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제가 한국어 배우는 이유
제가 한국사람 인데 한국어 좀 못 하는 편 이에요. 제 부모님은 제가 햇갈리진 거 걱정이 돼로 인해 집안에 저희가 한국어를 전혀 안 쓰고 영어 만 했어요. 근데 저는 영어 만 하느라 이제 한국어 할 줄 알아서 할아버지 할머니랑 소통이 잘 못해요. 우리 이야기 중에 주제 3개 만 있는 것 같아요 - 제가 밥 먹었냐고 , 제 공부 잘 하시냐고 , 제가 건강하냐고 밖에 다른 주제에 대한 이야기 없는데 저는 제 할아버지 할머니의 인생에 대한 것을 아무 것도 모르는 것 깨달았어요. 제가 한국어 배우고 제 할머니 할아버지랑 이야기 할 수 있으면 좋겠어요.
제가 왜 한국어 배우고 싶은 이유 하나 도 있어요. 아까 말했듯이 제가 한국사람이고요 미국에서 사서 많은 사람들이 저한테 "너 한국사람 이지? 너무 신기하더라구요 한국어로 뭔가 좀 이야기 해라" 라고 해서 제가 당황스럽고 어색하게 "안녕하세요 " 만 할 줄 알아서 좀 창피해요. 그리고 제 살고 있는 데에 한국사람 별로 없어서 사람들이 제가 "한국 모든 문화에 대한 아는 사람"이라고 생각하고 저 한테 한국 문화/언어 질문 많이 물어보는데 제가 한국 문화 별로 모르고 한국어도 할 줄 몰라서 그 질문을 대답할 수 없어요. 그리고 저 스스로 한국 문화를 좀 더 연결 하고 싶어요, 한국 문화 너무 멋있잖아요.
감사합니다
-지은
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Rêves
Je dors trè peu, c'est dificile rêver si on ne dort pas. Cependent j'ai rêvé queques fois de ma maison.
Elle était très grande et inconue pour moi. Bien qu'elle était ma maison, je ne la reconnassais pas.
C'est bizarre le monde des rêves.
J'aimerais rêver de choses agréables, mais ça c'est dificile.
Dec. 5, 2020
Graduation
Yesterday was my graduation and I was so excited about it the previous days. It ended up being pretty boring if I'm being honest. It took really long for it to start and there were so many speeches and such that it got boring. However, it felt special afterwards. Let me explain it better.
The same day, but hours before the graduation, I sent a teacher a message to thank him for everything he did this year. I think he is the only teacher who really cares about us at school. I mean, the others care, but not so much as him. He doesn't care about grades and what the headmaster tells him to do, he just wants us to learn. He's so cool. I told him that if it had been possible, I would have asked him to give me my diploma. However, as I knew that it wasn't allowed, I still let him know that he was a teacher I'll never forget.
Every student was to take a photo with three teachers showing the diploma. So I knew that he'd read my message when he took the photo with me (he hadn't responded).
When the graduation finished, I was in a kind of rush because my grandparents were outside and wanted me to give a present. I was with a friend who told me she'd talked with this teacher and I was really upset because I hadn't. Fortunately, we went back in, and my best friend "delivered me" (that's the expression they used) to that teacher, as he had been desperately looking for me. I never felt that important or special, it felt so nice.
We hugged and got to talk alone and he told me that what I had written to him was very beautiful. I didn't think so, I thought it could be better. Anyway, he said some other stuff too. I'm afraid I only heard half of what he told me because I still couldn't believe I had hugged and was talking with a real human being (we had online classes all year). It was a moment that was very special to me and that I'll always cherish. After we were done talking, we hugged again and said goodbye. I regret not having taken a photo with him and not having told him that I would have been awfully sad if I hadn't talked to him.
When I got home and went to my bedroom I started crying, which I honestly hadn't thought I would do. It was part happiness because of that, and part sadness because of what happened when I hanged out with my classmates (I felt so excluded). But I won't write about it because I wrote very much already.
Dec. 5, 2020
Learning English
I'm very happy that I join this webside. My English teacher recommented it. I should say thank you to her.
I've learned English for 3 years. I hope I can improve my English faster. I take English class, read books, watch movies... It's hard to remember vocabulary for me. The gramma is also confusing me a lot.
I hope I can keep to writing something every day to improve my English writing. Welcome to correct me. Thank you in advance.
