Nov. 18, 2020
Last night when I go home an accident happen right in front me.
As usual I use bicycle to go home.
Some part of the road is wide and some part is narrow.
Around half way to my house.
I saw 2 people in front of me about 100 meters.
Both of them are not fast in speed.
So, I slow down myself to keep a distance from them.
Just in a matter of few seconds the middle person is losing control and fall down.
Because I keep a fair distance from them.
So, I can avoid him without crash together.
But that was a really closed call!
Closed call!
Close call!
Last night when I go homeAs I was going home last night, an accident happened right in front me.
As I was going home last night, an accident happened right in front me.
If you are writing about something that happened in the past, make sure to use past tense! Here, I used past continuous (was going home) and simple past (happened)
As usual, I usewas riding my bicycle to go home.
As usual, I was riding my bicycle home.
https://www.englishpage.com/verbpage/pastcontinuous.html
Some parts of the road isare wide and some part iss are narrow.
Some parts of the road are wide and some parts are narrow.
Around half way to my house.,
Around half way to my house,
this is a fragment (as in not everything necessary to make a sentence is inside of it), so I combined it with the next sentence to make it a full sentence.
I saw 2 people in front of me about 100 meters in front of me.
I saw 2 people about 100 meters in front of me.
Both of them awere not fast in speedgoing fast.
Both of them were not going fast.
I hope this is what you wanted to say... were the people going fast or slow?
So, I slowed down myself to keep a distance from them. So, I slowed down myself to keep a distance from them.
Just in a matter of few seconds, the middle person is losinglost control and faell down.
Just in a matter of few seconds, the middle person lost control and fell down.
BecausSince I keept a fair distance from them.,
Since I kept a fair distance from them,
So, I canI was able to avoid him (without crash togethering into him).
I was able to avoid him (without crashing into him).
But, that was a really closed call!
But, that was a really close call!
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Nice journal! I would try to work on making your sentences longer. You had a few fragments that I combined with another sentence to make it a full sentence, and some of your sentences were short. :D
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Closed call!
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Last night when I go home an accident happen right in front me.
If you are writing about something that happened in the past, make sure to use past tense! Here, I used past continuous (was going home) and simple past (happened) |
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As usual I use bicycle to go home.
As usual, I https://www.englishpage.com/verbpage/pastcontinuous.html |
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Some part of the road is wide and some part is narrow.
Some parts of the road |
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Around half way to my house.
Around half way to my house this is a fragment (as in not everything necessary to make a sentence is inside of it), so I combined it with the next sentence to make it a full sentence. |
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I saw 2 people in front of me about 100 meters.
I saw 2 people |
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Both of them are not fast in speed.
Both of them I hope this is what you wanted to say... were the people going fast or slow? |
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So, I slow down myself to keep a distance from them. So, I slowed down myself to keep a distance from them. So, I slowed down myself to keep a distance from them. |
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Just in a matter of few seconds the middle person is losing control and fall down.
Just in a matter of few seconds, the middle person |
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Because I keep a fair distance from them.
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So, I can avoid him without crash together.
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But that was a really closed call!
But, that was a really close |
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