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There is an ongoing discussion around whether governments should spend money on programs encouraging the public to be active and healthy, instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics. While I partially agree that the general population no compete in high sports events, I also believe that it is still important to invest in High-performance athletes.

Firstly, training athletes for the Olympics incentives the general population to do more exercise. When a country is recognized for a sport, it becomes mainstream in the media and in public discussion. For instance, after Colombia started to be better known in cycling, my whole neighbor created a cycling club to gather people who wanted to do some exercise. However, the number of these athletes is usually very low compared with the general population, that is the reason I believe that governments should invest in programs aimed to the public.

Secondly, investing on high-perform athletes is beneficial to the public because it provides well-equipped infrastructure. For example, when governments decide to hold the Olympics games, they also put a lot of money on building to do a variety of sports, which can be used later by the public. When I visited Canada, I skated on ice in an ice rink that was built for the Winter Olympics game. The infrastructure was being used by the public to skate.

In conclusion, investing in talented athletes can encourage people to exercise more, and also the infrastructure investment for sport events can be used later by the public.

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30/04 Another opinion essay :) Thank you

There is an ongoing discussion around whether governments should spend money on programs encouraging the public to be active and healthy, instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics.

While I partially agree that the general population do not compete in high sports events, I also believe that it is still important to invest in Hhigh-performance athletes.

Firstly, training athletes for the Olympics incentivencourages the general population to do more exercise.

When a country is recognized for a sport, it becomes mainstream in the media and in public discussion.

For instance, after Colombia started to be better known in cycling, my whole neighborurhood created a cycling club to gather people who wanted to do some exercise.

The u in ‘neighbourhood’ is technically more British/Canadian. It isn’t as common in the USA

However, the number of these athletes is usually very low compared with the general population, that is the reason I believe that governments should invest in programs aimed to the public.

Secondly, investing oin high-performance athletes is beneficial to the public because it provides well-equipped infrastructure.

For example, when governments decide to holdst the Olympics games, they also put a lot of money on building to do a variety of sports, which can be used later by the public.

When I visited Canada, I skated on ice in an ice rink that was built for the Winter Olympics games.

The infrastructure was being used by the public to skate.

In conclusion, investing in talented athletes can encourage people to exercise more, and also the infrastructure investment for sport events can be used later by the public.

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Well formulated argument, as well as mainly good English. Just a couple of things that needed fixing. Good luck as you continue learning!

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Xtren070

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I really appreciate your corrections, thank you!

30/04 Another opinion essay :) Thank you

There is an ongoing discussion aroundon whether governments should spend money on programs encouraging the general public to be active and healthy, instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics.

While I partially agree that the general population does not compete in highsuch high-profile sports events, I also believe that it is still important to invest in Hhigh-performance athletes.

Firstly, training athletes for the Olympics incentivencourages the general population to do more exercise more.

When a country is recognized for a sport, it becomes mainstream in the media and in public discussion.

For instance, after Colombia started to be betterbecoming well known infor cycling, my wholentire neighborhood created a cycling club to gathefor people who wanted to do some exerciscycle.

However, the number of these athletes is usually very low compared withto the general population, that is the reasonwhich is why I believe that governments should invest in programs aimed ato the general public.

Secondly, investing oin high-performance athletes is beneficial to the public because it providebuilds well-equipped infrastructurefacilities.

For example, when governments decide to hold the Olympics games, they also putour a lot of money inton buildings to dohat host a variety of sports, which can be used later by the public.

When I visited Canada, I skated on ice in an ice rink that washad been built for the Winter Olympics game.

The infrastructure wasfacilities were being used by the public to skate.

In conclusion, investing in talented athletes can encourage people to exercise more, and also the infrastructure investmentthe facilities used for sporting events can be used later by the public.

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Xtren070

May 1, 2024

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I really appreciate your corrections, thank you!

30/04 Another opinion essay :) Thank you

There is an ongoing discussion around whether governments should spend money on programs encouraging the public to be active and healthy, instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics.

While I partially agree that the general population do not compete in high profile sports events, I also believe that it is still important to invest in Hhigh-performanceing athletes.

Firstly, training athletes for the Olympics incentivencourages the general population to do more exercise.

When a country is recognized for a sport, ithe issue/ the subject becomes mainstream in the media and in public discussion.

For instance, after Colombia started to be better known in cycling, my whole neighborurhood created a cycling club to gathersupport people who wanted to do some exercise.

You could also say - to get together people who wanted to do more exercise.

However, the number of these athletes is usually very low compared with the general population, and so, that is the reason I believe that governments should invest in programs aimed ato the general public.

Secondly, investing oin high-performing athletes is beneficial to the public because it provides well-equippea good infrastructure.

For example, when governments decide to hold the Olympics games, they also puinvest a lot of money oin building to doinfrastructure for a variety of sports, which ca. This can then be used later by the public.

When I visited Canada, I skated on ice in an ice rink that was built for the Winter Olympics game.

The infrastructure was now being used by the public to skate.

In conclusion, investing in talented athletes can encourage people to exercise more, and also the investment in infrastructure investment for sporting events can later be used later by the public.

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Xtren070

May 1, 2024

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I really appreciate your corrections, thank you!

There is an ongoing discussion around whether governments should spend money on programs encouraging the public to be active and healthy, instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics.

While I partially agree that the general population does not compete in high sports events, I also believe that it is still important to invest in Hhigh-performanceing athletes.

Firstly, training athletes for the Olympics incentivizes the general population to do more exercise more.

When a country is recognized for a sport, it becomes mainstream in the media and in public discussion.

