I felt very happy because iI was very greateful to share it with the family. I felt very happy because I was very grateful to share it with the family.

I felt very happy because iI was very greateful sharto be with themy family. I felt very happy because I was very grateful to be with my family.

Spelling error for grateful Share is used in the wrong context. "To be" is a better word (being in the presence of the family)

I hope Wwe can stay together for the next year also and God always blesses us. I hope we can stay together for the next year also and God always blesses us.

"I" is always capitalized, but "We" is only capitalized at the start of the sentence. "blesses" rather than "bless" as it's an ongoing action.

I hope Wwe can staymeet together the next year and God will always bless us. I hope we can meet together the next year and God will always bless us.

Stay together (be in the same place regulary) Meet together (not be in the same place regulary but seeing eachother again on a special occassion like your birthday)

NI never I thought I could have a amazing family, each member is a special for me. I never hought I could have a amazing family, each member is special for me.

NI never I thought that I could have an amazing family,; each member is a special for me. I never thought that I could have an amazing family; each member is a special for me.

Subject + Verb + Object structure 'an' after a vowel (a,e,i,o,u) Comma splice (use semicolon instead)

Yet, II still remember the photos and smiles that we shared. I still remember the photos and smiles that we shared.

"Yet," at the start of a sentence like that is used to emphasise contrast, which you don't have here.

Yet, I remember the photos and smiles that we shared. I remember the photos and smiles that we shared.

Yet is used for contrast

I think I am very rich because my parents are alive and my family always stayed together. I think I am very rich because my parents are alive and my family always stayed together.

My birthday was yesterday, and I canould share it with my whole family. My birthday was yesterday, and I could share it with my whole family.

could is (among other things) the past tense of can, which you need since you're talking about yesterday.

My birthday was yesterday, and I can shareelebrated with my whole family. My birthday was yesterday and I celebrated with my whole family.

Use past tense because of "yesterday" celebrated is a better word in the context of a party (birthday)