It has all the dneclaredessary characteristics (and matches to your eyes). It has all the necessary characteristics (and matches your eyes).

This sounds more natural. Declared would refer to some specific characteristics about the armor that had been previously stated, and even then, something "stated" would probably sound more natural.

It has all the declared characteristics (and matches to your eyes)." It has all the declared characteristics (and matches your eyes)."

At this moment, a male player came in and got a big black brutal armor. At this moment, a male player came in and got a big black brutal armor.

At this moment, a male player came in and got a big black brutal piece of armor. At this moment, a male player came in and got a big black brutal piece of armor.

"Brutal" sounds a little strange here. In what way was the armor brutal? Did it "look" brutal? In that case, it's more natural to call the armor something like "menacing." Brutal generally describes actions, unless you say that something "looks" or "seems" brutal.

At thisat moment, a male player came in and got a big piece of black, brutal armor. At that moment, a male player came in and got a big piece of black, brutal armor.

He said arrogantly, “I already have the same one”, dropped the armor and run away. He said arrogantly, “I already have the same one”, dropped the armor and run away.

He said arrogantly, “I already have the same one”, then dropped the armor and ruan away. He said arrogantly, “I already have the same one”, then dropped the armor and ran away.

"Then" isn't absolutely necessary here, but sounds more natural.

He said arrogantly, “I already have the same one”, dropped the armor and ruan away. He said arrogantly, “I already have the same one”, dropped the armor and ran away.

Be mindful of the tense! We're still in the past tense here.

The girl happily grabbed the armor and it instantly turned into a little shiny bra. The girl happily grabbed the armor and it instantly turned into a little shiny bra.

The girl happily grabbed the armor and it instantly turned into a little shiny bra. The girl happily grabbed the armor and it instantly turned into a little shiny bra.

The girl happily grabbed the armor and it instantly turned into a shiny little shiny bra. The girl happily grabbed the armor and it instantly turned into a shiny little bra.

The end,. All the all action tookonly lasted a few minutes. The end. All the action only lasted a few minutes.

The end, the allat was the end, all the action took a few minutes. That was the end, all the action took a few minutes.

TIn the end, the allall of the action took a few minutes. In the end, all of the action took a few minutes.

Baelin's Route was much longer, but not full meterlength. Baelin's Route was much longer, but not full length.

I think this is what you meant here.

Baelin's Route was much longer, but not full meter. Baelin's Route was much longer.

I'm not too sure what "full meter" is...so I just decided to remove it. Perhaps you can clarify what you meant to say in a reply.

Baelin was an NPS and he was the dumbest NPC in his world, but by the will of fate, he departed tofor adventure. Baelin was the dumbest NPC in his world, but by the will of fate, he departed for adventure.

Baelin was an NPSC and he was the dumbest NPC in his world, but by the will of fate, he departed to adventure. Baelin was an NPC and he was the dumbest NPC in his world, but by the will of fate, he departed to adventure.

"he departed to adventure" is correct, but be aware that "adventure" is actually a verb here! If you meant for "adventure" to be a noun, you can write "he departed to embark on an adventure".

And it, the video didn’t look cheap. And, the video didn’t look cheap.

It isn't clear what "it" refers to here.

Actually, it wasn’t so short. Actually, it wasn’t so short.

Actually, it wasn’t so short. Actually, it wasn’t so short.

Actually, it wasn’t so short. Actually, it wasn’t so short.

Most of the videos on the channel wasere short comic sketches and the scenes wasere some game universe. Most of the videos on the channel were short comic sketches and the scenes were some game universe.

Most of the video on the channel was a short comic sketch and the scene was set in some game universe. Most of the video on the channel was a short comic sketch and the scene was set in some game universe.

Most of the videos on the channel wasere short comic sketches and the scene wass took place in some game universe. Most of the videos on the channel were short comic sketches and the scenes took place in some game universe.

"videos", "sketches", and "scenes" should be in the plural form, since "most of" implies that there was more than one video on the channel.

For example, in one video, a female player got an a reward for completing a quest. For example, in one video, a female player got a reward for completing a quest.

The phrase "in one video" helps establish context.

The award was supposed to be an armor, but it looked like a little shiny bra. The award was supposed to be an armor, but it looked like a little shiny bra.

The award was supposed to be ansome armor, but it looked like a little shiny bra. The award was supposed to be some armor, but it looked like a little shiny bra.

You could also say "a piece of armor," or even just "supposed to be armor," but we don't talk about "an armor."

The areward was supposed to be an armor, but it looked like a shiny little shiny bra. The reward was supposed to be armor, but it looked like a shiny little bra.

"armor" is an uncountable noun. Alternatively, you may write "The reward was supposed to be a piece of armor". It sounds much more natural to place "little" after "shiny". There's actually a proper order in which we arrange adjectives in English, but knowing what that order is will mostly come with exposure.

The NPC said, “This is an armor." The NPC said, “This is an armor."

The NPC said, “This is an armor." The NPC said, “This is armor."

The NPC said, “This is an piece of armor. The NPC said, “This is a piece of armor.

Again, "armor" is an uncountable noun.

Baelin's Route was a short movie that I watched on the youtube channel Epic NPC Man a few years ago. Baelin's Route was a short movie that I watched on the youtube channel Epic NPC Man a few years ago.

Baelin's Route was a short movie that I watched on the youtube channel Epic NPC Man a few years ago. Baelin's Route was a short movie that I watched on the youtube channel Epic NPC Man a few years ago.

Baelin's Route was a short movie that I watched on the yYoutTube channel Epic NPC Man a few years ago. Baelin's Route was a short movie that I watched on the YouTube channel Epic NPC Man a few years ago.

"YouTube" is the name of a company, so it's a proper noun. Proper capitalisation should be observed (uppercase "Y" and "T").

It looked notdidn't look worse, maybe even better than some Hollywood samples I think, maybe I’ll review it. It didn't look worse, maybe even better than some Hollywood samples I think, maybe I’ll review it.

It looked notn my opinion, it didn't look any worse, and maybe even better, than some Hollywood samples I think, m. Maybe I’ll review it. In my opinion, it didn't look any worse, and maybe even better, than some Hollywood samples. Maybe I’ll review it.

It looked not worse, maybe even betterdidn't look worse than some Hollywood samples I think, mit was maybe even better. Maybe I’ll review it. It didn't look worse than some Hollywood samples I think, it was maybe even better. Maybe I’ll review it.

A slight reordering will help the sentence flow more naturally.

It looked not worse, maybe think it maybe looked even better than some Hollywood samples I think, mfilms / examples from Hollywood. Maybe I’ll review it. I think it maybe looked even better than some Hollywood films / examples from Hollywood. Maybe I’ll review it.

"Hollywood samples" sounds odd. I wasn't sure if you meant trailers or not. The "I think" being at the end of the sentence is fairly conversational.

The girl was confused and ask an NPS man, who gave her the quest, an armor.

The girl was confused and ask an NPS man,ed the NPC who gave her the quest, an for some armor. The girl was confused and asked the NPC who gave her the quest for some armor.

I think you meant an NPC (non player character).

The girl was confused and ask an NPS maned the male NPC, who gave her the quest, and armor. The girl was confused and asked the male NPC, who gave her the quest and armor.

"NPC" is short for "non-playable character". Hence, "NPC man" would mean "non-playable character man". However, "character man" doesn't really make sense, so I'd suggest writing "male NPC". Also, instead of "a male NPC", it's more natural to write "the male NPC", so that the reader knows you're specifically referring to the one who gave the quest and armor.