Usually, most students choose their majors since their parents forced them to. Usually, most students choose their majors since their parents forced them to.

forced → told might also be okay depending on what you want to say

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Gap yYear Gap Year

Each word in a title except for conjunctions and other small words is typically captialized

When it comes to whether or not students are better toff haveing at least one year to work or travel before attending university., When it comes to whether or not students are better off having at least one year to work or travel before attending university,

When it comes to the question of whether or not students are better toff with haveing at least one year to work or travel before attending university, some people think that a leave is the best option. When it comes to the question of whether or not students are better off with having at least one year to work or travel before attending university, some people think that a leave is the best option.

Ssome people suggest that after graduateding from high school, students should go to colleges straight away. some people suggest that after graduating from high school, students should go to colleges straight away.

Some peopleOthers suggest that, after graduated froming high school, students should go to colleges stra right away. Others suggest that, after graduating high school, students should go to college right away.

Others argue that the opposite is true. Others argue that the opposite is true.

Other argue that the opposite is true.

There is possibly some truthsome merit to both arguments, but, in my opinion, I agree with I would incline towards the statement offered in the prompt. There is some merit to both arguments, but I would incline towards the statement offered in the prompt.

There is possibly some truthsome merit to both arguments, but, in my opinion, I agree with the statement offered in the prompt I personally believe that students should have that extra time for work or travel. There is some merit to both arguments, but I personally believe that students should have that extra time for work or travel.

To begin with, in order to develop students’ interests accurately, having a work or a travel experience is able towill assist them. To begin with, in order to develop students’ interests accurately, having a work or travel experience will assist them.

To begin with, in order to develop students’ interests accurately, having a work or a travel experience is able to assist themhelps students to develop their interests. To begin with, having work or travel experience helps students to develop their interests.

Only through experiencing real life by working or travelling, can students observe the things they truly love. Only through experiencing real life by working or travelling can students observe the things they truly love.

traveling is ok for English(US)

Only through experiencing real life byvia working or traveling, can students observe the things they truly love. Only through experiencing real life via work or travel can students observe the things they truly love.

Think ofImagine a student thinking of majorsing in Science; - however, he does not know what it ientails before entering the school. Imagine a student thinking of majoring in Science - however, he does not know what it entails before entering the school.

Think of is okay but I prefer imagine.

Think of a student majors in Science; however, hyour typical science major. He does not know what it iexactly it entails before entering the school. Think of your typical science major. He does not know what exactly it entails before entering school.

He may be find out that he dislikes the subject, but ultimately, it is too late to change a major in the end. He may find out that he dislikes the subject, but ultimately, it is too late to change a major in the end.

ultimately is optional.

He may be find out that he dislikes the subject, but it ismight be too late to change ahis major in the end. He may find that he dislikes the subject, but it might be too late to change his major in the end.

Is he not he wasting time this way? Is he not wasting time this way?

Is he not hejust wasting time? Is he not just wasting time?

SoHence, it is better to have at least one year to work or travel which, so that students are able to find their interests on the field they like, what if theyfield of interests. If they were to notice that they do not are uninterest in the field they chose firsted, they can change it right away until they fouind onthe one that they like. Hence, it is better to have at least one year to work or travel, so that students are able to find their field of interests. If they were to notice that they are uninterested, they can change it right away until they find the one that they like.

I changed the first "so" to "hence", because repeating "so" in "so that" feels weird are able to → are better able to is also okay

So, it is better to have at least one year tof work or travel which studentsduring which they are able to find theirand develop an interests on the in a field they like, what i. If they notice that they do notaren't really interested in the field they chose at first, they can change it right away until they foundkeep changing it until they find the right one. So, it is better to have at least one year of work or travel during which they are able to find and develop an interest in a field they like. If they notice that they aren't really interested in the field they chose at first, they can keep changing it until they find the right one.

Therefore, the experience from working or traveling helps them to choose a major they desire for and make aand put great effort inton it. The experience from working or traveling helps them choose a major they desire and put great effort into it.

Therefore, the experience from working or traveling helps them to choose a major they desire for and make aenjoy and will put great effort on itinto. The experience from working or traveling helps them choose a major they enjoy and will put great effort into.