Dec. 5, 2020
My third Journal The family tradition
The family tradition is very important because is part of us., I'm from Italy, so in my culture, the family is the most important thing. For example, I miss a lot to eat together around the table. In Italy, the moment to eat is very important, my father always said "when we eat, We only eat" it means that when the family is together around the table for eating, you can't do anything else (to watch TV, read, or use the telephone). the eating moment is when the family has to together.
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AW: Wieder Wiederholen
Dieser Beitrag ist eine Antwort zum Beitrag von shin1 (https://langcorrect.com/journal/post/15057/)
Ich bewundere die Deutschen auch und frage ich mich, wann und ob ich überhaupt kann richtig Deutsch lernen bzw. fließend sprechen zu können und vor allem schöne Beiträge auf Deutsch schreiben zu können.
Obwohl ich demnächst Portugiesisch lernen will, finde ich echt schwer, auf beide Sprachen richtig fokussieren zu können. Ich kann entweder Deutsch jeden Tag bei der Arbeit verwenden und am Ende des Tages einen Beitrag aus verschiedenen Themen schreiben oder etwas Zeit nach der Arbeit verbringen, um etwas Portugiesisch zu lernen. Beides kann ich leider bisher nicht :(.
Dec. 5, 2020
Wieder Wiederholen
Dieses Wochenende habe ich vor, nur mein Wortschatz zu wiederholen (und eine deutsche Zeitung zu lesen). Ich bewundere die Deutschen, und möchte Deutsch richtig lernen. Es ist schwierig, aber trotzdem werde ich nur auf Deutsch fokussieren. Als Nebenprojekt werde ich etwas Schottisch-Gälisch lernen, weil ich bereits Irisch spreche und die Schotten gerne unterstützen würde. Zumindest werde ich nicht gelangweilt!
Dec. 5, 2020
Demande de la construction d’un espace vert
La municipalité de votre ville a décidé de vendre un espace boisé à une société afin d’implanter un nouveau centre commercial. Vous êtes nombreux dans cette ville à souhaiter l’aménagement de ce terrain en parc. Au nom de vos concitoyens, vous écrivez au maire pour exposer la nécessité et les avantages d’un espace vert pour le bien-être de votre ville. (250 mots environ)
Objet: Demande de la construction d’un espace vert
Monsieur le Maire,
Au nom des concitoyens de la ville XYZ, je me permets de vous écrire cette lettre pour vous faire connaitre au sujet du projet d’implanter un nouveau centre commercial. Selon nous, au lieu de construire ce centre, il est nécessaire de construire un espace vert, ce qui apportera des retombées positives non seulement pour vous mais aussi pour cette ville.
Tout d’abord, on ne peut pas nier que ce parc et son verdure aident à purifier l’atmosphère, à rafraîchir les villes. Autrement dit, celui constitue une bonne matière de réduire la pollution environnemental et d’apporte de la beauté de notre ville. Non seulement cela, cet espace contribuera à favoriser les modes de transport écologiques en proposant aux piétons et aux cyclistes des sentiers sécuritaires et agréables pour leurs déplacements, surtout les enfants et les seniors. Par exemple, nous pourrions laisser leurs enfants et leurs grands-parents de jouer et de se promener sans inquiétude.
Enfin, on n’oublie pas d’ajouter que la relation entre des citoyens pourrait être favorisée grâce à cet espace. Il s’agit d’une bonne ambiance pour que nous puissions se rencontrer et se communiquer facilement. De plus, ce parc offre des aménagements variés, comme des terrains de jeu, de l’équipement d’exercice pour les adultes et des sentiers de marche, ce qui améliore considérablement la santé et le bonheur des citoyens.
En espérant vous avoir convaincu de la nécessité de notre opinion et de vous faire agir, je vous prie d’agréer, Monsieur le Maire, l’expression de mes sentiments les plus respectueux.
Dec. 5, 2020
Angst vor Flugreisen
Als Kind hatte ich große Angst vor Flugreisen. Als ich für das erste Mal in einem Flugzeug reiste war ich entsetzt, aber jemand hat mir erklärt das Flugzeugunfälle selten sind. In die richtige Perspektive zu rücken, sind die Wahrscheinlichkeit von einem Unfall eins zu fünf Million. Das heißt dass es wahrscheinlicher ist, dass du einen Autounfall erleiden, oder von einem Beleuchtung getroffen oder von einem Hai angegriffen werden. Ich war erleichtert aber nicht ganz ruhig, was mich Angst macht war dass, wie bei einem Hai-Angriff, wenn es passierte würde es wirklich schrecklich sein.
