Aug. 7, 2021
Last night I was playing snooker for almost 6 hours.
That was hard!
Especially, at the ages of 50’s.
When I was young, I can stay up to 3:00 am every night and I still feel nothing.
But now all I thinking is just go to bed.
When I was young, I also play snooker for long hours. (From 9am to 9pm)
But in between I will have lunch or afternoon tea…
Not for straight 6 hours!
The only good news from this experience.
My snooker skill is getting steady even under such condition.
I am feeling happy but this road is too lonely.
2100-0230 Snooker
Last night I was playing snooker for almost 6 hours.
That was hard!
Especially, at the ages of 50’s.
When I was young, I can stay up to 3:00 am every night and I still feel nothing.
Your sentence starts off by speaking about the past: "When I WAS young ...", so you need to put the next verb (CAN) into the past tense. There are a couple of ways of doing this:
1. "When I was young, I COULD stay up ..."
Here, "could" is a short way of saying "would be able to".
"Could" is used in an "if" sentence, for example: "I could stay up if the occasion demanded it." The staying up was determined by the occasion. Often, the writer does not state the "if" part of the sentence and just leaves it as implied. That's ok.
2. "When I was young, I WAS ABLE to stay up ..."
Here, "was able" provides a more definite and factual statement of ability. It doesn't really need any further emphasis or qualification to get over its meaning.
It is really up to you which one of the above you wish to use. People go for either equally.
Summary:
am able = can (present tense)
example: I am able to stay up/ I can stay up.
was able (past tense statement of fact)
example: I was able to stay up.
would be able = could (past tense conditional)
example: I would be able to stay up (if required)/ I could stay up (if required).
This is not an easy part of English learning, but I hope I have provided you with some of the basics.
But now all I thinking is just go to bed.
"I thinking"
The word "thinking" can be used either as a noun or as part of a verb.
Here, you are using "thinking" as part of a verb. Note, I say PART, so you need to add to it another verb word to make it complete. For example: "But now, all I am thinking ..." Here, AM is the other part of the full verb.
Some other examples:
Present tense: I think, I am thinking
Past tense: I thought, I was thinking.
Future tense: I will think, I will be thinking.
When I was young, I also play snooker for long hours.
"When I was young" is talking about the past.
"I also play" is talking about a present action.
You need to use all past tense verbs here. for example: "When I was young, I also PLAYED snooker ..."
See above for similar explanations about verb tense.
(From 9am to 9pm)
But in between I will have lunch or afternoon tea…
I agree with the previous teacher's comments.
Again, verb tense use is not quite correct here.
Not for straight 6 hours!
I agree withe the previous teacher's comments.
The only good news from this experience.
Needs joining up with the next sentence, as advised by the previous teacher.
My snooker skill is getting steady even under such condition.
As advised by the previous teacher.
I am feeling happy but this road is too lonely.
Feedback
I fully agree with the comments of the previous teacher. In my review of your work, I have mostly concentrated on the basic grammar. The previous teacher has already provided useful style and usage advice.
I like the style of the title: it catches the attention of the reader.
Overall advice from me:
1. You need to do some verb-tense revision. Please look at the various online resources covering verbs. Many of these resources are free of charge. Keep it simple. Learn the basics. English verbs are not too easy but if you learn the basics well, you'll have a good foundation on which to progress. I am more than happy to answer questions about English grammar. I certainly don't have all the answers but I do have 58 years of using the language!!
2. Your text flow is a bit "stop-and-start" - a series of short sentences. This style is ok for certain types of stories, for example if you want to present a story about being surprised about something: "I saw a bright light in the sky. It got brighter and brighter. Suddenly it came towards me. I ran for my life! Help!"
However, your story here needs to be smoothed out by using more "joining up". For example:
A) See above for the comments about joining the two sentences together.
B) "When I was young, I could stay up to 3:00 am every night and I still feel nothing, but now all I think about is just going to bed."
End note: Do a structured course to learn the verb basics. Keep your writing simple at this stage. Make your text flow better.
Please let me know if you want more help from me.
Sincerely,
mjm
2100-0230 Snooker
Last night I was playing snooker for almost 6 hours.
That was hard!
Especially, at the ages of 50’s.
You could also phrase it like:
It’s especially hard when you get to be in your fifties.
When I was young, I canould stay up tountil 3:00 am every night and I still feelt nothing.
