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IELTS Writing Practice 2
I’m not sure if the last reason is suitable or even reasonable to support my view point but I can’t come up with any other idea. Please give me some advice on the essay or even refine the sentences. Thank you!
(Topic: The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?)
As the technical improvements in vehicles, automobiles have become more and more common in the UK. Some people may consider it an issue that needed to be monitored and controlled by the government, while others suggest that we encourage different means of transportation to lower the congestion. From my viewpoint, I agree with the legislation imposed on the cars to limit the amount of driver and develop more ways of transport to enhance the efficiency of traffic.
First of all, the rising wealth makes the vehicles become more affordable to every household, which means the number of cars are getting higher. To protect the rights and safety of the increasing drivers and pedestrians, the well-rounded laws and restrictions are needed.
Secondly, to achieve the concept and meet the main stream of the environmental protection, government should invest more in the instruction of, for example, bus stops, MRT stations, trains, etc. This policy may reduce the emission of fumes and lower the burden of traffic on the road by raising the willingness and making the transportation system more convenience for the residents and commuters.
Last but not least, the number of death and injury cases caused by car accidents remains high. This could be a reason why we should reduce or set an upper limit of cars running outside since other approaches of travelling, such as bus and trains, are relatively safer.
In conclusion, I consider the total amount of vehicles on the road should be overseen by the government to enhance traffic efficiency and reduce the car accidents. Also, more public transport should be built so as to slow down the global warming process and contribute to a way more sustainable society for our ancestors.
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Dec. 9, 2022
Frases 47
Nota: quiero usar el pronombre "ustedes" con el dialecto de América Latina. Quiero sonar lo más auténtica posible, por favor, siéntanse libres de dejar cualquier corrección.
1. During the summer, my house gets a sea breeze.
- Durante el verano, mi casa experimenta una brisa marina.
2. It is a clear sky.
- Es un día despejado.
3. During the morning there was a downpour (of rain).
- Durante la mañana, había un chaparrón.
4. It was a frosty night.
- Era una noche de helada.
5. We do not get many hail storms here.
- Aquí no experimentamos muchas granizadas.
6. I beat/whisk the eggs (cooking).
- Bato los huevos.
7. I had to peel the banana.
- Tengo que pelear el plátano.
8. I have known her since kindergarten.
- La conocí desde que jardín de infancia.
9. I am in my second year of university.
- Estoy en segundo de universidad.
10. I was early to work for once.
- Por una vez estaba temprano a trabajo.
11. Have you ever been to Australia?
- ¿Alguna vez has estado en Australia?
12. I drank it all in one go.
- Bebí todo de una vez.
13. Whenever I drive home I always want to eat McDonald´s.
- Cada vez conduzco a casa, quiero comer McDonald´s.
14. She lied to me time and time again.
- Me mintió una y otra vez.
15. On the odd occasion, my neighbour says hello.
- Una que otra vez, mi vecino dice hola.
16. Once upon a time…
- Érase una vez…
17. My sister is one year older than me.
- Mi hermana me lleva un año.
18. I have been year for two days.
- Llevo dos días.
19. It took me two hours to get home last night.
- Anoche me llevó dos horas volver a casa.
20. She took me by the hand.
- Me llevó de la mano.
Dec. 9, 2022
Play Tai Chi
December 9, 2022
I'm a freshman now. In this term, we learned 24 style taijiquan in PE class. We will have an exam soon. The content of the exam is to play 24 style tai ji quan to the teacher. This is too difficult for me to play it. I hope I can pass. There are so many moments that I must renew them immediately.
中文：我是大一新生，在这个学期我们在体育课上学了24式太极拳，我们很快就要考试，考试的内容就是给我们的老师打一遍，24式太极拳对我来说很难去做到它，我希望我可以过关，有很多的动作，所以我必须马上就去复习它们
Dec. 9, 2022
The City in which I Live (6)
Let's back to the year around 1985 when I was a kid in elementary school student. I have a strong memory of the charged escalator in a local department store till now.
The escalator is omnipresent nowadays, but around the year 1985 in Chongqing, most of us including me had no idea of it until I paid 0.1 Yuan to step onto it. At that time, my father who was a common engineer in a local institution, his salary was 100 Yuan (US$ 15) a month.
One weekend, my parents took me went shopping in downtown of Chongqing, in the Chongqing Dept. Store, a steel-made escalator connects the ground floor to the 5th floor. When people stepped onto it, then it would auto-transfer them up to a higher floor. Many local citizens were amazed, what an advanced technology it was! One saleswoman standed by, speaking loudly: "Anyone who wants to go to the higher floor must pay 0.1 Yuan each time! Or it's free to go by the walk stairs on foot over there like before."
