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Journal 10/23/20

This afternoon, I went to the Apple service to check my phone because it had bad signals. It was almost 5 pm when I arrived. A young female server greeted me. I told her about the problems with my phone briefly. Afterwards, an engineer took my phone in a testing equipment and connected the equipment with a computer to check out. About thirty minutes passed, they told me that the phone didn’t have any problems and suggested that I change to a new phone card. The China mobile service center will get off work at 6pm. I had to get there before 6pm. I went to the service center in a hurry. When I arrived at the center, I immediately got the phone card changed. I don't know if there are any bad signal problems caused by the phone card. I think it is just a possibility. I will observe it for the next few days.

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Journal 10/23/20

It was almost 5 pm when I arrived.

I had to get there before 6pm.

I went to the service center in a hurry.

I don't know if there are any bad signal problems caused by the phone card.

I think it is just a possibility.

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Oct. 26, 2020

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When I arrived at the center, I immediately got the phone card changed.

"Had the phone card changed" may be slightly better, but this is fine.

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Oct. 26, 2020

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A young female servertechnician greeted me.

If you meant 服務員, note that the phrase only translates to "server" only in the context of a restaurant.

A young female server greeted me.

I had to get there before 6pm.

I went to the service center in a hurry.

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Oct. 24, 2020

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It was almost 5 pm when I arrived.

A young female server greeted me.

I had to get there before 6pm.

I went to the service center in a hurry.

I don't know if there are any bad signal problems caused by the phone card.

I think it is just a possibility.

I will observe it for the next few days.

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Jack

Oct. 24, 2020

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profitendieu

Oct. 26, 2020

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When I arrived at the center, I immediately gotchanged the phone card changed.

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Jack

Oct. 26, 2020

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"Got the phone card changed" and "changed the phone card" aren't quite the same. "Got" implies that someone changed the phone card for the narrator, while "changed" by itself suggests that the narrator himself was the agent: https://dictionary.cambridge.org/us/grammar/british-grammar/get

Journal 10/23/20


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This afternoon, I went to the Apple service to check my phone because it had bad signals.


This afternoon, I went to the Apple service center to check my phone because it had bad signals. This afternoon, I went to the Apple service center to check my phone because it had bad signals.

It was almost 5 pm when I arrived.


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A young female server greeted me.


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A young female servertechnician greeted me. A young female technician greeted me.

If you meant 服務員, note that the phrase only translates to "server" only in the context of a restaurant.

I told her about the problems with my phone briefly.


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I briefly told her about the problems with my phone briefly. I briefly told her about the problems with my phone.

Afterwards, an engineer took my phone in a testing equipment and connected the equipment with a computer to check out.


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About thirty minutes passed, they told me that the phone didn’t have any problems and suggested that I change to a new phone card.


After about thirty minutes passed, they told me that the phone didn’t have any problems and suggested that I change to a new phone card. After about thirty minutes passed, they told me that the phone didn’t have any problems and suggested that I change to a new phone card.

After about thirty minutes had passed, they told me that the phone didn’t have any problems and suggested that I change to a new phone card. After about thirty minutes had passed, they told me that the phone didn’t have any problems and suggested that I change to a new phone card.

The China mobile service center will get off work at 6pm.


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I had to get there before 6pm.


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I went to the service center in a hurry.


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When I arrived at the center, I immediately got the phone card changed.


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When I arrived at the center, I immediately got the phone card changed. When I arrived at the center, I immediately got the phone card changed.

"Had the phone card changed" may be slightly better, but this is fine.

I don't know if there are any bad signal problems caused by the phone card.


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I think it is just a possibility.


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I will observe it for the next few days.


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