Thisoday is themy first day, when I begin writing here. Today is my first day writing here.

This is the first day, when I begin that I've started writing here. This is the first day that I've started writing here.

Verb tense

Thisoday is the first day, when I begin wri I will be posting here. Today is the first day I will be posting here.

This is the first day, when I begin that I am writing here. This is the first day that I am writing here.

I don't know exactly, know what about I want to write about. I don't exactly know what I want to write about.

I don't know exactly, what about I want to write about. I don't know exactly what I want to write about.

unnecessary comma, word order (Subject - Verb - Object) I - "want to write" - about

I don't know exactly, what about I want to write about. I don't know exactly what I want to write about.

I don't know exactly, what about I want to write about. I don't know exactly what I want to write about.

I'm going to share, what I did today. I'm going to share what I did today.

I'm going to share, what I did today. I'm going to share what I did today.

I'm going to share, what I did today. I'm going to share what I did today.

I'm going to share, what I did today. I'm going to share what I did today.

I woke up at seven -thirty and got out theof bed at eight o'clock. I woke up at seven-thirty and got out of bed at eight o'clock.

I woke up at seven thirty and7:30 but got out theof bed at eight8 o'clock. I woke up at 7:30 but got out of bed at 8 o'clock.

no need for "the", full verbal phrase is "get out of" I changed it to "but" because "and" is implying those to things happened at the exact same time (or very short amount of time). However, you stated two separate times 30 minutes apart. You could also say "I woke up at 7:30 and got out of bed" without 8 o'clock, but this is implying that you got out of bed immediately after waking up. Changed it to 7:30 and 8 because we typically don't write out times, just use numbers. For emphasis, you could right 7:30am but most people will assume you mean am when you are waking up and not 7:30pm.

I woke up at seven thirty and got out theof bed at eight o'clock. I woke up at seven thirty and got out of bed at eight o'clock.

I woke up at seven thirty and got out theof bed at eight o'clock. I woke up at seven thirty and got out of bed at eight o'clock.

I did'n't sleep well, because my cats were noisy. I didn't sleep well because my cats were noisy.

I did'n't sleep well, because my cats were noisy. I didn't sleep well because my cats were noisy.

apostrophe in wrong spot, unneeded comma

I did'n't sleep well, because my cats were noisy. I didn't sleep well because my cats were noisy.

I did'n't sleep well, because my cats were noisy. I didn't sleep well because my cats were noisy.

They wanted fine food, so I had to go and feed them. They wanted food so I had to go feed them.

no need for fine or the "and" between your two verbs. "had to go feed" is one verbal phrase

They wanted fine food, so I had to go and feed them. They wanted food so I had to go and feed them.

They wanted fine food, so I had to go and feed them. They wanted food, so I had to go and feed them.

I boiled water with my my kettle and made a coffee. I boiled water with my kettle and made coffee.

accidentally put my twice; no need to have an article before "coffee" it is a collective noun

I boiled water with my my kettle and made a coffee. I boiled water and made a coffee.

I boiled water with my my kettle and made a coffee. I boiled water with my kettle and made coffee.

While I was drinking my coffee I was seeing a serietched a TV show in eEnglish with eEnglish subtitles. While I was drinking my coffee I watched a TV show in English with English subtitles.

While I was drinking my coffee, I was seewatching a series in english with english subtitles. While I was drinking my coffee, I was watching a series in english with english subtitles.

While I was drinking my coffee I was seewatching a series in english with english subtitles. While I was drinking my coffee I was watching a series in english with english subtitles.

While I was drianking my coffee, I was seeing a serie itched an eEnglish show with eEnglish subtitles. While I drank my coffee, I watched an English show with English subtitles.

In this case, "show" sounds more natural than "series." "Series" has more of a feel of watching the whole entire thing from start to finish and not just a few parts or episodes.

After that, I did yoga for half an hour and then I also didworked out for fifteen minutes workout. After that, I did yoga for half an hour and then I also worked out for fifteen minutes.

After that, I did yoga for half an hour and then I also did a fifteen minutes workout. After that, I did yoga for half an hour then I also did a fifteen minute workout.

After that I did yoga for half an hour and then I also did a fifteen minutes workout. After that I did yoga for half an hour and then I also did a fifteen minute workout.

After that, I did yoga for half an hour, and then I also did a fifteen -minutes workout. After that, I did yoga for half an hour, and then I also did a fifteen-minute workout.

Before that ( I forgot it) I'ved cleaned my apartmanent. Before that (I forgot) I'd cleaned my apartment.

BeI fore that ( I forgot it) I'vegot to mention it, but before that, I cleaned my apartmanent. I forgot to mention it, but before that, I cleaned my apartment.

After all the exercises I've goting, I took a shower, I did my make-up, and went to one of my favorite pho bars. After exercising, I took a shower, did my make-up, and went to one of my favorite pho bars.

After all the exercises, I've got took a shower, I did my make-up, and went to one of my favorite pho bars. After all the exercise, I took a shower, I did my make-up, and went to one of my favorite pho bars.

After all the exercises I've got had a shower, I did my make-up and went to one of my favorite pho bars. After all the exercise I had a shower, I did my make-up and went to one of my favorite pho bars.

After doing all themy exercises, I've got took a shower, I did my make-up, and went to one of my favorite pho bars. After doing all my exercises, I took a shower, did my makeup, and went to one of my favorite pho bars.

I had to wait, because there were so many people. I had to wait because there were so many people.

added so for dramatic emphasis

I had to wait, because there were manya lot of people. I had to wait because there were a lot of people.

I asked for a big pho soup with pounached eggs. I asked for a big pho soup with poached eggs.

i think you mean poach... like the style of egg with runny yolk?

I asked for a biglarge pho soup with pounached eggs. I asked for a large pho soup with poached eggs.

I asked for a big pho soup with pounached eggs. I asked for a big pho soup with poached eggs.

At the end of myEating lunch, I warmed outme up. Eating lunch warmed me up.

AtBy the end of my lunch, I warmed outs warm. By the end of lunch, I was warm.

Wasn't sure what you wanted to say here.

AtBy the end of my lunch, I warmed outs warm. By the end of my lunch, I was warm.

Then I went to the Pplaza to buy two cups, a candle, and a candle sticker. Then I went to the plaza to buy two cups, a candle, and a candlestick.

Then I went to the Plaza to buy two cups, a candle, and a candle sticker. Then I went to the Plaza to buy two cups, a candle, and a candlestick.

I think you may mean "candlestick" like to put your candle on? not a sticker shaped like a candle?

Then I went to the Plaza to buy two cups, a candle and a candle sticker. Then I went to the Plaza to buy two cups, a candle and a candlestick.

Then I went to the Plaza to buy two cups, a candle, and a candle sticker. Then I went to the Plaza to buy two cups, a candle, and a candle sticker.

I came home, made some extra exercis and exercised some more. I came home and exercised some more.

I came home, made and did some extramore exercise. I came home and did some more exercise.

I came home, made and did some extramore exercise. I came home and did some more exercise.

I had more calls withcalled my friends, while I makingde my dinner, that was oatmeal with pears. I called my friends, while I made my dinner, that was oatmeal with pears.

I had more calls withcalled some friends, while I was making my dinner, thatwhich was oatmeal with pear. I called some friends while I was making my dinner, which was oatmeal with pear.

Then I started to write this and now I'mve finishinged my first post. Then I started to write this and now I've finished my first post.

I then started to write and now I'mve finishinged my first post. I then started to write and now I've finished my first post.

I started to write, and now I'm finishing my first post. I started to write, and now I'm finishing my first post.