From my Corner Of the Sofa š¶
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I'm a dog, and although many people think that we only sleep and ask for food, in reality we observe everything. I know when my human is sad, even before she notices it. When she sighs heavily, I slowly get close, and I put my head on her legs. I don't say anything, but I know it's enough. My favorite place is the sofa, right where the sun shines in the afternoon. From there I see her write, laugh, or just sit looking into the emptiness without saying a word. Sometimes I would like to speak, to tell her that she doesn't need to be worry, that the life is simple: eat, sleep, and love a lot. But since I can't speak, I just move my tail... and I believe she understands me.
Desde mi rincĆ³n del sofĆ” š¶
Soy un perro, y aunque muchos piensan que solo dormimos y pedimos comida, en realidad observamos todo. SĆ© cuĆ”ndo mi humana estĆ” triste, incluso antes de que ella lo sepa. Cuando suspira fuerte, me acerco despacio y pongo mi cabeza en sus piernas; no digo nada, pero sĆ© que eso basta. Mi lugar favorito es el sofĆ”, justo donde da el sol por la tarde. Desde ahĆ la miro escribir, reĆr o quedarse callada mirando al vacĆo. A veces quisiera hablar, decirle que no se preocupe tanto, que la vida es mĆ”s simple: comer, dormir, y querer mucho. Pero como no puedo hablar, solo muevo la colaā¦ y creo que ella entiende
From myMy Corner Ofof the Sofa š¶
Sometimes I would like to speak, to tell her that she doesn't need to be worry, that the life is simple;: eat, sleep, and love a lot.
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Well written! Very few corrections
Thank you very much for your time! I really appreciate them.
I knowcan tell when my human is sad, even before she notices it.
"Can tell" is often used in a specific context to describe intuitive, non-verbal, or difficult-to-articulate knowledge, whereas "know" refers to more explicit, documented, or conscious understanding. "Know" would work here- however "can tell" would be better. This is because in a specific context, "can tell" refers to more intuitive or subtle cues, while "know" would be for more explicit or conscious understanding of something". ie "I KNOW you're upset because you told me" but "I CAN TELL you're upset because your voice is shaky and you're avoiding me".
I don't say anything, but I know it's enough.
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this is good, you can also add "I know she appreciates me", or "I know she needs the comfort" if you wanted to elaborate.
My favorite place to be is the sofa, right where the sun shines in the afternoon.
It can be nice to specify what you do in the place. "to sit, to lie, to sleep, to be"
From there I see her write, laugh, or just sit looking into the emptiness without saying a word.
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Sometimes I would like to speak, to tell her that she doesn't need to be worry, and that the life is simple: eat, sleep, and love a lot.
either "doesn't need to worry" or "doesn't need to be worried".
But since I can't speak, I just movewag my tail... and I believe she understands me.
when animals move their tail to express something we say "wag'
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This dog sounds amazing!
Hello! Thank you for your comments, they're very useful to me.
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