Instead of “I felt nothing” I might say:
I could stay up til 3 every night and wouldn’t bother me
But nowadays, all I’m thinking is “just go to bed.”
When I was young, I also played snooker for long hours.
But in between I willback then I would take breaks here and there to have lunch or afternoon tea…
You could also say:
But I used to take breaks while playing to etc...
Not for 6 hours straight 6 hours!
Or:
I never played for 6 hours straight!
The only good news from this experience. is that my snooker skills are steadily improving despite the trying conditions.
“The only good news from this experience” isn’t a complete sentence - you’d have to say what the good news is to make it so. So I think combining these two sentences makes sense here.
My snooker skill iss are getting steadybetter even under suchthese condition.s.
This is just another way to say it
I am feeling happysatisfied but this road is too lonely.
To clarify what you mean you by “this road is too lonely” you could say:
I feel satisfied but practicing snooker in this kind of way is a lonely road.
Feedback
I’ve never heard of snooker before, I’ll have to look into it. Good job with the English and also the snooker practice, keep it up!
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Last night I was playing snooker for almost 6 hours. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
That was hard! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
Especially, at the ages of 50’s. Especially You could also phrase it like: It’s especially hard when you get to be in your fifties. Especially |
When I was young, I can stay up to 3:00 am every night and I still feel nothing. When I was young, I c Instead of “I felt nothing” I might say: I could stay up til 3 every night and wouldn’t bother me When I was young, I can stay up to 3:00 am every night and I still feel nothing. Your sentence starts off by speaking about the past: "When I WAS young ...", so you need to put the next verb (CAN) into the past tense. There are a couple of ways of doing this: 1. "When I was young, I COULD stay up ..." Here, "could" is a short way of saying "would be able to". "Could" is used in an "if" sentence, for example: "I could stay up if the occasion demanded it." The staying up was determined by the occasion. Often, the writer does not state the "if" part of the sentence and just leaves it as implied. That's ok. 2. "When I was young, I WAS ABLE to stay up ..." Here, "was able" provides a more definite and factual statement of ability. It doesn't really need any further emphasis or qualification to get over its meaning. It is really up to you which one of the above you wish to use. People go for either equally. Summary: am able = can (present tense) example: I am able to stay up/ I can stay up. was able (past tense statement of fact) example: I was able to stay up. would be able = could (past tense conditional) example: I would be able to stay up (if required)/ I could stay up (if required). This is not an easy part of English learning, but I hope I have provided you with some of the basics. |
But now all I thinking is just go to bed. But nowadays, all I’m thinking is “just go to bed.” But now all I thinking is just go to bed. "I thinking" The word "thinking" can be used either as a noun or as part of a verb. Here, you are using "thinking" as part of a verb. Note, I say PART, so you need to add to it another verb word to make it complete. For example: "But now, all I am thinking ..." Here, AM is the other part of the full verb. Some other examples: Present tense: I think, I am thinking Past tense: I thought, I was thinking. Future tense: I will think, I will be thinking. |
When I was young, I also play snooker for long hours. When I was young, I also played snooker for long hours. When I was young, I also play snooker for long hours. "When I was young" is talking about the past. "I also play" is talking about a present action. You need to use all past tense verbs here. for example: "When I was young, I also PLAYED snooker ..." See above for similar explanations about verb tense. |
(From 9am to 9pm) This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
But in between I will have lunch or afternoon tea… But You could also say: But I used to take breaks while playing to etc... But in between I will have lunch or afternoon tea… I agree with the previous teacher's comments. Again, verb tense use is not quite correct here. |
Not for straight 6 hours! Not for 6 hours straight Or: I never played for 6 hours straight! Not for straight 6 hours! I agree withe the previous teacher's comments. |
The only good news from this experience. The only good news from this experience “The only good news from this experience” isn’t a complete sentence - you’d have to say what the good news is to make it so. So I think combining these two sentences makes sense here. The only good news from this experience. Needs joining up with the next sentence, as advised by the previous teacher. |
My snooker skill is getting steady even under such condition. My snooker skill This is just another way to say it My snooker skill is getting steady even under such condition. As advised by the previous teacher. |
I am feeling happy but this road is too lonely. I am feeling To clarify what you mean you by “this road is too lonely” you could say: I feel satisfied but practicing snooker in this kind of way is a lonely road. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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