Dec. 5, 2020
我每天的生活
大家好。我叫晨星。我今年十九岁了。今天是十二月五日，新年就要到了。
我正在准备开始，可是我要告诉你我每天的生活。我告诉你，就去看中国课文。
我是十八岁的时候开始学汉语，已经一年多了学习。我又热情又认真。如果我学习得好, 我就听懂中国人说的话，写清楚，看懂汉语课文。我汉语学习得比我同学努力，但是他们说汉语比我说的快。
我早上八点就起床。我每天去大学，但是一周三次我上汉语课。我大学在超市旁边。我宿舍离大学不远，坐公共汽车要两刻分钟。有时候八点半课开始，有时候差十分中午开始。
我昨天上课了，写了三十生词。下午回宿舍以后，我复习语法，写汉字。我喜欢听着音乐写汉字。我周末上午从九点到中午做作业。我觉得只要我不复习，就考得不好。只有我做作业了，才去休息。再间！
Dec. 5, 2020
A letter for my dad
My dear dad, I’m writing for you again! We are really glad to received your letter today. All the words are integrated the love and true feelings. Although I stay far away from you , I still can get the feeling of your sincerely solicitude. It make me miss you so much.
Today is 5th,December, I’ll have a 49-days winter holiday and the airplane ticket to home have booked already. I’ll go with a girl who in the same city and her roommate. We planed to take the plane together on 8 o’clock morning. It is not much expensive that we take the plane because we booked it in advance. Everyone is kindly for me ,so do I treasure them sincerely. I and my roommates are close friend now. I also took part in the foreign language association. I remembered the last meeting of new people, someone introduced himself by Russian, someone sang by Korean and most of us introduced ourselves by English; after that ,we had a funny sports. Dad, as to get a driver’s license ,I haven’t considered about it, maybe get it next time.
Dear dad, I haven’t written to you for a long time, and there are too many things happened these day to I don’t know what I to talk,haha. I often have a video call with grandma and mom in my free time or after class, they are fine. But I have to tell you something grievous. We adopted another a black-white cat, both of them are cute, naughty. They played with grandma everyday. Grandma and mom attended them carefully: eat well, wash well, play well, that’s why I love to have a call to see them. But it was cruel that they are all died painfully in a short time several weeks ago because of rat position, probably, and neither the two little cats survived. Mom failed to find the animals hospital, grandma only could did just saw them off silently and it was really a sad night for me. I supper loathe something passing away, it reminded me the white cat which had died in front of me long time ago. Afterwards grandma always said she was afraid to check the box(they remains inside it ) ,she consistently hoped they just got a minor ill, they would alive and play with her again. Grandma have been missing the moment she opened the door as two cats squeezing from the crack; missing the moment she did some clean as two cats disturbed her and played around•••••That’s stop talking about it ,it’s too grievous, everything will be fine ,we’ll miss them forever.
Dear dad, as an English major, it’s quite an interesting thing to learn English. My grammar teacher and I are good friend, she is friendly and easygoing, patient and humorous. Whatever any questions I ask her, she always could teaches me patiently and encourage me a lot: give me the toward direction. We also have foreign teachers. Although foreign teacher have changed three times, I specially like this one. He comes from Pakistan and he has a pure ancient. What’s more ,he always try to stay close with us and he has lived in China for 3 years , so he can speak Chinese fluently and have a talk after class in Chinese, haha. The funniest thing is that I came across him on the second floor of the canteen , wore a cap and concealed his face in the crowd in case someone would recognized him. However, I still greeted to him. And then he sat beside us suddenly and ate together. All of my friends couldn’t answered his questions promptly except me ,I could had a good communication with him. He talked a lot and I shared something about the school. So there are a lot of joys in English communication. Besides that, I often use some apps as to chat with people from around the world. I met a friend come from Italy, he is also found of watching anime and playing video game; in addition, he is learning Chinese and I am learning English. I sent him a composition I written and he corrected it patiently. I’m glad to teach Chinese as well. I got to know many friends around the world. Last time I chatted with a American too much to my fingers are really hurt. What’s more, I have a friend from the Philippines. I knew about him nearly 6 months and I used to often have a video call with him in English, and he will go to the Taiwan for work next month, we promised we will meet someday, haha. But most of them have much time difference than us, for example: when I said good morning for him , but he was going to sleep. By the way, I like to post my English composition to a website, there are many friendly people corrected my mistakes and encourage never give up. likewise ,they through learning Chinese is difficult for them. There are more and more people starting learn Chinese, but it seems that Chinese is a supper I difficult language.
