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Can you make it more colloquial or improve it? plz

How do you like your college life ?
1. I had a great time in college, because I had a lot of fun, made lots of friends, and finished my homework follow my plan. The most important thing I achieved was figuring out who I really am and what really makes me happy. With no parents or other authority figures around to dictate rules, I learned to make choices just for me. Those choices defined a direction for my life that was based on what I wanted, not what I was told to want. I learned how to create my own happiness.
2. My opinion: As we known, we had the same goal and go towards it during our senior high school. But there were too many subjects we have to learn and we often forced ourselves to finish the daily tasks without passion. When I was a freshman in college, I suddenly dawn on the mean of “life is full of challenges”. I used to think time is always no enough, but now time is no a luxuries anymore. I have fewer classes than I used to and have so much leisure time to enjoy. I can do everything I want, so it caused the beginning of bad habit. I addition in wasted my time on playing computer games and playing mobile phone. I even didn’t want to leave my dormitory. But you know, people is change with time go by. Time is not about how much you have, but how you use it. I started to review and preview my study in the classic and go to the library to read books in English as possible. I gained patience on doing everything, including study and social contact. In a word, college life is a new born of my characteristic and the consist progress of improving myself.

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I addition in wasted my time on playing computer games and playing on my mobile phone.

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why i can not use" addition in"

Can you make it more colloquial or improve it? plz


How do you like your college life ?


How do you like your college life ?I'm going to answer the prompt, "How do you like your college life/college experience?" I liked my college life/college experience for many number of reasons. I'm going to answer the prompt, "How do you like your college life/college experience?" I liked my college life/college experience for many number of reasons.

1. I had a great time in college, because I had a lot of fun, made lots of friends, and finished my homework follow my plan.


1. I had a great time in college, because I had a lot of fun, made lots of friends, and finished my homework which followed my plan (for the future). 1. I had a great time in college, because I had a lot of fun, made lots of friends, and finished my homework which followed my plan (for the future).

Not too sure what you mean by " (I) finished my homework which followed my plan." Followed your plan for what exactly? What kind of plan?

The most important thing I achieved was figuring out who I really am and what really makes me happy.


The most important thing I achieved/gained while in college was figuring out who I really am and what really makes me happy. The most important thing I achieved/gained while in college was figuring out who I really am and what really makes me happy.

With no parents or other authority figures around to dictate rules, I learned to make choices just for me.


With no parents or other authority figures around to dictate rules of how I should act or what I should do, I learned to make choices just for meby myself/for myself. With no parents or other authority figures around to dictate rules of how I should act or what I should do, I learned to make choices by myself/for myself.

Those choices defined a direction for my life that was based on what I wanted, not what I was told to want.


I learned how to create my own happiness.


2. My opinion: As we known, we had the same goal and go towards it during our senior high school.


2. My opinion: As we known, weContrary to my opinion of high school which is we, as in all the students, all had the same goals and go towardswe forced to achieve it during our senior year in high school. 2. Contrary to my opinion of high school which is we, as in all the students, all had the same goals and we forced to achieve it during our senior year in high school.

This sentence is unclear. Who is "we?" Also what topic is your opinion about/on?

But there were too many subjects we have to learn and we often forced ourselves to finish the daily tasks without passion.


But there were too many subjects we haved to learn, and we often forced ourselves to finish the daily tasks without any passion/drive. But there were too many subjects we had to learn, and we often forced ourselves to finish the daily tasks without any passion/drive.

When I was a freshman in college, I suddenly dawn on the mean of “life is full of challenges”.


When I was a freshman in college, Iit suddenly dawned on me the mean ofing of the phrase, “life is full of challenges”. When I was a freshman in college, it suddenly dawned on me the meaning of the phrase, “life is full of challenges”.

I used to think time is always no enough, but now time is no a luxuries anymore.


I used to think timhere is always not enough, but now time is no a luxuries anymore time to do everything you want to do, but I realized how much of a luxury time truly is. I used to think there is always not enough time to do everything you want to do, but I realized how much of a luxury time truly is.

I have fewer classes than I used to and have so much leisure time to enjoy.


In college, I now have fewer classes than I used to and have so muchin high school, and I even have more leisure time to enjoy for myself as well. In college, I now have fewer classes than I used to in high school, and I even have more leisure time to enjoy for myself as well.

I can do everything I want, so it caused the beginning of bad habit.


I can do everything I want, so it caused thebut this freedom formed a beginning of a bad habit. I can do everything I want, but this freedom formed a beginning of a bad habit.

I addition in wasted my time on playing computer games and playing mobile phone.


I addition in wasted my time on playing computer games and playing on my mobile phone. I wasted my time playing computer games and playing on my mobile phone.

I even didn’t want to leave my dormitory.


I evenAt one point, I didn’t even want to leave my dormitory. At one point, I didn’t even want to leave my dormitory.

But you know, people is change with time go by.


But as you know, people iscan change with time/as time goes by people change. But as you know, people can change with time/as time goes by people change.

Time is not about how much you have, but how you use it.


TimeI realized that it is not about how much time you have, but how you use it. I realized that it is not about how much time you have, but how you use it.

I started to review and preview my study in the classic and go to the library to read books in English as possible.


I started to review and preview my study in the classic andClassical Chinese and, I decided to go to the library to read books inas many English as possible. I started to review and preview Classical Chinese and, I decided to go to the library to read books as many English as possible.

I gained patience on doing everything, including study and social contact.


Over time, I gained patience on doing everything,toward completing things I wanted to do and doing things that I need to do, which includinges studying and social contact with others. Over time, I gained patience toward completing things I wanted to do and doing things that I need to do, which includes studying and social contact with others.

In a word, college life is a new born of my characteristic and the consist progress of improving myself.


In a worSimply said, college life is a new born of my characteristic and the consist progress ofhas given me a new way to look at and live life and I am committed to consistently improvinge myself. Simply said, college life has given me a new way to look at and live life and I am committed to consistently improve myself.

I'm not sure what you mean by "college life is a new born characteristic (of myself)." Since "college life," is an abstract concept or experience, I don't think it can be a characteristic of you, unlike curiosity and optimism.

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