Oct. 21, 2020
Journal 10/21/20
Every time I go back home, after an official business trip, I always feel tired. In fact, during the trip I didn’t do labor work. I just followed the planned schedule, visiting and learning. Meanwhile, I usually go to bed later and get up early during the trip. I didn’t mean to, it was just a natural state. But when I returned home, my thoughts relaxed at once. I didn’t get up early in the morning but woke up naturally. Maybe during the trip, although you didn’t need to do labor work, your thoughts are in an intense state for work reasons. So when you get home, you don’t need to think about work anymore. Maybe this is the reason why you feel tired during an official business trip and you feel relaxed when you return home.
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Journal 10/21/20
Every time I go back home, after an official business trip, I always feel tired.
Every time I go back home after an official business trip, I always feel tired.
In fact,This is true even though during the trip I didon’t do physical labor work.
This is true even though during the trip I don’t do physical labor.
I just followed the planned schedule, visiting and learning.
I just follow the planned schedule, visiting and learning.
MeanwhileHowever, I usually go to bed later and get up early during the trip, which tires me out.
However, I usually go to bed late and get up early during the trip, which tires me out.
You should either use both "later" and "earlier", or "late" and "early".
I didon’t mean to, it was just a natural state. It just happens.
I don’t mean to. It just happens.
"Natural" has positive connotations, but what you're describing had negative effects, so I changed it to "It just happens".
But when I rgeturned home, my thoughts relaxed at once.
But when I get home, my thoughts relax at once.
I didon’t get up earlyier in the morning but woake up naturally at the regular time.
I don’t get up earlier in the morning but wake up naturally at the regular time.
Maybe during the trip, although you didn’I don't need to do labor work, yourphysical labor, {my work forces me to concentrate|I experience stress|my thoughts are in an intense state for work reasons}.
Maybe during the trip, although I don't need to do physical labor, {my work forces me to concentrate|I experience stress|my thoughts are in an intense state for work reasons}.
So wWhen youI get home, youI don’t need to think about work anymore.
When I get home, I don’t need to think about work anymore.
Maybe this is the reason why youI feel tired during an official business trip and youI feel relaxed when youI return [home].
Maybe this is the reason why I feel tired during an official business trip and I feel relaxed when I return [home].
You don't need to say both "return" and "home". You could say "return", or you could say "get home" or "come home".
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Very good!
Throughout the post, you shifted between the past and the present, and between "I" and "you". I made it more consistent by choosing the present and "I" all the way through.
Oct. 22, 2020
Thank you for your corrections. Thank you very much.
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In fact, during the trip I didn’t do labor work.
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Every time I go back home, after an official business trip, I always feel tired.
Every time I go back home |
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I just followed the planned schedule, visiting and learning.
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Meanwhile, I usually go to bed later and get up early during the trip.
You should either use both "later" and "earlier", or "late" and "early". |
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I didn’t mean to, it was just a natural state.
I d "Natural" has positive connotations, but what you're describing had negative effects, so I changed it to "It just happens". |
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But when I returned home, my thoughts relaxed at once.
But when I |
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I didn’t get up early in the morning but woke up naturally.
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Maybe during the trip, although you didn’t need to do labor work, your thoughts are in an intense state for work reasons.
Maybe during the trip, although |
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So when you get home, you don’t need to think about work anymore.
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Maybe this is the reason why you feel tired during an official business trip and you feel relaxed when you return home.
Maybe this is the reason why You don't need to say both "return" and "home". You could say "return", or you could say "get home" or "come home". |
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