When we sauntered along the slopes in Central, I was heartened by Star's (another Thai roommate) words, "You can say NO to everything you're not OK with." When we sauntered along the slopes in Central, I was heartened by Star's (another Thai roommate) words, "You can say NO to everything you're not OK with."

While sauntering along the slopes in Central, I was heartened by Star's (another Thai roommate) words, "You can say NO to everything you're not OK with."

Whilen we [sauntered] along the slopes in Central, I was heartened by Star's (another Thai roommate) words,: "You can say NO to everything you're not OK with." While we [sauntered] along the slopes in Central, I was heartened by Star's (another Thai roommate) words: "You can say NO to everything you're not OK with."

"Sauntered" is correctly used here, but it's not a very common word (from what I've heard as an American English speaker, at least). It comes off as overly formal/literary. I would personally prefer the world "strolled". What is Central? Is it the name of a district/neighborhood?

BeAsides from the people I've met, I also there, I love thise city itself. Aside from the people I met there, I love the city itself.

I discovered a lot of different cultures here and I found that no matter what you wear, what you look like and who you are, people won't stare at others with curious and unfriendly glimpses. I discovered a lot of different cultures here and I found that no matter what you wear, what you look like and who you are, people won't stare at others with curious and unfriendly glimpses.

I discovered a lot of different cultures here and I found that no matter what you wear, what you look like, or who you are, people would not stare at you rudely.

I discovered a lot of different cultures here and I found that no matter what you wear, what you look like andor who you are, people won't stare at othersyou with a curious and unfriendly glimpsesaze. I discovered a lot of different cultures here and found that no matter what you wear, what you look like or who you are, people won't stare at you with a curious and unfriendly gaze.

"Glimpse" implies a quick/fleeting look, which contradicts the verb "stare", which implies a long, sustained look.

And iIn this wonderland, I could get rid oftemporarily leave fear, insecurity and censorship temporarily (behind - compared to HK, there are so many annoying restrictions in mainland China). In this wonderland, I could temporarily leave fear, insecurity and censorship behind - compared to HK, there are so many annoying restrictions in mainland China.

"Leave behind" is a better phrase than "get rid of" in this context. You aren't eliminating the fear and censorship in mainland China, you're just escaping it.

Though Hong Kong has changed a lot since the protests that took place in 2019, I still love it because of theits openness and inclusiveness. Though Hong Kong has changed a lot since the protests that took place in 2019, I still love it because of its openness and inclusiveness.

Hong Kong once offered a safe place to tremendous opinions, so people could talk, read books and search for information freely. Hong Kong once offered a safe place to tremendous opinions, so people could talk, read books and search for information freely.

Hong Kong offered a safe place for controversial opinions, so people could talk, read books, and search for information freely.

Hong Kong once offered a safe place to hold tremendous opinions, so that people could talk, read books and search for information freely. Hong Kong once offered a safe place to hold tremendous opinions, so that people could talk, read books and search for information freely.

"Tremendous" sounds unnatural here. Are you trying to say that the opinions of people in Hong Kong were very good/great, or that they were diverse or sometimes extreme?

It makes me realize that freedom is our unalienable rights and no one can deprive us of basic human rights. It makes me realize that freedom is our unalienable rights and no one can deprive us of basic human rights.

It made me realize that freedom is an unalienable right and that no one should deprive us of basic human rights.

It makesde me realize that freedom is our uinalienable rights and that no one can deprive us of basic human rights. It made me realize that freedom is our inalienable right and that no one can deprive us of basic human rights.

In the last morning, I wanted to say goodbye to my friends before leaving the cozy hostel, but all of them were having sweet dream. In the last morning, I wanted to say goodbye to my friends before leaving the cozy hostel, but all of them were having sweet dream.

On the final morning, I wanted to say goodbye to my friends before leaving the cozy hostel, but all of them were having sweet dreams.

In theDuring my last morning there, I wanted to say goodbye to my friends before leaving the cozy hostel, but all of them were having sweet dreamfast asleep. During my last morning there, I wanted to say goodbye to my friends before leaving the cozy hostel, but all of them were fast asleep.

Therefore, I left silently. Therefore, I left silently.

It might sound a little more natural to connect this to the previous sentence: "..., so I left silently."

However, on the ferry to Macau, my emotions exploded like a volcano and I couldn't help crying. However, on the ferry to Macau, my emotions exploded like a volcano and I couldn't help crying.

However, on the ferry to Macau, my emotions exploded like a volcano and I couldn't help but cry.

I love my friends I've met in that city, I still want to hang out with them together one day. I love my friends I've met in that city, I still want to hang out with them together one day.

I love the friends I met in that city, and I still want to hang out with them together one day.

I love mythe friends I'vethat I met in that city, and I still want to hang out with them togetheragain one day. I love the friends that I met in that city and I still want to hang out with them again one day.

I also love the freedowm in Hong Kong, which allows me to be myself with any fear and anxiety. I also love the freedowm in Hong Kong, which allows me to be myself with any fear and anxiety.

