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Because of the global economy many goods including what we u

In past 20 years, as the rapid development of global economy. Many goods that we use on daily basis were produced by other countries, and transported for a long distance to all over the world. Did the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

To begin with, the global economy tighten the relationship and encourage more business activities between countries, so many companies will set their factories in country who have cheaper workforce and lower tariff , to reduce the cost. When the product's cost has decreased, the company can sell the product at an lower price to attract more customers. On another hand, we can buy things at an cheaper price, so we can less our living cost. either company and customers get benefits.

Meanwhile. There are many companies moved their production line to other countries. It means a safety and faster logistics is crucial. However, it usually facing problems like, the bad weather will affect the sea and air freight, caused extend the transport time.........

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April 20, 2022

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April 20, 2022

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Thank you very much for correcting my essay. My English is not good, so l am trying to make it better 😅 probably l should choose some easy topic to write about.

Because of the global economy many goods including what we u


Because of the global economy many goods including what we u[verb or noun] Because of the global economy many goods including what we [verb or noun]

This sentence is missing a word to make the meaning clear

In past 20 years, as the rapid development of global economy.


In the past 20 years, as the global economy has rapidly development of global economy.ed, In the past 20 years, as the global economy has rapidly developed,

This is not a full sentence, it needs to be joined with a comma to the next sentence for it to make sense.

Many goods that we use on daily basis were produced by other countries, and transported for a long distance to all over the world.


Mmany goods that we use on a daily basis weare produced by other countries, and transported fover a longgreat distance to all overthe rest of the world. many goods that we use on a daily basis are produced by other countries, and transported over a great distance to the rest of the world.

I have chaned the start of this sentence to a lower case m because I have connected this sentence and the previous sentence together.

Did the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.


Dido the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Use do not did, since this is currently happening.

To begin with, the global economy tighten the relationship and encourage more business activities between countries, so many companies will set their factories in country who have cheaper workforce and lower tariff , to reduce the cost.


To begin with, the global economy tightstren gthens relationships and encourages more business activities between countries, so many companies will setation their factories in countryies who have a cheaper workforce and lower tariffs , to reduce thelabour costs. To begin with, the global economy strengthens relationships and encourages more business activities between countries, so many companies will station their factories in countries who have a cheaper workforce and lower tariffs , to reduce labour costs.

When the product's cost has decreased, the company can sell the product at an lower price to attract more customers.


WhenSince the product'sion cost has decreased, the company can sell the product at an lower price to attract more customers and make more profits. Since the production cost has decreased, the company can sell the product at a lower price to attract more customers and make more profits.

The part I added to the end means that this sentence and the next sentence fit together better.

On another hand, we can buy things at an cheaper price, so we can less our living cost.


On another hand,This also means we can buy things at an cheaper price, so we can less ourdecreasing our cost of living cost. This also means we can buy things at a cheaper price, decreasing our cost of living.

On the other hand is used when there are two contrasting but related ideas. For example: I like cheese, but on the other hand I hate yoghurt. This works since they are both related but different. What you are saying is too related to use this expression. Please let me know if you need me to explain this more, I know it is really confusing

either company and customers get benefits.


eitherBoth company and customers get benefits. Both company and customer benefits.

Meanwhile.


Meanwhile., Meanwhile,

Meanwhile is not a sentence by itself, you need to use a comma to connect it to the next sentence.

There are many companies moved their production line to other countries.


Tthere are many companies moveding their production lines to other countries. there are many companies moving their production lines to other countries.

I have made this sentence start with a lower case since it should be part of the previous sentence.

It means a safety and faster logistics is crucial.


ItThis means a safetyr and faster logistics is crucial. This means safer and faster logistics is crucial.

The meaning here is a little unclear, what do you mean by safer?

However, it usually facing problems like, the bad weather will affect the sea and air freight, caused extend the transport time.........


However, it usuathey are stilly facing problems like, thesuch as bad weather will affect theing sea and air freight, which causeds extend the transportation time......... However, they are still facing problems such as bad weather affecting sea and air freight which causes extend transportation time...

When we use ... we only ever put three.

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