My father quickly paid 0.5 Yuan for 5 of us and was in the queue.
The picture which was attached below was I found on the net. Actually, my experience was more crowded than it.
Dec. 9, 2022
Los impactos de las redes sociales sobre la sociedad
Últimamente escuché diferentes podcasts tratando del mismo tema: las redes sociales y sus impactos sobre la sociedad. Creo que es interesante ver todas las opiniones que hay.
Por un lado nos permiten conectar con personas de todas partes del mundo. Pueden ser amigos antiguos, familiares lejanos o extraños con quien tenemos intereses comunes. Pero, por otro lado, en realidad pueden alejarnos de los demás y de la vida real. Pueden también crear cámaras de eco y polarización en la sociedad. La circulación de información falsa no ayuda la situación.
Además podemos perder mucho tiempo en el Internet, en particular en las redes sociales, mientras que en teoría deberíamos ganar tiempo usándolo. Por ejemplo es más rápido buscar algo en Wikipedia con su celular que ir a la biblioteca para buscarlo en una enciclopedia.
Entonces no creo que sea posible decir si las redes sociales tienen un impacto positivo o negativo sobre la sociedad. Lo importante es aprender a utilizarles de una manera positiva.
Dec. 9, 2022
Mi noche
Hoy, despuese tocamos la cena, sentado en mi silla favorita a veo la tele. Cuando yo veo a la guia de television, vi que mi hockey favorito equipe fue jugando el hockey en St Louis a los siete de noche. Mi hockey favorito equipe es la Jets de Winnipeg. Despues del periodo fue terminado, hice las palomitos para mi esposa y yo.
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Dec. 8, 2022
Tagebuch 12.08
Ich freue mich sehr darüber, dass jemand meinen ganzen Text echt durchgelesen hat und sehr ernst nahm, mir meine alle Fehler Zeile für Zeile korrigiert hat.
Heute ist alles bei mir sehr gut. Ich habe schließlich angemeldet (nach Anmeldungsgesetz) dann kann ich ein deutsches Bankkonto öffnen. Toll!! Was noch? ich habe einer sehr netten Freundin von mir über meine schlechte Erfahrung erzählt.
ich glaube, wenn man Mut hat, schließlich mit anderen über etwas Trauriges zu reden, fühlt man immer besser als bevor. Sie ist sehr nett zu mir und hat mich gut getröstet. Wir teilen unsere Begegnungen miteinander. Sie sagte mir, dass sie einmal Glück hatte, dass der Busfahrer das gesehen habe und einen Mann rausgeworfen habe, der sich sexuell belästigen wolle....
Ich muss jetzt nicht zu viel Kopf darüber machen.
Jeden Tag fühle ich mich todmüde. Zum Glück habe ich Freuden, die immer für mich da sind.
Dec. 8, 2022
Redacción 5
¿Qué país quieres mudarse? ¿Por qué?
Todas las personas tienen un país más favorito y también quieren moverse a ese país. Para mi tengo también el país favorito y quiero moverse, el que es Japón.
En primer lugar, creo que Japón es muy ordenada. No puede ver nada basura por la calle, y sus edificios también se constituyen con bien cuidado. Me siento muy cómodo cuando camino por la calle.
Segundo, los japoneses son muy educado. Siempre dan un saludo educadamente y dicen：¿En qué puedo ayudarte?". Además, te ayudarán cuando parecen ser que tenga dificultades.
Por último, creo que la comida japonesa es muy delicioso. No solo se parece muy bonita sino que también el sabor es muy bueno. Además, me
me gusta mucho sushi, y el sushi en Japón es muy refresco.
Sobre todo, son las razones de que quiero mudarse a Japón. Quiero comprar un edificio en Japón en el futuro y vivir allá para divertir y sentir la vida en Japón.
Dec. 8, 2022
Why We Compare Ourselves To Others?
Let’s be fair, we compare ourselves to others all the time. When we see someone who is driving an outstanding sports car, or we find out that our college friend have bought a luxurious apartment, most of us start thinking “Gosh, what a lucky man.” Frankly speaking, we also compare ourselves to others in more prosaic circumstances: when we see our friend's new clothes or notice how easily our coworker builds a friendship with others. Immediately after we find out that someone is funnier, richer, or smarter than we are, we start to compare ourselves to them. Unfortunately, most of the time our conclusions aren’t in our favor. Comparing creates negative feelings and causes us to feel jealous, envy, and frustrated. We began asking ourselves, why don’t we achieve the things other people have, and why everyone looks happier then we are. However, should we really compare ourselves to others?