In addition, through work orand traveling can fertilizenhance students’ life experiences. In addition, work and travel can enhance students’ life experiences.

i've never seen fertilise used this way, but I am able to infer the meaning

In addition, through work orand traveling can fertilizeenrich students’' life experiences. In addition, work and travel can enrich students' life experiences.

To be more concise, everythe things they learn and anything they observe from the area of work for or places they of travel to, it will extwill broadend their life widthhorizons. To be more concise, the things they learn and observe from the area of work or place of travel will broaden their horizons.

To elaborate, is also ok

To be more conciseexact, everything they learn and anything they observe fromat the area of work for or places they work or travel to, it will extepand their life widthspoint of view. To be more exact, everything they learn and anything they observe at the places they work or travel to will expand their point of view.

A case ofCase in point, students have opportunities to travel to more than one place, so they explore different cultures, histories, and even makinge friends with people who are from all over the world. Case in point, students have opportunities to travel to more than one place, so they explore different cultures, histories, and even make friends with people who are from all over the world.

A case of in point,Some students have opportunities to travel to more than one place, they exploreing different cultures, and histories, and even making friends with people who from all over the world. Some students have opportunities to travel to more than one place, exploring different cultures and histories, and even making friends with people from all over the world.

They leargain knowledge from these which aids them to become a person with distinctivea greater perspective of things. They gain knowledge from these which aids them to become a person with a greater perspective of things.

They leargain knowledge from these experiences, which aidhelps them to become a personpeople with distinctive perspectives. They gain knowledge from these experiences, which helps them become people with distinctive perspectives.

Thus, they are able to stand out in their professional field. Thus, they are able to stand out in their professional field.

ThusAs a result, they are able to stand out in their professional fields. As a result, they are able to stand out in their professional fields.

Of course, some people might say that it is essential tofor students to attend to colleges straight away, since they have toshould study continually instead of wasting time to travel or work. Of course, some people might say that it is essential for students to attend colleges straight away, since they should study continually instead of wasting time to travel or work.

Of course, some people might say that it is essential tohat students to attend to colleges straight away, since they have to study continuall and study instead of wasting their time ton travel or work. Of course, some people might say that it is essential that students attend college straight away and study instead of wasting their time on travel or work.

For instance, in most Asian countries, parents do not allow their children to go traveling one year after graduating high school. For instance, in most Asian countries, parents do not allow their children to go traveling one year after graduating high school.

graduating is optional travelling(UK) traveling(US)

For instance, in most Asian countries, parents do not allow their children to go traveling one year after high schooltake gap years. For instance, in most Asian countries, parents do not allow their children to take gap years.

ItThose who want to go overseas after graduating would not only feel disappoint their expectancies but not be accepted by traditional concept as welled by the rejection, but also stopped from doing so by the tradition. Those who want to go overseas after graduating would not only feel disappointed by the rejection, but also stopped from doing so by the tradition.

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It not only disappoint their expectancies but not be accepted by traditional conceptTaking a gap year would disappoint one's parents and break with tradition as well. Taking a gap year would disappoint one's parents and break with tradition as well.

Likewise, I am more in favor of students shouldof haveing at least one year to work or travel before going to colleges. I am more in favor of students of having at least one year to work or travel before going to colleges.

favour(UK) favor(US)

Likewise, I am morein favor of students should havehaving at least one year to work or travel before going to colleges. I am in favor of students having at least one year to work or travel before going to college.

It eithercould helps them develop both their interests orand enriches their life- experiences. It could help them develop both their interests and enrich their life experiences.

either makes it sound like a one or another thing and never both at the same time

It eithercan helps them develop their interests orand enriches their life- experiences. It can help them develop their interests and enrich their life experiences.

Hence, providing students a chance to work or travel before attending colleges straight away, it will definitely benefit to their lifeves after all. Hence, providing students a chance to work or travel before attending colleges straight away will definitely benefit their lives after all.

HencTherefore, providing students a chance to work or travel before attending colleges straight away, itcollege will definitely benefit to their life after allhem. Therefore, providing students a chance to work or travel before college will definitely benefit them.