April 16, 2021
My Trip to Italy and My Missing Toy!
Writing Challenge: Day 16
Friday, April 16th, 2021
I have two brothers and two sisters. When my parents used to travel, they used to choose one of us to take with them, and leave the rest at home. Once I was the chosen one and I got myself a trip to Italy : )
I felt lucky and it was my first time in a hotel room by myself. It was winter and weather was cold and snowy. All my photos with my father show us under a huge umbrella and a snowfall :D
I remember an incident where I thought a man was giving away chewing gums to everyone, so I took one and thanked him. When he started following me, I remember I ran towards my parents and that man started yelling and moving his hand angrly. Apparently he was selling the chewing gum and unknowingly I stole one :D
Luckily he left us alone when my father gave him money and apologised for what I did.
It's tough to be a six years old in a foreign country ;) hehe
I bought a leather bag from Rome that I still use sometimes as a wallet. It's extremely beautiful. My parents bought me a toy, a stuffed sheep that I used to love so much. One day I lost it and I think what happened was that we had some visitors at home and one of their boys took it home with him.
Whenever I see a stuffed animal that looks like my old stuffed sheep, I just feel like buying it!
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My Trip to Italy and My Missing Toy!
Writing Challenge: Day 16
Friday, April 16th, 2021
I have two brothers and two sisters.
When my parents used to travel, they used to choose one of us to take with them, and leave the rest at home.
Once I was the chosen one and I got myself a trip to Italy : )
I felt lucky, and it was my first time in a hotel room by myself. I felt lucky, and it was my first time in a hotel room by myself.
It was winter, and weather was cold and snowy. It was winter, and weather was cold and snowy.
All my photos with my father show us under a huge umbrella and awith snow falling :D
All my photos with my father show us under a huge umbrella with snow falling :D
I remember an incident where I thought a man was giving away chewing gums to everyone, so I took one and thanked him.
I remember an incident where I thought a man was giving away chewing gum to everyone, so I took one and thanked him.
When he started following me, I remember I ran towards my parents and that the man started yelling and moving his hand angrily. When he started following me, I remember I ran towards my parents and that the man started yelling and moving his hand angrily.
Apparently he was selling the chewing gum, and I had unknowingly I stole one :D
Apparently he was selling the chewing gum, and I had unknowingly stole one :D
Luckily, he left us alone when my father gave him money and apologiszed for what I didhad done.
Luckily, he left us alone when my father gave him money and apologized for what I had done.
It's tough to be a six years old in a foreign country ;) hehe
I bought a leather bag from Rome that I still use sometimes as a wallet.
It's extremely beautiful.
My parents bought me a toy, a stuffed sheep that I used to love so much.
One day, I lost it and I think what happened was that we had some visitors at homour house and one of their boys took it home with him.
One day, I lost it and I think what happened was that we had some visitors at our house and one of their boys took it home with him.
Whenever I see a stuffed animal that looks like my old stuffed sheep, I just feel like buying it!
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Great Job! Just a few corrections!
April 16, 2021
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I have two brothers and two sisters. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When my parents used to travel, they used to choose one of us to take with them, and leave the rest at home. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Once I was the chosen one and I got myself a trip to Italy : ) This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I felt lucky and it was my first time in a hotel room by myself. I felt lucky, and it was my first time in a hotel room by myself. I felt lucky, and it was my first time in a hotel room by myself. |
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It was winter and weather was cold and snowy. It was winter, and weather was cold and snowy. It was winter, and weather was cold and snowy. |
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All my photos with my father show us under a huge umbrella and a snowfall :D
All my photos with my father show us under a huge umbrella |
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I remember an incident where I thought a man was giving away chewing gums to everyone, so I took one and thanked him.
I remember an incident where I thought a man was giving away chewing gum |
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When he started following me, I remember I ran towards my parents and that man started yelling and moving his hand angrly. When he started following me, I remember I ran towards my parents and that the man started yelling and moving his hand angrily. When he started following me, I remember I ran towards my parents and that the man started yelling and moving his hand angrily. |
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Apparently he was selling the chewing gum and unknowingly I stole one :D
Apparently he was selling the chewing gum, and I had unknowingly |
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Luckily he left us alone when my father gave him money and apologised for what I did.
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It's tough to be a six years old in a foreign country ;) hehe This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I bought a leather bag from Rome that I still use sometimes as a wallet. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It's extremely beautiful. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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My parents bought me a toy, a stuffed sheep that I used to love so much. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One day I lost it and I think what happened was that we had some visitors at home and one of their boys took it home with him.
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Whenever I see a stuffed animal that looks like my old stuffed sheep, I just feel like buying it! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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