When Have We Started to Compare Ourselves to Others?
Indeed, people have compared themselves to others in the past. Nevertheless, at those times there were no Internet and TV, so people counted more on their intuition when they set their goals and create expectations from life. However, with the development of TV and internet, comparison have become the non-stop activity. TV ads amplified consumeristic crave, so people learnt longing for things they don’t actually need, whether it is a new pair of jeans or a sumptuous apartment. Media created a perfect trap that till now have been successfully provoking in people irresistible desire to have.
With the coming of Internet, this craving for better looking or having better things became enormous because of the very nature of social media. On Instagram, we every day see numerous profiles of wealthy millionaires cheerful bloggers, and pretty models. As a result, even if we don’t want to, we inevitably compare their lives with ours, which leads to negative feelings about ourselves.
Is Comparing Bad?
The fact is, comparing is not that bad. It’s true that it’s part of our nature which helps us to make sure we do things correctly in life. It’s also in our nature to strive for achievements and crave for something what we want to obtain. These features help us to become a better person and gain satisfaction from life, whether through aspiring career goals, learning new skills, or travelling to new places. Comparing becomes a problem when we place too much attention on it and when we think that others are better than we are. Comparing causes envy, jealous and dissatisfaction; it’s a tedious process that places a great pressure on our feeling of self-worth, and makes us vulnerable and insecure. Someone begins thinking about their imperfection, others start analyzing their so called “flaws.”
Comparing ourselves makes u believe that we should change and obtain things that we necessarily don't need. Thus, our disappointment and anxiety push us toward new goals, and we strive to become a better version of ourselves: smart enough, beauty enough and so on. We go to the gym, change careers, go on a diet, thinking that it’ll help us to be the best. It seems that our accomplishments should help us finally feel satisfied. However, when we achieve something, we don’t really feel any different.
Why does that happen? The problem is, the rush for something better is a never-ending process, known in psychology as a “hedonic treadmill.” Once we reach something, we return to the stable baseline of happiness, raise our expectations, and, again, want more. A new state of being soon thereafter becomes a new norm, so we start expecting more from the world: more luxurious apartments, more attractive body, or a successful career. Indeed, after getting what we want we again begin comparing ourselves to others and never feel grateful for what we already have. As a result, comparing never stops and leads only to bigger dissatisfaction in life. Struggling with mental illnesses, food disorders, depression, and anxiety are the results of the rush for the so called “better version of ourselves.”
How To Stop Comparing?
The idea that other people have better life is probably an illusion that creates our own minds. In fact, when we envy an attractive model, or a guy in an expensive Ferrari, we don’t really know what we jealous for, because we don’t see the reality of others life. Who knows, maybe this model is struggling with a food disorder, and this guy have no friends because of his wealthiness. The same is true for social media. When we see famous bloggers on bounty islands, or our cheerful friends on their holidays — in posh environment and in luxurious dresses — we compare their “top moments” with our average, day-to-day life. We think their lives are easy and free from worries, forgetting that nobody is willing to show their exhaustion, sadness, or loneliness online. We forget that wealthy businessman probably has an enormous burden of responsibility and, perhaps, works so much that he doesn’t see his family and children. Probably, he also has no weekends or holidays.
We don’t know what it is, what we are jealous of, so it’s better to be jealous carefully. It would be better to keep in mind that all of us have our own unique circumstances, talents, and personality. Every single person has their own advantages and problems, so it’s just incorrect to compare ourselves with others. Instead of comparing, let’s concentrate on something what we really can control, namely our life. We can’t control others, but we can see who we were yesterday, who we’re becoming today in order to get what we want tomorrow. We can accept ourselves and live our unique lives in authentic ways. Marcus Aurelius said that the best way to live is by accepting other people and ourselves, and learn to live well regardless on the circumstances. If we accept who we are, we liberate our minds from the buzz of social judgments and comparing. Therefore, get the chance to become truly happy.