The other thing is that we went out of the school and had a self service barbecue together; then went the Penglai Pavilion, a national 5A tourist attraction. The ticket to it was expensive during busy season, but we entered free because of student ID card ! there are qijiguang’s old home and a lots of old town, old building and green mountains. Standing on the top of here ,we could feast our eyes for the ocean, a large place of golden beach. It’s incredible that the simple tall mountain, blue sky and golden sands could blazing the humanize brilliance. Now some light snow were falling from the sky, with dancing fell on our clothes by the wind. We took a lot of pictures as a memory. Then when I went back, I didn't want to go by car. I rode a self-help electric car back to school. Although it was very cool, it was too cold for me to wear gloves. My hands were frozen. But I rode for nearly 20 minutes for 2 yuan. It was really cost-effective, haha.
Dad, there are too much things to I can’t tell you all. The winter holiday is coming, we won’t go back to hometown as usual. I think I should find a part-time job to improve myself and buy some gifts for grandma and mom. Dad, all we want to see is you living happily there, don’t worry about us ,we are always waiting for you home. I had a call with grandma, all she said from this year to next year and next year, we could see you soon! All she wanna is you be fine. Mom cut a new hairstyle: long wave hair, is beautiful and she showed me many new clothes. Last time She wore a white T-shirt, so brisk and energy, just like a successful woman, haha. Dear dad, that’s all, I’ll write to you often!!
-------your dear son
Dec. 5, 2020
Dec. 5, 2020
¿Qué podemos hacer para combatir el cambio climático?
Hay varios factores que afecta el cambio climático y creo que podemos hacer muchas cosas combatir esto lo. Primero, deberíamos reducir el consumo de agua y energía que disminuir el malgasto producimos. Además, el uso de plástico es otro problema que afecta el cambio climático. Es importante que usemos alternativos para plástico como botellas y contenedores reutilizables porque ayudará reducir el efecto de cambio climático.
Dec. 5, 2020
The Undoing
Well, what can I say about this drama?
New York is beautiful, I want to go there.
Both Hugh Grant and Nicole Kidman looks old.
Actually they are old now.
But if you watch their 90’s movies, they both looks amazingly attractive.
What about this drama?
Very good.
If you already watched you may disagree with me.
Because there are some contents are arguable or even not convince.
I like it and I will tell my friends to watch this drama.
Beside nowadays our life is just working and going home.
Where else can you go?
Anywhere is not safe.
Dec. 5, 2020
Dec. 5, 2020
Le désir d'être parfait
Quand j'étais lycéenne, j'ai aisément réussi mes cours de français. J'ai toujours reçu de bonnes notes, j'ai bien connu la grammaire, j'ai reçu des distinctions scolaires. Lorsque je suis sortie du lycée, je savais que je n'étais pas encore une locutrice très avancée : je ne savais pas conjuguer ou utiliser le subjonctif, je ne lisais pas facilement plusieurs textes français, je devais beaucoup améliorer ma compréhension orale… Quelques années après la fin de mes études au lycée, j'ai rencontré une enseignante de l'Alliance Française qui m'a dit que j'étais probablement entre les niveaux B1et B2. Ce placement me satisfaisait : selon leurs descriptions, ni les niveaux débutants ni les niveaux avancés ne m'avaient semblé appropriés.
Plus tard, j'ai commencé à faire des dictées en ligne afin d'améliorer ma compréhension orale il y a deux ou trois ans. Au début, j'utilisais un site web destiné aux apprenants de français et je faisais les exercices du niveau B2. Bref, je ne recevais que de mauvaises notes. Alors, j'ai décidé de changer le niveau des dictées ; désormais, je ferais celles du niveau B1. Je n'obtenais pas encore de bonne notes, mais au moins, je ne recevais plus si souvent des notes moins que 11/20. C'était un peu consternant. Bien que ma compréhension orale ne fût pas infaillible, je comprenais généralement l'entier des textes des dictées. De plus, je m'étais habituée à toujours réussir aux exercices de français. (Finalement, un an plus tard, un succès : je me suis retournée aux dictées du niveau B2, je les ai tentées et je leur ai assez réussi.)
