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TOEFL Writing Challenge No.1
<Question>
A new poetry magazine has asked its readers for submissions, and you decided to submit two of your poems. However, you had a problem using the online submission form, and you are not certain that your submissions were received.
Write an email to the editor of the magazine. In your email, do the following
・Tell the director what you like about the magazine
・Describe the problem you experienced
・Ask about the status of your submissions
Write as much as you can and complete the sentences.(100-150 Words)
<My answer>
Dear Team Sunshine Poetry Magazine,
I am writing because of the problem I experienced when I submitted my poems for your magazine.
As I submitted my poems online, I had a problem using the online submission form. Because of that problem, I am not sure if I was able to sucessfully send my poems.
It would be very sad if they were not sent, as I really love your magazine. For me, your magazine your explanations of the poems including backgrounds of them hepls a lot enjoying them.
I would be very greatful if you could check the status of my poems, and please let me know if you received my poems correctly.
Thank you very much,
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TOEFL Writing Challenge No.1
<Question>
A new poetry magazine has asked its readers for submissions, and you decided to submit two of your poems.
However, you had a problem using the online submission form, and you are not certain that your submissions were received.
Write an email to the editor of the magazine.
In your email, do the following
・Tell the director what you like about the magazine
・Describe the problem you experienced
・Ask about the status of your submissions
Write as much as you can and complete the sentences.
(100-150 Words)
<My answer>
Dear Team Sunshine Poetry Magazine Team,
Dear Sunshine Poetry Magazine Team,
I am writing because of thea problem I experienced when I submitted my poems forto your magazine.
I am writing because of a problem I experienced when I submitted my poems to your magazine.
'the' is not exactly wrong, but sounds like you are referencing a problem they are already aware of.
As I submitted my poems online, I had a problem using the online submission form.
Because of thatis problem, I am not sure if I was able to successfully send my poems.
Because of this problem, I am not sure if I was able to successfully send my poems.
Same idea as the correction above
It would be very sad if they were not sent, as I really love your magazine.
For me, your magazine yYour explanations of the poems, including their backgrounds of them hepls a lot, really helps me enjoying them.
Your explanations of the poems, including their backgrounds, really helps me enjoy them.
I would be very greateful if you could check the status of my poems, and please let me know if you received my pothems correctly.
I would be very grateful if you could check the status of my poems, and please let me know if you received them correctly.
Using 'my poems' twice in one sentence sounds wordy. In this case, it is better to use a pronoun to reference the noun from earlier in the sentence.
Thank you very much,
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Great job! You express yourself very clearly and thoroughly!
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<My answer> This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Dear Team Sunshine Poetry Magazine,
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I am writing because of the problem I experienced when I submitted my poems for your magazine.
I am writing because of 'the' is not exactly wrong, but sounds like you are referencing a problem they are already aware of. |
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As I submitted my poems online, I had a problem using the online submission form. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Because of that problem, I am not sure if I was able to sucessfully send my poems.
Because of th Same idea as the correction above |
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It would be very sad if they were not sent, as I really love your magazine. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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For me, your magazine your explanations of the poems including backgrounds of them hepls a lot enjoying them.
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I would be very greatful if you could check the status of my poems, and please let me know if you received my poems correctly.
I would be very gr Using 'my poems' twice in one sentence sounds wordy. In this case, it is better to use a pronoun to reference the noun from earlier in the sentence. |
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Thank you very much, This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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