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IELTS Writing Task 1

The graphic illustrates in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK. If we look at the graphic, we can see that four different technological devices are selected.

CD players have the highest percentage, it starts with 60 percent in 1996/97 and increases approximately 82 percent in 2002/2003. Internet access is the sole component that the start point takes place in the graphic but it sharply increases from approximately 10 percent to 45 percent, especially between 2000/2002 periods. Home computer has a constant increase from approximately 25 percent towards almost 45 percent.

Mobile phones have the most dramatical waves in this graphic. It starts with 18 percent and there is a slightly increase between 1996 and 1998. After 1999, there is a jump off from approximately 25 percent to almost 45 percent but it remains steady for the second half of this period. Dramatical increase repeats in first half of 2000-2002 period. After 2001, percentage of mobile phones reaches approximately 65 percent and continues slightly increase.

To sum up, after the mobile phones and internet access modern technology in homes in the UK significantly changed. This graphic shows the obvious truth to examiners.

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Hello all,

I'm Selin and I'm preparing for IELTS Academic.

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This one is normally the describing of a graphic but unfortunately I can not upload a picture.

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March 5, 2022

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IELTS Writing Task 1


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The graphic illustrates in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.


The graphic illustrates in terms of percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK. The graph illustrates in terms of percentages the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.

If we look at the graphic, we can see that four different technological devices are selected.


If we look at the graphic, we can see that four different technological devices are selected. If we look at the graph, we can see that four different technological devices are selected.

CD players have the highest percentage, it starts with 60 percent in 1996/97 and increases approximately 82 percent in 2002/2003.


CD players have the highest percentage, it starts withat 60 percent in 1996/97 and increases to approximately 82 percent in 2002/2003. CD players have the highest percentage, it starts at 60 percent in 1996/97 and increases to approximately 82 percent in 2002/2003.

Internet access is the sole component that the start point takes place in the graphic but it sharply increases from approximately 10 percent to 45 percent, especially between 2000/2002 periods.


Internet access is the sole component that theonly variable which starts point takes place inhe middle of the graphic but it sharply increases from approximately 10 percent to 45 percent, rising especially sharply between 2000/2002 periods. Internet access is the only variable which starts in the middle of the graph but it sharply increases from approximately 10 percent to 45 percent, rising especially sharply between 2000/2002 periods.

Home computer has a constant increase from approximately 25 percent towards almost 45 percent.


HThe home computer has a constant increase from approximately 25 percent towards almos about 45 percent. The home computer has a constant increase from approximately 25 percent to about 45 percent.

Mobile phones have the most dramatical waves in this graphic.


Mobile phones have the most dramatical wavevariations in this graphic. Mobile phones have the most dramatical variations in this graph.

It starts with 18 percent and there is a slightly increase between 1996 and 1998.


It starts withat 18 percent and there is a slightly increase between 1996 and 1998. It starts at 18 percent and there is a slightly increase between 1996 and 1998.

After 1999, there is a jump off from approximately 25 percent to almost 45 percent but it remains steady for the second half of this period.


After 1999, there is a jump off from approximately 25 percent to almost 45 percent but it remains steady for the second half of this period. After 1999, there is a jump from approximately 25 percent to almost 45 percent but it remains steady for the second half of this period.

Dramatical increase repeats in first half of 2000-2002 period.


DThe dramatical increase repeats itself in first half of 2000-2002 period. The dramatic increase repeats itself in first half of 2000-2002 period.

After 2001, percentage of mobile phones reaches approximately 65 percent and continues slightly increase.


After 2001, the percentage of mobile phones reaches approximately 65 percent and continues to slightly increase. After 2001, the percentage of mobile phones reaches approximately 65 percent and continues to slightly increase.

To sum up, after the mobile phones and internet access modern technology in homes in the UK significantly changed.


To sum up, after the mobile phones and internet access, modern technology in homes in the UKBritish homes significantly changed. To sum up, after the mobile phones and internet access, modern technology in British homes significantly changed.

This graphic shows the obvious truth to examiners.


This graphic shows the obvious truth to examiners demonstrates what experts have known all along. This graph demonstrates what experts have known all along.

I don't get what you're really trying to say here. Who are the examiners? People looking at the graph? That's what I assume, but it's such an awkward sentence, I'm not sure I can fix it properly while fully preserving what you're trying to say.

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