Dec. 4, 2021
2021 12 4 Year End
Time to clean up the house?
Time to look back?
This year is really special for me.
1 As an easy pushover I decide to fight with my colleague.
I transferring myself (runaway) from area LT to area ST.
What a loser!
2 I saw a 13 years girl died in front of me.
Every time when I telling this experience to someone, I couldn’t hold my tear.
3 My best friend immigrant to other country.
That is the only friend I got.
4 Job (career?) looks like I can broke the “1 year change 1 job” curse.
So far the longest period of a single job I have been working was 5 years.
Maybe I can break that?
2021 /12 4/4: End of the Year End
Time to clean up the house?
Time to look back?
This year is really special for me.to me, for many reasons:
Since you begin listing reasons, it's worth changing it to this.
1 As an easy pushover, I decided to fight with my colleague.
I ended up transferring myself (as a runaway) from area LT to area ST.
Not sure what "area LT and ST" means here.
What a loser!
No idea what this line refers to. The colleague?
2. I saw a 13 -years-old girl died right in front of me.
Every time when I tellingI recount this experience to someone, I couldn’an't hold in my tears.
"retell" is also fine (instead of "recount")
3. My best friend immigranted to another country.
That iwas the only friend I gothad.
4 Job (career?) looks like I can. It seems like I was finally able to broke the “1 year, 1 job change 1 job” curse.
So far the longest period of a single job I have been workingcontinuous work I've done at a single job was 5 years.
Maybe I can break that cycle?
"breaking a cycle" is a common expression for never again repeating a common mistake/wrong-doing.
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Good attempt! Though a little work on grammar could be nice, it's well-written :D
Dec. 23, 2021
thanks
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2021 12 4 Year End 2021 |
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Time to clean up the house? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Time to look back? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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This year is really special for me. This year is really special Since you begin listing reasons, it's worth changing it to this. |
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1 As an easy pushover I decide to fight with my colleague. 1 As an easy pushover, I decided to fight with my colleague. |
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I transferring myself (runaway) from area LT to area ST. I ended up transferring myself (as a runaway) from area LT to area ST Not sure what "area LT and ST" means here. |
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What a loser! What a loser! No idea what this line refers to. The colleague? |
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2 I saw a 13 years girl died in front of me. 2. I saw a 13 |
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Every time when I telling this experience to someone, I couldn’t hold my tear. Every time "retell" is also fine (instead of "recount") |
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3 My best friend immigrant to other country. 3. My best friend immigra |
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That is the only friend I got. That |
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4 Job (career?) looks like I can broke the “1 year change 1 job” curse. 4 |
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So far the longest period of a single job I have been working was 5 years. So far the longest period of |
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Maybe I can break that? Maybe I can break that cycle? "breaking a cycle" is a common expression for never again repeating a common mistake/wrong-doing. |
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