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A Bad Berry Journey
One of the worst journeys I’ve ever had happened about ten years ago. I was travelling from Magnitogorsk to Moscow by plane. I wanted to treat my niece with fresh strawberries from my garden, and since the flight would only take a few hours, I thought the berries would stay perfectly fresh by the time I arrived.
Everything was fine at first. The sun was shining, and I arrived at the airport on time. What happened was that my flight got delayed first by an hour, then another hour, then another. So anyway, they gave us meals, then more meals, and all that time we had to go out and come back through baggage check again and again. My bag with fresh berries kept tumbling over and falling every time. Finally, instead of taking off at 1 p.m. and arriving in Moscow at the same time, I landed late in the evening. I just managed to catch the last metro train, but instead of fresh strawberries for my niece, I brought her compote. When I finally arrived, everyone was already asleep.
It was certainly the most frustrating trip. I’ve never been so exhausted and disappointed. I’ll never forget it.
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A Bad Berry Journey
One of the worst journeys I’ve ever had happened about ten years ago.
I was travelling from Magnitogorsk to Moscow by plane.
I wanted to treat my niece withto fresh strawberries from my garden, and since the flight would only take a few hours, I thought the berries would stay perfectly fresh by the time I arrived.
I wanted to treat my niece to fresh strawberries from my garden, and since the flight would only take a few hours, I thought the berries would stay perfectly fresh by the time I arrived.
Everything was fine at first.
The sun was shining, and I arrived at the airport on time.
What happened was that my flight got delayed first by an hour, then another hour, then another.
So anyway, they gave us meals, then more meals, and all that time we had to go out and come back through baggage check again and again.
My bag with (the) fresh berries kept tumbling over and falling every time. My bag with (the) fresh berries kept tumbling over and falling every time.
Since you already mentioned the berries in a previous sentence, adding “the” here is natural (but not necessary).
Finally, instead of taking off at 1 p.m. and arriving in Moscow at the same timehour, I landed late in the evening.
Finally, instead of taking off at 1 p.m. and arriving in Moscow at the same hour, I landed late in the evening.
I assume you mean it would have arrived in Moscow at 1 pm Moscow time.
I just managed to catch the last metro train, but instead of fresh strawberries for my niece, I brought her compote.
When I finally arrived, everyone was already asleep.
It was certainly the most frustrating trip.
I’ve never been so exhausted and disappointed.
I’ll never forget it.
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Well written.
I justbarely managed to catch the last metro train, but instead of fresh strawberries for my niece, I brought her compote.
I barely managed to catch the last metro train, but instead of fresh strawberries for my niece, I brought her compote.
When you say “I just managed…” it's referring to your recent past, something that recently happened. Since this occurred ten years ago, it sounds strange to say “I just...”
“I barely managed…” sounds the most natural here.
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Very well written and I found only one mistake, bravo!
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One of the worst journeys I’ve ever had happened about ten years ago. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I was travelling from Magnitogorsk to Moscow by plane. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I wanted to treat my niece with fresh strawberries from my garden, and since the flight would only take a few hours, I thought the berries would stay perfectly fresh by the time I arrived.
I wanted to treat my niece |
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Everything was fine at first. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The sun was shining, and I arrived at the airport on time. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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What happened was that my flight got delayed first by an hour, then another hour, then another. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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So anyway, they gave us meals, then more meals, and all that time we had to go out and come back through baggage check again and again. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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My bag with fresh berries kept tumbling over and falling every time. My bag with (the) fresh berries kept tumbling over and falling every time. My bag with (the) fresh berries kept tumbling over and falling every time. Since you already mentioned the berries in a previous sentence, adding “the” here is natural (but not necessary). |
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Finally, instead of taking off at 1 p.m. and arriving in Moscow at the same time, I landed late in the evening.
Finally, instead of taking off at 1 p.m. and arriving in Moscow at the same I assume you mean it would have arrived in Moscow at 1 pm Moscow time. |
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I just managed to catch the last metro train, but instead of fresh strawberries for my niece, I brought her compote.
I When you say “I just managed…” it's referring to your recent past, something that recently happened. Since this occurred ten years ago, it sounds strange to say “I just...” “I barely managed…” sounds the most natural here. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When I finally arrived, everyone was already asleep. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It was certainly the most frustrating trip. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I’ve never been so exhausted and disappointed. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I’ll never forget it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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