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April 24, 2020

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Do you think the beauty industry is important?

Well, first. I probably should talk about what comes to mind when I hear the words "beauty industry."

First of all, I think about plastic surgery, then beauty saloons where girls get their nails done, as well as other things. A simple barbershop is also a part of the beauty industry.

In general, I think we all need this. It benefits us all. It will be prosperous in the future and I think it would a good place to work in.

I just watched Kurzgesagt's video Why Beautiful Things Make us Happy. In the video it was mentioned that sense of beauty is something innate. For example, even Alzheimer's patients can recognize beauty despite not remembering their choice, they would rank the same pictures in the same order of beauty.

It was also mentioned that people in general fell better when there are more beautiful things and people prefer to live in beautiful cities.

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Do you think the beauty industry is important?

I probably should talk about what comes to mind when I hear the words "beauty industry.

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A simple barbershop is also a part of the beauty industry.

In general, I think we all need this.

It benefits us all.

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anton_rich

April 24, 2020

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Do you think the beauty industry is important?

A simple barbershop is also a part of the beauty industry.

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anton_rich

April 24, 2020

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It will be prosperous in the future and I think it would a good place to work in.


It will be prosperous in the future and I think it would a good placefield to work in. It will be prosperous in the future and I think it would a good field to work in.

a good place to work in -> an actual place (a barbershop, a salon) a good field to work in -> field is an industry (a cluster of jobs), which is what you were trying to say here

It will be prosperous in the future and I think it would a good placearea to work in. It will be prosperous in the future and I think it would a good area to work in.

When talking about an industry it's referred to as 'field,' 'industry,' or 'area.'

It will continue to be prosperous in the future and, so I think it would a good placeindustry to work in. It will continue to be prosperous in the future, so I think it would a good industry to work in.

I think saying "It will be prosperous" is a little strange because it suggests it isn't prosperous now.

Do you think the beauty industry is important?


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Well, first.


Well, first. of all, Well, first of all,

Well, first.First of all, First of all,

"Well, first" is not a sentence.

I probably should talk about what comes to mind when I hear the words "beauty industry.


I probably should talk about what comes to mind when I hear the words "beauty industry". I probably should talk about what comes to mind when I hear the words "beauty industry".

I would combine the first two sentences, and it is ... when I hear the words "beauty industry".

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First of all, I think about plastic surgery, then beauty saloons where girls get their nails done, as well as other things.


First of all, I think aboutI think about cosmetic things, examples being plastic surgery, then or beauty saloons where girls get their nails done, as well as other things. I think about cosmetic things, examples being plastic surgery or beauty salons where girls get their nails done.

Sounds smoother like this - you said in your last sentence 'first'. The 'then' in this sentence makes it sound awkward.

First of all, I think about plastic surgery, then beauty saloons where girls get their nails done, as well as other things. First of all, I think about plastic surgery, then beauty salons where girls get their nails done as well as other things.

A simple barbershop is also a part of the beauty industry.


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In general, I think we all need this.


In general, I think we all need this., In general, I think we all need this,

I personally wouldn't say 'this', it sounds clear. 'these things' or 'cosmetics' or 'self-care'

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In general, I think we all need this industry. In general, I think we all need this industry.

What is "this" referring to, a barbershop or the beauty industry? I changed to industry because I think that is what you mean.

It benefits us all.


Ibecause it benefits us all. because it benefits us all.

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I just watched Kurzgesagt's video Why Beautiful Things Make us Happy.


I just watched Kurzgesagt's video called "Why Beautiful Things Make uUs Happy". I just watched Kurzgesagt's video called "Why Beautiful Things Make Us Happy".

I just watched Kurzgesagt's video : "Why Beautiful Things Make us Happy." I just watched Kurzgesagt's video: "Why Beautiful Things Make us Happy."

In the video it was mentioned that sense of beauty is something innate.


In the video, it was mentioned that sense of beauty is something innate. In the video, it was mentioned that sense of beauty is something innate.

In the video, it was mentioned that sense of beauty is something innate. In the video, it was mentioned that sense of beauty is something innate.

A comma is needed to separate the dependent clause from the main clause.

In the video, it was mentioned that a sense of beauty is something innate. In the video, it was mentioned that a sense of beauty is something innate.

Or: In the video, it was mentioned that having a sense of beauty is something innate.

For example, even Alzheimer's patients can recognize beauty despite not remembering their choice, they would rank the same pictures in the same order of beauty.


For example, even Alzheimer's patients can recognize beauty d. Despite not remembering their choice, they would rank the same pictures in the same order of beauty. For example, even Alzheimer's patients can recognize beauty. Despite not remembering their choice, they would rank the same pictures in the same order of beauty.

For example, even Alzheimer's patients can recognize beauty d. Despite not remembering their choice, they would rank the same pictures in the same order of beauty. For example, even Alzheimer's patients can recognize beauty. Despite not remembering their choice, they would rank the same pictures in the same order of beauty.

It was also mentioned that people in general fell better when there are more beautiful things and people prefer to live in beautiful cities.


It was also mentioned that people in general felel better when there are more beautiful things surrounding them, and people prefer to live in beautiful cities. It was also mentioned that people in general feel better when there are more beautiful things surrounding them, and people prefer to live in beautiful cities.

It was also mentioned that people in general felel better when there are more beautiful things, and that people prefer to live in beautiful cities. It was also mentioned that people in general feel better when there are more beautiful things, and that people prefer to live in beautiful cities.

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