Jan. 27, 2021
Today, I heard the news that a piece of ruby was stolen in Tokyo. The ruby is four kilograms and its price is three billion yen (about 30 million dollars). However, there is additional information that the police say the ruby wasn't stolen, and a woman who owns the ruby was in negotiation, and she brought it back. The information is complicated and unclear, but I was surprised such a big ruby existed.
A Big Ruby
Today, I heard the news that a piece of ruby was stolen in Tokyo.
"piece of ruby" sounds like only a part of a ruby was stolen, when I think the whole thing went missing. "a ruby" also sounds a little more natural.
The ruby iweighs four kilograms, and its price is three billion yen (about 30 million dollars).
"weighs" instead of "is" sounds a little better
However, there is additional information that the police say the ruby wasn't stolen, and. ¶
Instead, a woman who owns the ruby was in negotiation, and she brought it back.
I think the original sentence is really long, so splitting it into two sentences flows better and makes the punctuation easier. Alternatively, I might write: "However, there is additional information that the police say the ruby wasn't stolen; a woman who owns the ruby was in negotiation, and she brought it back."
The information is complicated and unclear, but I was surprised such a big ruby existed.
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Today, I heard the news that a piece of ruby was stolen in Tokyo. Today, I heard the news that a "piece of ruby" sounds like only a part of a ruby was stolen, when I think the whole thing went missing. "a ruby" also sounds a little more natural. |
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The ruby is four kilograms and its price is three billion yen (about 30 million dollars). The ruby "weighs" instead of "is" sounds a little better |
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However, there is additional information that the police say the ruby wasn't stolen, and a woman who owns the ruby was in negotiation, and she brought it back. However, there is additional information that the police say the ruby wasn't stolen I think the original sentence is really long, so splitting it into two sentences flows better and makes the punctuation easier. Alternatively, I might write: "However, there is additional information that the police say the ruby wasn't stolen; a woman who owns the ruby was in negotiation, and she brought it back." |
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The information is complicated and unclear, but I was surprised such a big ruby existed. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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