I also love the freedom in Hong Kong, which allowed me to be myself without any fear or anxiety.

I also love the freedowm in Hong Kong, which allows me to be myself without any fear andor anxiety. I also love the freedom in Hong Kong, which allows me to be myself without any fear or anxiety.

I still like my graduation trip even though three years has passed, so I'm going to write it down. I still like my graduation trip even though three years has passed, so I'm going to write it down.

I still think of my graduation trip fondly event though three years have passed, so I'm going to write about it.

I still likeremember how much I enjoyed my graduation trip even though three years hasve passed, so I'm going to write it downabout it. I still remember how much I enjoyed my graduation trip even though three years have passed, so I'm going to write about it.

Also a possibility: "I still look back fondly on..." You would not say "I like (present tense)" about an event that happened in the past. You could say "liked/enjoyed", meaning that you liked/enjoyed it at the time. However, in this case, I think you want to describe your current feelings about this past event, so "I remember enjoying / I remember how much I enjoyed / I look back fondly on" would be a better fit.

Before going to heaven in the future, this journal can remind me of this pure and happy time. Before going to heaven in the future, this journal can remind me of this pure and happy time.

Before I go to heaven in the future, this journal would be able to remind me of these pure and happy times.

Before going to heaven in the future, this journal can remind me of thisat pure and happy time. Before going to heaven in the future, this journal can remind me of that pure and happy time.

Do you mean, before you die? Grammatically, that first clause is fine, but it sounds a little morbid/dark...

In March 2023, I felt a bit nervous before heading to Hong Kong, because it was my first time to visit a place outside mainland China and I thought maybe I would encounter a lot of problems during this trip. In March 2023, I felt a bit nervous before heading to Hong Kong, because it was my first time to visit a place outside mainland China and I thought maybe I would encounter a lot of problems during this trip.

In March 2023, I was feeling a bit nervous before heading to Hong Kong, because it would be my first time visiting a place outside mainland China, and I was worried I would encounter a lot of problems during the trip.

In March 2023, I felt a bit nervous before heading to Hong Kong, because it was my first time to visiting a place outside mainland China and I thought maybe I would encounter a lot of problems during thise trip. In March 2023, I felt a bit nervous before heading to Hong Kong, because it was my first time visiting a place outside mainland China and I thought maybe I would encounter a lot of problems during the trip.

However, all the people I've met in that city were quite friendly and warm-hearted. However, all the people I've met in that city were quite friendly and warm-hearted.

However, all the people I met in that city were quite friendly and warm-hearted.

However, all the people I've met in that city were quite friendly and warm-hearted. However, all the people I met in that city were quite friendly and warm-hearted.

When I got lost on streets after getting off the train, as I didn't buy a local SIM card in advance, the pedestrians would show me correct directions. When I got lost on streets after getting off the train, as I didn't buy a local SIM card in advance, the pedestrians would show me correct directions.

As I didn't buy a local SIM card in advance, I got lost on the streets after getting off the train. Luckily, some pedestrians showed me the correct directions to my destination.

When I got lost on the streets after getting off the train, as I didn't buy a local SIM card in advance, the pedestrians would [show me correct directions]. When I got lost on the streets after getting off the train, as I didn't buy a local SIM card in advance, the pedestrians would [show me correct directions].

"Show me correct directions" is grammatically correct but does not sound like something a native would say. "Show me the way", "give me directions", or "point me in the right direction" are all more natural-sounding phrases. I think the sentence structure would sound better like this: "I got lost on the streets after getting off the train, since I didn't buy a local SIM card in advance, but nearby pedestrians helped me find the way."

When I was too shy to make friends in the hostel at the beginning, my roommates invited me to join their lay-back chats. When I was too shy to make friends in the hostel at the beginning, my roommates invited me to join their lay-back chats.

At the beginning, I was too shy to make friends in the hostel, but my roommates invited me to join their laid-back chats.

When I was too shy to make friends in the hostel at the beginningfirst, my roommates invited me to join their layid-back chats. When I was too shy to make friends in the hostel at first, my roommates invited me to join their laid-back chats.

When Sunny (a Thai roommate) knew that I didn't have Octopus (HK transportaion card), he gave me one with lots of balance inside and let me use it. When Sunny (a Thai roommate) knew that I didn't have Octopus (HK transportaion card), he gave me one with lots of balance inside and let me use it.

When Sunny, my Thai roommate, found out that I didn't have an Octopus card (the HK transportation card), he gave me one with a hefty balance inside and let me use it.

When Sunny (a Thai roommate) knewfound out that I didn't have an Octopus card (HK transportation card), he gave me one with lots of balance insida high balance and let me use it. When Sunny (a Thai roommate) found out that I didn't have an Octopus card (HK transportation card), he gave me one with a high balance and let me use it.

I would not use "inside" to describe the money left on a transportation card. You could say "with a high balance" (as in my correction), but it would also be natural to say "a card with a lot of money left on it", using the preposition "on".