Il m'est arrivé quelque chose de similaire lorsque j'ai commencé à aider d'autres apprenants en ligne. En général, je pouvais bien expliquer des concepts fondamentaux, mais de temps en temps, je ne remarquais pas une faute ici et là. Après m'être rendu compte de l'omission, je me sentirais toujours un peu inadéquate. Je regrettais de ne pas savoir plus. En tant qu'apprenant et que locuteur non-natif, les petites fautes sont plus gênantes. Mais pourquoi ? On n'est pas au niveau natif ; évidemment, on commettra des fautes. Et si on ne fait que les choses faciles, comment maîtriser la langue ?
Dec. 5, 2020
Current LangCorrect
I feel like current LangCorrect isn't very lively community compared with the one before some updates. Even if I posted a long journal written in poor English, native speakers used to correct it within a day and encourage me with gentle comments.
Moreover, uncorrected Japanese journals have never left for a long time. Regarding this point, I feel regretful that I couldn't take enough time to correct them.
This issue must not be blamed on administrators and community members. It's just because COVID-19 pandemic or each member's motivation. I want to keep learning and correcting.
Dec. 5, 2020
Problèmes de livraison
Madame, Monsieur,
Le 12 Novembre, nous vous avons commandé 500 tableaux blanques, références 29307. Les tableaux blanques sont supposé avoir les cadres en bois, être un mètre, et vous deviez nous livrer ces tableaux il y a onze jours. Or, la marchandise a livrée en retard, et elles livrée n’est pas conforme à la commande. Maintenant, nous formulons des réservations. Premièrement, la livraison est incomplète, comme il manque 136 articles. Deuxièmement, les cadres des tableaux blanques sont en métal, pas bois. Enfin, la haute des tableaux blanques est deux mètres, qui est trop haute. Nous ne pouvons pas utiliser ces tableaux blanques, don nous décide ne pas prendre livraison de la marchandise. Nous retournerons la marchandise a vos frais, et parce que nous avons déjà payé pour les tableaux blanques, nous attendrons d’attendre un rembourse.
Merci par avance.
Dec. 5, 2020
Mein Tag
München, 5.12.2020
Hallo Rachael!
Wie geht's dir? Ich war die letzte Woche sehr beschäftigt und deswegen konnte ich dir nicht beantworten. Wie ist deine Oma? Ist Sie noch in Wien? Erzählst mir bitte über ihre Reise!
Ich habe gehört, dass ein Impstoff für Covid-19 wird bald bereit und für alle Menschen der Welt verfügbar. Ich habe auch einen Artikel über die besten Bücher des Jahres 2020 von der Onlinezeitung, der Guardian gelesen. Ich fandte es sehr interessant und habe einige Bücher in meinem Weihnachtswünschlist gelagert. Die Verbindung ist darunter:
https://www.theguardian.com/books/2020/nov/28/best-books-of-2020
Hast du mit Michael über unseren Feierplan für Februar geredet? Ich hoffe die Koronakrise wird damals vorbei!! Dieses Jahr war sehr verrückt, nicht wahr?
Wie ist das Wetter in SudAfrika? Es ist hier schon sehr kalt geworden und wir müssen uns bald unsere Pullis anziegen.
Ich warte für deinen Brief und mache nun eine schmeckende Heißeschokolade für mich.
Tschüss und schreibst mir bitte bald!
A
Dec. 5, 2020
Annuler une commande
Madame,
Le 8 octobre, nos bureaux vous avons commandent huit ordinateurs, références A708, a fabriqué en gris, et avec le nom de nos bureaux imprime sur les claviers. Les dimensions des ordinateurs ont été 40 cm sur 50 cm, et ils ces était la marque HP. Nous avons convenu payer pour les ordinateurs à la réception de la marchandise, mais nous voudrions annuler la commande des quatre ordinateurs donc recevoir que quatre sur huit ordinateurs. Nous déménageons à un nouveau bureau, donc l’espace disponible est trop petit d’accueillir tous les ordinateurs. Aussi, nos bureaux changent à une production moins technologique, donc nous utiliserons moins des ordinateurs et autre articles technologiques.
J’espère que vous accepterez ma demande d’annuler la moitié de notre commande, et nous donnera satisfaction. Je vous remercie par avance de votre réponse.
Dec. 5, 2020