Dec. 8, 2022
Комментарий для Николас
Привет Николас! Рада, что ты вернулся. Я испанка и учу русский язык. Первый раз, что я тебе встретила был на видео на канал называется 'Genia y caballo'. Тогда, я захотела начать изучение русского языка, но была побоялась потому, что я слышала, что русский один из самых сложных языков в мире. Женя была одним из немногих каналов изучении русского, когда русский не был так популярный, как сегодня. Я тебя нашла одно из её видео и я была впечатлена, что ты имеешь свободно говорить русский, особенно зная, что ты говорящий по-испански, как и я. Ты был моей мотивацией, чтобы начать учиться годами. Я была очень грустная, когда ты забросил свой канал. Я твой канал забыла а я продолжала учиться. 4 дня назад, я тебе вспомнила и подписался ещё раз. Какое совпадение! На следующий день ты загрузил это видео. Я не могу быть счастливее. Можно записать видео, где говоришь как выучил русский?))) Спасибо за всё!!!
Dec. 8, 2022
Challenge, Day 68
Today is the 68th day of my daily English challenge. At noon, my sister and I went out by her car, and she had listened a song by Céline Dion in French is ' Je voudrais parlais à mon père.' I think in English it means ' I'd like to talk to my father' to honor our father. It's a strong words and a song.
Dec. 8, 2022
Día 38 de mi reto
Hoy es el día 38 de mi reto de español. Ahora quiero escribir algunas oraciónes.
-Estás engordando, necesitas perder peso y evitar de la comida chatarra.
-Estás engordando, necesitas dejar de comer dulces.
Creo que es diferente decir entre ' dejar de' y ' evitar de' ? ¿Me puede ayudar por favor?
-Ayer, compré una camisa. No me queda muy bien. Mañana, voy a devolverla.
Estoy agradecida por este sitio web y todos los que me han ayudado.
Dec. 8, 2022
The difference between people who loves cats and who loves d
When I was a child I noticed that all people around me were divided on two parts. There are the part who loves cats and the other one, who loves dogs. In the same period of time I made a conclusion that it depended on a character of the person. For instance, more independent people like cats more than dogs. These people don’t need to have a permanent connection with their pets. And we can say the same thing about cats. This sort of pet doesn’t need to spend a lot of with people. They can find an activity by their own. Food is only one thing they really want to get from owners.
The situation with dogs is the totally opposite. Usually dog’s owner is a person who likes to be active, talkative and in the moving all time. Such people prefer to have a pet like a partner, a companion for them. Also, I have heard one interesting moment about the difference between owners of cats and owners of dogs. First people are people who need to love, but seconds are people who need to be loved. I think there is something in this.
Dec. 8, 2022
el diciembre 8 2022
Hoy es el jueves y no tengo una grabación de mi hablando en español así que escribo algo corto. Tengo ganas de mudarme a la nueva casa este finde. Aparte de eso, todo está ré bien en el trabajo. Acabo de cumplir dos años de empleo para mi compañia. Es la duración más larga de mi carrera.
Dec. 8, 2022
Una anécdota de un amor inocente
Es una pregunta interesante, porque nunca mi sentí "inocente". Desde que tengo memoria, recorda que he sentido el amor, el odío, grandes alegrías y dolores profundos. A mi modo de ver, la "inocencia" de la niñez es un mito de adultos que olvidan cuánto profunda es la vida interior de los niños. Pero bueno, me sucedierón algunos momentos de amor inocente, sí, antes de que mi corazón se hiciese una montaña de hielo.
En el primer año de la escuela primaria, quería a una chica que se llamaba Marion. Dios, ¡cómo la quería! Estaba tan enamorado de ella, con su pelo rubio y su sonreir feliz... Era hermosísima, llena de vida, se reía todo el tiempo. ¡Y tenía carácter! Cuando la veía golpearse para jugar son sus amigos, me parecía valiente y fuerte, entonces me parecía que sabía luchar. Admiraba todas sus cualidades, porque en esta época, ella era exactamente lo contrario de lo que era yo.
Un día, había ganado un premio. No recuerdo de qué concurso se trataba, pero recuerdo que me había esforzado al máximo para ganar el premio, que era un pequeño cactus, muy guapito. Decidí darlo a Mario. Sonrojando, extendí la mano y dije: "lo he ganado, pero quisiera dártelo..." Rió y me agradeció, "¡qué adorable! ¡Muchas gracias!"
Nuestro amor era imposible: era en quinto año de la escuela primeria, por tanto, mucho más grande que yo. Marion era buena con todo el mundo, pero teníamos pocos contactos. Supongo que para ella, mi gesto era solo él de un niño amable. No podía imaginar todo el amor que me consumía. Me faltó el coraje para decirle cuánto la quería.
