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Video games and new generation, How can we deal with that?

Video games have been the phenomena of 21 century. it brought a new style of entertainment to our world and changed some manners inside us and inside societies. The generation that has raised with video games was totally different from the other generations. The video game generation has a lot of knowledges, that they learn from games. We will discus it more at below.
Gamers have to spend a lot of times by themselves. It means, they have limited social contact. So, it would be too much hard to them to have a good relationship with other people. Gamers in social abilities could be retarded and it is a real matter because maybe it would make them to feel blue. Because of loneliness, maybe they would commit suicide. In addition, video games make them super imaginative. They do not get real experiences in the real world. They would have not touched the real issues and problems of life. They just fantasize about the life and matters. Also, playing video games may take too much time from gamers. It would be a disaster because it is possible that they forget the target of living and they would be satisfied with a little enjoyment of life.
On the other hand, they have a lot of knowledges in any fields that could be useful. Experts say that playing video games improve mental functions and children who play video games are able to do faster reactions and take more risky decisions in the life. Besides, playing video games is a wise way to keep teenagers away from risky activities like using drugs. Today, in many countries utilize video games to educate teenagers because it is fun and unboring. Learning by games would be the future of our world in learning process. Also, it could be a gateway for teenagers and kids to get to know modern technology from inside by using it. It would arouse their curiosity to discover and probe more about technology.
To sum up, playing video games is mixed blessing. The important point is that parents have to have control on their children to be sure that they are doing good and nothing is danger for them. Kids should not play video games uncontrolledly. They can guarantee their future and enjoy their childhood by using recommended amount of playing.

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Gamers have to spend a lot of times by themselves.

In addition, video games make them super imaginative.

They do not get real experiences in the real world.

Besides, playing video games is a wise way to keep teenagers away from risky activities like using drugs.

Kids should not play video games uncontrolledly.

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May 22, 2020

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Video games and new generation, How can we deal with that?


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You need to use 'the' because new generation is a specific generation and thus is definite. 'How can we deal with that'- we would use 'that' when the action is somewhat far away in time or place. Like: 'You fell off your bike last week? How did you deal with that?' 'This' is better.

Video games have been the phenomena of 21 century.


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'been' is in the present 'become' past Video games have already become a phenomenon so you use the past tense.

it brought a new style of entertainment to our world and changed some manners inside us and inside societies.


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Here, style suggests a new way of doing an old activity- for example, style of acting, style of dressing. Type would suggest a new activity entirely. Manners- this would do more politeness rather than ways of thinking

The generation that has raised with video games was totally different from the other generations.


The generation that has been raised with video games wais totally different from the other generations. The generation that has been raised with video games is totally different from other generations.

The video game generation has a lot of knowledges, that they learn from games.


The video game generation has a lot of knowledges, that they learn from games. The video game generation has a lot of knowledge that they learn from games.

The video game generation has a lot of knowledges, that they learn from games. The video game generation has a lot of knowledge, that they learn from games.

We will discus it more at below.


We will discuss it more at below. We will discuss it more below.

We will discus its this more at below. We will discuss this more below.

Gamers have to spend a lot of times by themselves.


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It means, they have limited social contact.


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ItThis means, that they have limited social contact. This means that they have limited social contact.

So, it would be too much hard to them to have a good relationship with other people.


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So,Thus it would be too much hard tofor them to have a good relationship with other people. Thus it would be too much hard for them to have a good relationship with other people.

Gamers in social abilities could be retarded and it is a real matter because maybe it would make them to feel blue.


Gamers in social abilities could be retardedcould be delayed in social skills and it is a real matter because maybe it wthis could make them to feel bluedepressed. Gamers could be delayed in social skills and it is a real matter because this could make them feel depressed.

Just so you know: the way you used "retarded" isn't technically wrong, but it's considered an outdated and insulting way to refer to someone with intellectual difficulties now. "Blue" also isn't technically wrong, but someone who feels so sad that they would kill themselves would be referred to as "depressed".

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Just a cultural note: In general the word 'retarded' is offensive in English.

Because of loneliness, maybe they would commit suicide.


Because of this loneliness, maybe they wcould commit suicide. Because of this loneliness they could commit suicide.

In addition, video games make them super imaginative.


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They do not get real experiences in the real world.


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They would have not touched the real issues and problems of life.


They would have non't touched the real issues and problems of life. They haven't touched the real issues and problems of life.

They just fantasize about the life and matters.


They just fantasize about the life and matters. They just fantasize about the life.

Also, playing video games may take too much time from gamers.


Also, playing video games may takbe too much time from gamerstime-consuming. Also, playing video games may be too time-consuming.

It would be a disaster because it is possible that they forget the target of living and they would be satisfied with a little enjoyment of life.


It would be a disasterous, because it i's possible that they could forget the targetgoal of living and they would bebecoming satisfied with a little enjoyment ofnot really enjoying their life. It would be disastrous, because it's possible that they could forget the goal of living and becoming satisfied with not really enjoying their life.

On the other hand, they have a lot of knowledges in any fields that could be useful.


On the other hand, they have a lots of knowledges in many fields that could be usefuluseful fields. On the other hand, they have lots of knowledge in many useful fields.

Experts say that playing video games improve mental functions and children who play video games are able to do faster reactions and take more risky decisions in the life.


Experts say that playing video games improves mental functions and children who play video games are able to do react faster reactions and take more risky decisions in the life. Experts say that playing video games improves mental functions and children who play video games are able to do react faster and take more risky decisions in the life.

Besides, playing video games is a wise way to keep teenagers away from risky activities like using drugs.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Today, in many countries utilize video games to educate teenagers because it is fun and unboring.


Today, in many countries utilize video games to educate teenagers because it is fun and unboring. Today, many countries utilize video games to educate teenagers because it is fun.

Learning by games would be the future of our world in learning process.


Learning by games wcould be the future of our world in's learning process. Learning by games could be the future of our world's learning process.

Also, it could be a gateway for teenagers and kids to get to know modern technology from inside by using it.


Also, it could be a gateway for teenagers and kids to get to know modern technology from inside by using it. Also, it could be a gateway for teenagers and kids to get to know modern technology by using it.

It would arouse their curiosity to discover and probe more about technology.


It wcould arouse their curiosity to discover and probe more about technology. It could arouse their curiosity to discover and probe more about technology.

To sum up, playing video games is mixed blessing.


The important point is that parents have to have control on their children to be sure that they are doing good and nothing is danger for them.


The important point is that parents have to have control on their children to be sure that they are doing good and nothing is dangerous for them. The important point is that parents have to control on their children to be sure that they are doing good and nothing is dangerous for them.

Kids should not play video games uncontrolledly.


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They can guarantee their future and enjoy their childhood by using recommended amount of playing.


They can guarantee their future and enjoy their childhood by usplaying a recommended amount of playing. They can guarantee their future and enjoy their childhood by playing a recommended amount.

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