the chiefprincipal.

I knew the two girls smoked by accident tonight.


I knew the two girls smoked by accidentdidn't mean to smoke tonight.

Accident - not right for this context, because they did smoke (after maybe being pressured)

I knew the two girls smoked by accident todidn't plan on smoking that night.

So I went to the security room with the teacher of Class two to check the monitoring.


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So I went to the security room with the teacher of Class two to check the monitoringsecurity footage.

The two girls smoked eventually.


The two girls smoked, eventually.

But the camera near my class was out of work, so I couldn't get the evidence of their drinking.


But the camera near my class was out of workder, so I couldn't get the evidence of their drinking.

ButHowever, the camera near my class was out of workder, so I couldn't get theany evidence of their drinking.

I would not say anything about the monitoring to my students.


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I would non't say anything about the monitoringfootage to my students.

I didn't want to waste much time on them, they didn't deserve it.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I didon't want to waste much time on them, they didon't deserve it.

If one of them violates any rules, I will show the evidence and ask the parents to take them home for a big break.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

If oneany of them violates any the rules, I will show the evidence and askto their parents and ask them to take them home for a bilong break.

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