Through the screen, I "read" all her emotions and feelings. Through the screen, I "read" all her emotions and feelings.

To avoid confusion — since you did buy the book.

I "read"understood and felt all her emotions and feelings. I understood and felt all her emotions

This case is definitely not the only one. This case is definitely not the only one.

Correct; you may consider rearranging it to another place in the passage though. When the reader is first greeted with this sentence, they can potentially get confused due to the lack of context.

What I'm talking about: aThe case whenre a TV Series that is based on a book, is better than athe book. The case where a TV Series based on a book is better than the book.

Correct; you may want to delete the comma. Rewritten so it’s more concise.

What I'm talking about: a casesituation when a TV Series that is based on a book, is better than athe book itself. What I'm talking about: a situation when a TV Series based on a book is better than the book itself.

A couple of years ago I watched a TV Series "Unorthodox", and do you know what?.” A couple of years ago I watched a TV Series "Unorthodox.”

While the original sentence would work perfectly fine in a spoken context, I have abridged it to sound more formal.

A couple of years ago I watched a TV Series "Unorthodox", and do you know what? A couple of years ago I watched a TV Series "Unorthodox", and you know what?

"you know what?" is more colloquial - you could also say "and what do you know?"

At the end of the last episodseason finale, I cried. At the end of the season finale, I cried.

"series finale" is how we refer to the last episode of a series and "season finale" is the last episode of a season

Then I bought a book and I thoughnd read the book, only to find out that the book isfell more "calm" or "flat" except for the scenes whenre the main character describes her period of growing like a womantells us more about her growth. Then I bought and read the book, only to find out that the book fell more "flat" except for the scenes where the main character tells us more about her growth.

Made it more concise.

Then, I bought athe book and I thought that the book is moreit was "calmer" or "flatter" except for the scenes when the main character describesd her period of growing likegrowth as a woman. Then, I bought the book and I thought that it was "calmer" or "flatter" except for the scenes when the main character described her growth as a woman.

Make sure to keep your verb tenses consistent

All actions take place in the present day in New York. All actions take place in present day New York.

There areis a big community of unorthodox Jewryish people. There is a big community of unorthodox Jewish people.

There are isa big community of unorthodox Jewrys. There isa big community of unorthodox Jews.

None of the woOnly men can use a cell phones, just not women. Only men can use cell phones, not women.

Adjusted the order so it’s easier to read.

None of the woOnly men can use a cell phone, just men.s Only men can use cell phones

AllNo cell phones must be withouthave a camera. No cell phones have a camera.

Of course, all decisions are made by the maen and the women must obey. Of course, all decisions are made by the men and the women must obey.

Of course, all decisions are made by the manthe men make all the decisions and the women must obey. Of course, the men make all the decisions and the women must obey.

Keep your verb tense consistent

Esther wasn't a typical Jewish woman, but when her family chose a groom for her, she didn't stand any chance tocouldn't decline this "deal". Esther wasn't a typical Jewish woman, but when her family chose a groom for her, she couldn't decline this "deal".

After that, all relatives started to pressure the "newborn"lywed couple with athe question: "Where is your first child?". After that, all relatives started to pressure the newlywed couple with the question: "Where is your first child?".

After that, all the relatives started to pressure the "newborn" couple with a question: "Where isn will you have your first child?". After that, all the relatives started to pressure the "newborn" couple with a question: "When will you have your first child?".

It took a couple of years and tdozens of doctors whenuntil they became parents. It took a couple of years and dozens of doctors until they became parents.

It took a couple of years and tens ofmany doctors whenbefore they became parents. It took a couple of years and many doctors before they became parents.

We often use "hundreds of __" or "dozens of __" but rarely "tens of __". So here, you could also say "dozens of doctors"

All this time Esther didn't understand why she must dress close closesonservatively, why she can noouldn’t study at the university, and a huge bunchthe list of things that she can not dowas forbidden to do went on and on. All this time Esther didn't understand why she must dress conservatively, why she couldn’t study at the university, and the list of things that she was forbidden to do went on and on.

I expanded this sentence to give the paragraph a bit more rhythm, considering the adjacent sentences were all fairly short.

AllDuring this time, Esther didn't understand why she must dress closonservative closthes, why she can no't study at the university, and a huge bunchcontinuing list of things that she can no't do. During this time, Esther didn't understand why she must dress conservative clothes, why she can't study at university, and a continuing list of things that she can't do.

She did big workfought valiantly to protect her own interests and the rights to choose her own path. She fought valiantly to protect her own interests and the rights to choose her own path.

She did big workworked hard to protect her interests and choose her own path. She worked hard to protect her interests and choose her own path.

The main actress who performed Esther did her workportraying Esther delivered perfectly. The main actress portraying Esther delivered perfectly.

The main actress who performortrayed Esther did her workjob perfectly. The main actress who portrayed Esther did her job perfectly.

I don't want to tell youspoil the ending of this story because you will lose the unexpected effect ifand rob you of the pleasure of surprise because the TV Series is just too good and you decidserve to watch the TV Shave the full experiesnce. I don't want to spoil the ending of this story and rob you of the pleasure of surprise because the TV Series is just too good and you deserve to have the full experience.

Stylistic revisions to sound more hyperbolic.

I don't want to tell you the end of this story because you will lose the unexpected effecspoil the ending so you can enjoy the twist if you decide to watch the TV Sseries. I don't want to spoil the ending so you can enjoy the twist if you decide to watch the series.

"the twist" is how we describe an unexpected ending or development of a story. You don't always have to say "TV series" - you can just say "series" or "TV show"

The endings of the book and the TV Series are different, butand I prefer the second oneTV series ending. The endings of the book and the TV Series are different, and I prefer the TV series ending.

Stylistic revision to reduce potential confusion.

The end ofing in the book and the TV Series are different, but I prefer the second one.is different from the TV Series, but in my opinion, the TV adaptation is better The ending in the book is different from the TV Series, but in my opinion, the TV adaptation is better