The place I would visit is New York . New York is a wonderfull place because it’s a city with manya lot of history and magnificent landscapes . The place I would visit is New York. New York is a wonderful place because it’s a city with a lot of history and magnificent landscapes.

Slight spelling error on the word "wonderful" "many history" sounds weird since history is a singular entity. You typically use "many" when there are different types of a certain thing. So in this case, it would make more sense to say that "the city has a lot of history" since it contains the concept of history in a large amount.

My passion is fashion and I thinks New York is great place to improuve my style and my outfits. My passion is fashion and I think New York is great place to improve my style and outfits.

Small spelling error with the word "improve" When you say improve your style and outfits, the subject is already focused on you so you don't need to say "my style and my outfits" since when you put "my" in front of style, the second part is implied to be yours already.

The city is full of shopping places and I love this because there isare many choice of clothes, shoes, and accessories. The city is full of shopping places and I love this because there are many choice of clothes, shoes, and accessories.

Errors with plurality

The USA is my dream country to visit so I really thinkwant to go ahto this place. The US is my dream country to visit so I really want to go to this place.