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kiwy

Aug. 10, 2021

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I have wathed the vaudeville act 'Billy Elliot' online today. It is wonderful show and I recommend you guys to watch. When I was watching it, I thought that it would be a fantastic experience if I should have sit in the theater. I have never seen any vaudeville act offline. I wish I will oneday.
I like the dance in the show very much. Especially the tap dancing, it cheered me up. I was confused by the songs, I thought they were not saying English totally while the background was in a small town of England. Maybe there were saying a kind of dialect.
Actually, it was a show about a little who was talented in ballet. Although ballet is beautiful and elegant, I don't like it because it looks painful especially when the dancers stand in their toe. I am wondenring whether they feel pain everytime when I watch ballet. I like dance, in particular the Western modern dance. I think it is so free and touching. Eventhough most of time, I can't get what the dancers want to express, I'm always struck by the them.
I also like Hip Hop dance. It feels like free as well even if I'm tone-deaf. I think what I like is something natural adn free.

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Especially the tap dancing, it cheered me up.

I think it is so free and touching.

I also like Hip Hop dance.

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Aug. 11, 2021

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Actually, it was a show about a little who was talented in ballet.


Actually, it was a show about a little boy who was talented in ballet. Actually, it was a show about a little boy who was talented in ballet.

Or "little kid" or just "boy".

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I have wathed the vaudeville act 'Billy Elliot' online today.


I have watched the vaudeville actmusical 'Billy Elliot' online today. I watched the musical 'Billy Elliot' online today.

I don't have a satisfying explanation why, but present perfect sounds a bit strange here. Vaudeville is a very specific thing, very old-fashioned, from the 1890s.

It is wonderful show and I recommend you guys to watch.


It is a wonderful show and I recommend you guys to watch it. It is a wonderful show and I recommend you guys watch it.

When I was watching it, I thought that it would be a fantastic experience if I should have sit in the theater.


When I was watching it, I thought that it would be a fantastic experience if I shcould have seen it in the theater. When I was watching it, I thought that it would be a fantastic experience if I could have seen it in the theater.

I have never seen any vaudeville act offline.


I have never seen any vaudeville act offmusicals in real linfe. I have never seen any musicals in real life.

Assuming you mean "shows like Billy Elliot". "offline" is clear here and people do sometimes use it like this but I'd definitely say "in real life" here.

I wish I will oneday.


I wishhope I will one day. I hope I will one day.

I think I figured out an explanation for this once, but I've forgotten it :( "wish" isn't very wrong, but we'd say "hope" here.

I like the dance in the show very much.


I like the danceing in the show very much. I like the dancing in the show very much.

You'd say "dance" if you were talking about a specific routine. "I liked the dance they did at the end of the second act."

Especially the tap dancing, it cheered me up.


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I was confused by the songs, I thought they were not saying English totally while the background was in a small town of England.


I was confused by the songs, I thought they were not saying English totally whilepeaking completely in English, even though the background was in a small town ofin England. I was confused by the songs, I thought they were not speaking completely in English, even though the background was a small town in England.

I had to guess at the meaning here.

Maybe there were saying a kind of dialect.


Maybe therey were saypeaking a kind of dialect. Maybe they were speaking a kind of dialect.

Or "talking in a dialect", or "using a dialect". "say" only for a specific fragment of speech. "What did that guy want?" "He was saying 'do you know where the toilet is?' in French."

Although ballet is beautiful and elegant, I don't like it because it looks painful especially when the dancers stand in their toe.


Although ballet is beautiful and elegant, I don't like it because it looks painful, especially when the dancers stand ion their toes. Although ballet is beautiful and elegant, I don't like it because it looks painful, especially when the dancers stand on their toes.

I am wondenring whether they feel pain everytime when I watch ballet.


Every time I watch ballet I am wondenring whether they feel pain everytime when I watch ballet. Every time I watch ballet I am wondering whether they feel pain.

"I wonder" would be a little more natural, but I think continuous is okay.

I like dance, in particular the Western modern dance.


I like dance, in particular the Western modmodern Western dance. I like dance, in particular modern Western dance.

"modern" is an adjective about age, "Western" is an adjective about origin, so they have to be in this order.

I think it is so free and touching.


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Eventhough most of time, I can't get what the dancers want to express, I'm always struck by the them.


Even though most of the time, I can't get what the dancers want to express, I'm always struck by the them. Even though most of the time, I can't get what the dancers want to express, I'm always struck by them.

I also like Hip Hop dance.


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It feels like free as well even if I'm tone-deaf.


It feels like free as well, even if I'm tone-deaf. It feels free as well, even if I'm tone-deaf.

I think what I like is something natural adn free.


I think what I like is something natural adnd free. I think what I like is something natural and free.

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