For instance, after Colombia started to be better known in cycling, my wholesome of my neighbors created a cycling club to gather people who wanted to do some exercise.

could also be "my neighborhood" depending on the intended meaning

However, the number of these athletes is usually very low compared with the general population, that is the reason I believe that governments should invest in programs aimed ato the public.

Secondly, investing oin high-performing athletes is beneficial to the public because it provides well-equipped infrastructure.

For example, when governments decide to hold the Olympics games, they also put a lot of money on building to do a variety of sports, which can be used later by the public.

When I visited Canada, I skated on ice in an ice rink that was built for the Winter Olympics game.

The infrastructure was being used by the public to skate.

In conclusion, investing in talented athletes can encourage people to exercise more, and also the infrastructure investment for sports events can be used later by the public.

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Nice essay! Sports events definitely have their place! :)

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Xtren070

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30/04 Another opinion essay :) Thank you


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There is an ongoing discussion around whether governments should spend money on programs encouraging the public to be active and healthy, instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics.


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While I partially agree that the general population no compete in high sports events, I also believe that it is still important to invest in High-performance athletes.


While I partially agree that the general population does not compete in high sports events, I also believe that it is still important to invest in Hhigh-performanceing athletes.

While I partially agree that the general population do not compete in high profile sports events, I also believe that it is still important to invest in Hhigh-performanceing athletes.

While I partially agree that the general population does not compete in highsuch high-profile sports events, I also believe that it is still important to invest in Hhigh-performance athletes.

While I partially agree that the general population do not compete in high sports events, I also believe that it is still important to invest in Hhigh-performance athletes.

Firstly, training athletes for the Olympics incentives the general population to do more exercise.


Firstly, training athletes for the Olympics incentivizes the general population to do more exercise more.

Firstly, training athletes for the Olympics incentivencourages the general population to do more exercise.

Firstly, training athletes for the Olympics incentivencourages the general population to do more exercise more.

Firstly, training athletes for the Olympics incentivencourages the general population to do more exercise.

When a country is recognized for a sport, it becomes mainstream in the media and in public discussion.


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When a country is recognized for a sport, ithe issue/ the subject becomes mainstream in the media and in public discussion.

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For instance, after Colombia started to be better known in cycling, my whole neighbor created a cycling club to gather people who wanted to do some exercise.


For instance, after Colombia started to be better known in cycling, my wholesome of my neighbors created a cycling club to gather people who wanted to do some exercise.

could also be "my neighborhood" depending on the intended meaning

For instance, after Colombia started to be better known in cycling, my whole neighborurhood created a cycling club to gathersupport people who wanted to do some exercise.

You could also say - to get together people who wanted to do more exercise.

For instance, after Colombia started to be betterbecoming well known infor cycling, my wholentire neighborhood created a cycling club to gathefor people who wanted to do some exerciscycle.

For instance, after Colombia started to be better known in cycling, my whole neighborurhood created a cycling club to gather people who wanted to do some exercise.

The u in ‘neighbourhood’ is technically more British/Canadian. It isn’t as common in the USA

However, the number of these athletes is usually very low compared with the general population, that is the reason I believe that governments should invest in programs aimed to the public.


However, the number of these athletes is usually very low compared with the general population, that is the reason I believe that governments should invest in programs aimed ato the public.

However, the number of these athletes is usually very low compared with the general population, and so, that is the reason I believe that governments should invest in programs aimed ato the general public.

However, the number of these athletes is usually very low compared withto the general population, that is the reasonwhich is why I believe that governments should invest in programs aimed ato the general public.

However, the number of these athletes is usually very low compared with the general population, that is the reason I believe that governments should invest in programs aimed to the public.

Secondly, investing on high-perform athletes is beneficial to the public because it provides well-equipped infrastructure.


Secondly, investing oin high-performing athletes is beneficial to the public because it provides well-equipped infrastructure.

Secondly, investing oin high-performing athletes is beneficial to the public because it provides well-equippea good infrastructure.

Secondly, investing oin high-performance athletes is beneficial to the public because it providebuilds well-equipped infrastructurefacilities.

Secondly, investing oin high-performance athletes is beneficial to the public because it provides well-equipped infrastructure.

When I visited Canada, I skated on ice in an ice rink that was built for the Winter Olympics game.


When I visited Canada, I skated on ice in an ice rink that was built for the Winter Olympics game.

When I visited Canada, I skated on ice in an ice rink that was built for the Winter Olympics game.

When I visited Canada, I skated on ice in an ice rink that washad been built for the Winter Olympics game.

When I visited Canada, I skated on ice in an ice rink that was built for the Winter Olympics games.

For example, when governments decide to hold the Olympics games, they also put a lot of money on building to do a variety of sports, which can be used later by the public.


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For example, when governments decide to hold the Olympics games, they also puinvest a lot of money oin building to doinfrastructure for a variety of sports, which ca. This can then be used later by the public.

For example, when governments decide to hold the Olympics games, they also putour a lot of money inton buildings to dohat host a variety of sports, which can be used later by the public.

For example, when governments decide to holdst the Olympics games, they also put a lot of money on building to do a variety of sports, which can be used later by the public.

The infrastructure was being used by the public to skate.


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The infrastructure was now being used by the public to skate.

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In conclusion, investing in talented athletes can encourage people to exercise more, and also the infrastructure investment for sport events can be used later by the public.


In conclusion, investing in talented athletes can encourage people to exercise more, and also the infrastructure investment for sports events can be used later by the public.

In conclusion, investing in talented athletes can encourage people to exercise more, and also the investment in infrastructure investment for sporting events can later be used later by the public.

In conclusion, investing in talented athletes can encourage people to exercise more, and also the infrastructure investmentthe facilities used for sporting events can be used later by the public.

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