Feb. 9, 2021
Please correct my paragraph
On the surface Clay seems over simplified, but there is more to it than meets the eye. We need to read between the lines to get our head around. The central character is Maria. She is unusual considering the fact that she is not unhappy ,or seems to have any urge to brake from her reality. The story includes some minor characters as well. Such as Joe and the matron and many more who admire Maria.
(Is rhyming okay in Academic writing)
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On the surface Clay seems over simplified, but there is more to ithim than meets the eye.
On the surface Clay seems over simplified, but there is more to him than meets the eye.
Since we're talking about a person, we use him-personal pronouns.
She is unusual considering the fact that she is not unhappy ,or seems to have any urge to breake from her reality.
She is unusual considering the fact that she is not unhappy or seem to have any urge to break from her reality.
Use commas right after a word, with a space between the comma and next word. Brake= in a car, break= other instances. Does she have an urge to break from reality or not?
The story includes some minor characters as well.
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I don't think it really matters whether there is rhyming. Personally, I didn't notice it, but avoid it if possible.
Feb. 9, 2021
Thank you!
On the surface Clay seems over simplified, but there is more to it than meets the eye. ''It'' refers to the story Clay.
Feb. 9, 2021
Thank you! On the surface Clay seems over simplified, but there is more to it than meets the eye. ''It'' refers to the story Clay.
I didn't catch the it/him mistake the first time but vibecheck is absolutely correct. Clay is the subject in this sentence so it has to match that. You could say " On the surface Clay seems over simplified, but there is more to his story than meets the eye."
Feb. 9, 2021
so my sentence is incorrect or is it too ambiguous?
Feb. 11, 2021
I think it's incorrect. You should make it a separate sentence if you want to talk about the story. "On the surface Clay seems over simplified. However, there is more to the story than meets the eye." If you want to refer to Clay, I'd keep it the way it is and change "it" to "him".
Feb. 11, 2021
thank You! the way you put it sounds better and fluent.
On the surface Clay seems over simplified, but there is more to it than meets the eye.
We need to read between the lines to get our head around his character. We need to read between the lines to get our head around his character.
Get our head around what?
She is unusual considering the fact that she is not unhappy ,or seems to have any urge to breake from her reality.
She is unusual considering the fact that she is not unhappy or seems to have any urge to break from her reality.
This is a common mistake and can be confusing. "Brake" means to stop which almost fits in this situation, but the proper word is "break" which in this context means "to remove".
The story includes some minor characters as well.
Such aThis includes Joe and the matron and many more who admire Maria.
This includes Joe and the matron and many more who admire Maria.
As written, this was an incomplete sentence and could've been added to the previous sentence. If you wanted it as a separate sentence, then use the corrections I suggested. You could maybe use the word "mother" instead of "matron" depending on how the character was actually referred to in the story.
(Is rhyming okay in Aacademic writing)
(Is rhyming okay in academic writing)
The word "Academic" shouldn't be capitalized since it isn't a proper noun. Many people make this mistake.
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Yes, rhyming is okay in academic writing as long as the rhyming is occassional.
Feb. 9, 2021
Thank so much for taking the time to correct my paragraph. Is over simplified suitable?. What I want to say is the story seems simple.
Thank u!
Feb. 9, 2021
I didn't catch the it/him mistake the first time but vibecheck is absolutely correct. Clay is the subject in this sentence so it has to match that. You could say " On the surface Clay seems over simplified, but there is more to his story than meets the eye."
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On the surface Clay seems over simplified, but there is more to it than meets the eye. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
On the surface Clay seems over simplified, but there is more to Since we're talking about a person, we use him-personal pronouns. |
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We need to read between the lines to get our head around. We need to read between the lines to get our head around his character. We need to read between the lines to get our head around his character. Get our head around what? |
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The central character is Maria. |
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She is unusual considering the fact that she is not unhappy ,or seems to have any urge to brake from her reality.
She is unusual considering the fact that she is not unhappy This is a common mistake and can be confusing. "Brake" means to stop which almost fits in this situation, but the proper word is "break" which in this context means "to remove".
She is unusual considering the fact that she is not unhappy Use commas right after a word, with a space between the comma and next word. Brake= in a car, break= other instances. Does she have an urge to break from reality or not? |
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The story includes some minor characters as well. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Such as Joe and the matron and many more who admire Maria.
As written, this was an incomplete sentence and could've been added to the previous sentence. If you wanted it as a separate sentence, then use the corrections I suggested. You could maybe use the word "mother" instead of "matron" depending on how the character was actually referred to in the story. |
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(Is rhyming okay in Academic writing)
(Is rhyming okay in The word "Academic" shouldn't be capitalized since it isn't a proper noun. Many people make this mistake. |
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