My excitement to know a biographthe story of Nightingale My excitement to know the story of Nightingale

I took a guess at what you meant to say. "Know a biography" is a rather odd expression in this context.

My excitement to knowsee a biography of Nightingale My excitement to see a biography of Nightingale

My excitement to knowsee a biography ofabout Nightingale My excitement to see a biography about Nightingale

We usually say "Florence Nightingale"

I went to watch a musical, “The Ghost and the Lady”, which was about athe story of Florence Nightingale. I went to watch a musical, “The Ghost and the Lady”, which was about the story of Florence Nightingale.

(1) Here, the two commas exist as a pair. You can't have one without the other. (2) I believe the English name is "The Ghost and the Lady".

I went to watch a musical, “Ghost and Lady” which was about a story of Florence Nightingale. I went to watch a musical, “Ghost and Lady” which was about Florence Nightingale.

I went to watch a musical, “Ghost and Lady”, which wais about a story ofabout Florence Nightingale. I went to watch a musical, “Ghost and Lady”, which is a story about Florence Nightingale.

She faced many challenges when she worked to cure lots of sick and wounded soldiers in Crimea. She faced many challenges when she worked to cure lots of sick and wounded soldiers in Crimea.

She faced many challenges when she worked to curetreat lots of sick and wounded solders in Crimea. She faced many challenges when she worked to treat lots of sick and wounded solders in Crimea.

She faced many challenges when she worked to curetreated lots of sick and wounded solders in Crimea. She faced many challenges when she treated lots of sick and wounded solders in Crimea.

I cried many times during the show, especially when I touchedfelt her strong belief toward the occupation ofpassion for being a nurse. I cried many times during the show, especially when I felt her strong passion for being a nurse.

I cried many times during the show especially when I touchedfelt her (strong beliefdrive toward the occupation of as becoming a nurse / strong respect for nurses). I cried many times during the show especially when I felt her (strong drive towards becoming a nurse / strong respect for nurses).

Not quite sure what the second half of the sentence is meant to mean so I gave two options it could be.

I cried many times during the show, especially when I touchedsaw her strong belief toward the occupation of a nurse. I cried many times during the show, especially when I saw her strong belief toward the occupation of a nurse.