¿Qué ha sido de tí, Marion? Richard III, en la pieza de Shakespeare, dice: "¡mi reino por un caballo!" ; sin embargo, daría mucho más para verte una vez más...
Dec. 8, 2022
Cuidar las plantas
Ayer pase tiempo para mantener la salud de mis plantas. Hay varios pasos que se puede hacer. Empiezo por lavar las hojas en la lavamanos si caben, y en la ducha si no las caben en la lavamanos. Entonces, añado granos de abono al tierra, lo cual juegan el papel de vitaminas como en el cuerpo humano. Jamás me había gustado la metáfora de que el abono es la comida de plantas porque lo que comen es el aire y la luz. Solo necesitan el abono cada tres meses. Al final aplico un aceite, neem, que protege contra insectos.
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Dec. 8, 2022
Lost
I went to a hospital for a checkup today.
I went to there by subway, but I didn't know where I was because I went out a different exit than usual.
During I checked where I was in Google Maps app on my smartphone, an old lady approached me and asked the way to a restaurant.
I thought in my heart that “I'm lost too, so I don't know,” but when I looked around, I saw a signboard of the restaurant, so I told her.
I was glad to able to tell her.
I could get to the hospital soon after that.
Dec. 8, 2022
フエがだんだん変わってきました。以前と比べて、今はどのように変わりましたか。友達がわかるように説明してください。
私はフエに生まれ育っていました。今まで21年ぶりです。フエは深閑な歴史の都市でしたが、だんだんモダンで活気になります。変わったことがたくさんあります。でも、最も印象的な変化は都市の外観です。
以前は、フエに高い建物があまり多くないです。今は、高層ビルがどんどん建設されています。人の生活のために、ショッピングセンターとか、映画館とか、ホテルとか、色々なサービスのセンターができました。夜になると、灯りがついてもっときれいで明るくなります。以前と比べて、これはフエが成長している証拠ですね。
以前なら、木があまりたくさん植えられませんでしたが、今はフエがつつ緑都市になります。フエのどこへ行っても、緑の木に覆われます。そうだけでわない。ここの道はいつもきれいにします。これこそ、空気が新鮮になって、人の気分がだんだん快適になるかもしれないと思います。都市がいつも清潔を保つのは大切ことです。環境がきれいであれば、生活の質が向上します。現在、フエがそんな都市です。
フエはもともと古都で、今も昔も何も変わっていません。世界と一体化するように、外観が変わっているのが自然ことです。都市を発展させて、都市の本来の美しさを維持するのは全ての都市ができることではないと思います。でも、フエがとてもうまくやっています。
外観を変わってだけでなく、地方自治体は生活の質を改良しています。学校などの教育機関には、学習設備が完備されています。医療センターには、人々の健康のために、多くのモダン器具がつかわれています。人々が長生くかもしれませんね。これが一番意味のある変化だと思います。
フエは私の故郷です。故郷が少しずつ変わっていくのを見るのは嬉しいことです。その一方で、たくさんの不安を持っています。
Dec. 8, 2022
TOEFL Writing| Computers make life easier
Topic:
Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
My essay:
While some say that computers bring stress and troubles to daily lives, I counter that computers have made our lives easier and more convenient for three reasons, which I'll explore in the following essay.
First of all, computers have made learning and studying more easily. With computers, it's direct to skim and find useful passage and learn new knowledge. Imaging that if there are no computers, one who wants to get some information has to go to a library and search through thousands of books.
Second, computers have helped us communicate with each other. As our devices are connected to the Internet, it's easy for we to chat and talk with each other in any time, at anywhere. Moreover, the computers provide us a screen to see each other lively, which is a more efficient way to interact. Without computers, we can only communicate by telephones or even letters. My experience is a good example to illustrate this. Since I went to a college far from my hometown, it had been difficult for me to chat with families face to face. Thanks to the computer and the chat apps, I'm able to talk with my parents everyday by several simple clicks.
Last but not the least, computers and the Internet has become more and more important since the COVID-19 spread over the world. The pandemic has changed our lives in all aspects, from education to entertainment. For instance, our college stopped in-class teaching and forbade students entering the campus because of numerous positive cases last year. To continue teaching, our college decided to switch to online courses, providing a convenient way for both students and teachers in the specific time. It's impossible to do such a change without the help of computers.
In conclusion, computers have played a significant role in assisting people working in different fields. As the repercussion of COVID-19 still exists, computers will become more and more necessary in our lives.
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