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The Share Price of Outikumpu Companies

The chart below illustrates the share price trend in euros of Outikumpu companies from January 2006 to December 2010.
Overall, the graph shows the fluctuation of the share price during the whole period, with highest peaks in early months of 2007 and the first half of 2008, followed by a plummet at the second. The price roughly stabilized around the price of 15 euros in the last two years.
The first year showed a sharp increase, from 13 euros to a peak of just over 30 euros at the beginning of 2007. However, there was a gradual decrease, that led share prices to a bit over of 20 euros by the end of the year. The share price jumped again at the beginning of 2008 to 30 euros, almost reaching the peak of 2017. After that increase, however, the share price plunged drastically from 30 leveling off under 10 euros till almost the third quarter of 2009, when the price rose to 15 euros and continued to fluctuate, with a highest point at approximately 17 euros in 2010.


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Overall, the graph shows the fluctuation of the share price during the whole period, with highest peaks in early months of 2007 and the first half of 2008, followed by a plummet at the second.

The first year showed a sharp increase, from 13 euros to a peak of just over 30 euros at the beginning of 2007.

The Share Price of Outikumpu Companies


The Share Price of Outiokumpu Companies The Share Price of Outokumpu Companies

The chart below illustrates the share price trend in euros of Outikumpu companies from January 2006 to December 2010.


The chart below illustrates the share price trend in euros of Outiokumpu companies from January 2006 to December 2010. The chart below illustrates the share price trend in euros of Outokumpu companies from January 2006 to December 2010.

Overall, the graph shows the fluctuation of the share price during the whole period, with highest peaks in early months of 2007 and the first half of 2008, followed by a plummet at the second.


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Overall, the graph shows the fluctuation of the share price during the whole period, with the highest peaks inoccurring in the early months of 2007 and the first half of 2008, followed by a plummet atduring the second half. Overall, the graph shows the fluctuation of the share price during the whole period, with the highest peaks occurring in the early months of 2007 and the first half of 2008, followed by a plummet during the second half.

The price roughly stabilized around the price of 15 euros in the last two years.


The price roughly stabilized around the price of 15 euros in the last two years. The price roughly stabilized around 15 euros in the last two years.

your sentence is correct. You can also express this sentence without "the price"

The first year showed a sharp increase, from 13 euros to a peak of just over 30 euros at the beginning of 2007.


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However, there was a gradual decrease, that led share prices to a bit over of 20 euros by the end of the year.


However, there was a gradual decrease, that led share prices to a bijust over of 20 euros by the end of the year. However, there was a gradual decrease, that led share prices to just over 20 euros by the end of the year.

"a bit over of 20 euros" this expression is complicated and sounds more awkward compared to just saying "just over." instead of "just over", you could use "roughly" or "in the vicinity of" as well. Some suggestions.

However, there was a gradual decrease, that ledwhich brought share prices to a bijust over of 20 euros by the end of the year. However, there was a gradual decrease, which brought share prices to just over 20 euros by the end of the year.

The share price jumped again at the beginning of 2008 to 30 euros, almost reaching the peak of 2017.


The share price jumped again at the beginning of 2008 to 30 euros, almost reaching the peak ofin 2017. The share price jumped again at the beginning of 2008 to 30 euros, almost reaching the peak in 2017.

"the peak" -> noun does not belong to "2017", instead this event happens in 2017, so you use "in" instead of "of"

After that increase, however, the share price plunged drastically from 30 leveling off under 10 euros till almost the third quarter of 2009, when the price rose to 15 euros and continued to fluctuate, with a highest point at approximately 17 euros in 2010.


After that increase, however, the share price plunged drastically from 30 leveling off, reaching under 10 euros untill almost it approached the third quarter of 2009, when the price rose to 15 euros and continued to fluctuate, with a highest point at approximately 17 euros in 2010. After that increase, however, the share price plunged drastically from 30, reaching under 10 euros until it approached the third quarter of 2009, when the price rose to 15 euros and continued to fluctuate, with a highest point at approximately 17 euros in 2010.

"till" is informal, "until" is a more formal choice here. You can say "until almost", this is correct. However using "approached" here makes it sound more grammatically correct.

After that increase, however, the share price plunged drastically from 30. The price levelinged off under 10 euros untill almost the third quarter of 2009, when the price rose to 15 euros and. The price continued to fluctuate, withreaching a highest point at approximately 17 euros in 2010. After that increase, however, the share price plunged drastically. The price leveled off under 10 euros until almost the third quarter of 2009, when the price rose to 15 euros. The price continued to fluctuate, reaching a highest point at approximately 17 euros in 2010.

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