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I don't like to use the dream as a word here. It sounds like an old tune. I just would like to talk about what I am going to do, and what kind of person I am going to be.
I am going to finding a intership since I alreday experienced 6 times interships. After that I am going to continue my studying in University, after two years I am going to graduate and get a bachelor degree (I hope I can). And then, I need to get a job first wtih not very low salary can help me survie in the society and take some money to treat my parents and friends well, also enjoying the life myself. In the left two years, I am going to try some ways to run a small business. As a university student, this two years may be the most causal time in my life and I should not waste it. I don't want to set a flag but I hope I can do it.
What kind of person I am going to be? I hope I can keep kind, honest and love to myself. I hope I can be more powerful and shining, in this case, people around me will feel safe and at ease.
Time is passing by, let me do it one step by one step, down to earth.


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I don't want to set a flag but I hope I can do it.

I, too, am unfamiliar with this usage of “set a flag.”

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I don't like to use the dream as a word here.


I don't like to use the dream as a wordwould rather not use the word “dream” here. I would rather not use the word “dream” here.

It sounds like an old tune.


It sounds like something from an old tune/song. It sounds like something from an old tune/song.

“Song” sounds more natural to me in this context.

I just would like to talk about what I am going to do, and what kind of person I am going to be.


I just would just like to talk about what I am going to do, and what kind of person I am going to be. I would just like to talk about what I am going to do, and what kind of person I am going to be.

I am going to finding a intership since I alreday experienced 6 times interships.


I am going to finding a another internship since I have alredady experienced them 6 times interships. I am going to find another internship since I have already experienced them 6 times.

After that I am going to continue my studying in University, after two years I am going to graduate and get a bachelor degree (I hope I can).


After that, I am going to continue my studyingies in University, after. In two years, I am going to graduate and get a bachelor's degree (I hope I can). After that, I am going to continue my studies in University. In two years, I am going to graduate and get a bachelor's degree (I hope I can).

And then, I need to get a job first wtih not very low salary can help me survie in the society and take some money to treat my parents and friends well, also enjoying the life myself.


Andfter thenat, I need to get a job first wtihjob with a not very low salary can. This would help me survive in the society and take some money to treat my parents and friends well, while also enjoying the life myself. After that, I need to get a first job with a not very low salary. This would help me survive in society and take some money to treat my parents and friends well, while also enjoying life myself.

In the left two years, I am going to try some ways to run a small business.


In the left two years remaining, I am going to try to learn some ways to run a small business. In the two years remaining, I am going to try to learn some ways to run a small business.

As a university student, this two years may be the most causal time in my life and I should not waste it.


As a university student, thisese two years may be the most causal time in my life and I should not waste ithem. As a university student, these two years may be the most causal time in my life and I should not waste them.

As a university student, thisese next two years may be the most [causal] (carefree?) time in my life, and I should not waste it. As a university student, these next two years may be the most [causal] (carefree?) time in my life, and I should not waste it.

Do you really mean “causal”? Causal: “connected with the relationship between two things, where one causes the other to happen” https://www.oxfordlearnersdictionaries.com/definition/english/causal?q=causal Maybe you misspelled “casual”? If so, I’d suggest replacing it with “carefree.”

I don't want to set a flag but I hope I can do it.


I don't want to set a flag but I hope I can do it. I don't want to set a flag but I hope I can do it.

Unclear meaning - "set a flag" is not a phrase I am familiar with

I don't want to set a flag but I hope I can do it. I don't want to set a flag but I hope I can do it.

I, too, am unfamiliar with this usage of “set a flag.”

What kind of person I am going to be?


What kind of person I am I going to be? What kind of person am I going to be?

I hope I can keep kind, honest and love to myself.


I hope I can keepstay kind, honest, and love to myself. I hope I can stay kind, honest, and love myself.

Oxford comma after the honest is optional, but typically used in informal settings

I hope I can keep being kind, honest and loveing to myself. I hope I can keep being kind, honest and loving to myself.

Another possibility: “I hope I can remain kind, honest and self-loving.” (This means you want to treat others with kindness and honesty, and treat yourself with love.)

I hope I can be more powerful and shining, in this case, people around me will feel safe and at ease.


I hope I can be more powerful and shining, ie. In this caseway, people around me will feel safe and at ease. I hope I can be more powerful and shine. In this way, people around me will feel safe and at ease.

Time is passing by, let me do it one step by one step, down to earth.


Time is passing by, let me do it one step by one step,at a time and remain down to earth. Time is passing by, let me do it one step at a time and remain down to earth.

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